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While she was still a student, a job offer was received. Your answer: While I was still a student, I received a job offer. 7. After John had done calculus problems for hours, his foot went to sleep. After doing calculus problems for hours, John noticed his foot went to sleep. Your answer: After John had done calculus problems for hours, John's foot went to sleep. 8. When we drove over the hill, the ocean came into view. Driving over the hill, we saw the ocean come into view. Your answer: When we drove over the hill, the ocean came into view. 9. Confused by the complicated wording, we couldn't make sense of the contract. Because we were confused by the complicated wording, the contract made no sense. Your answer: Because the contract was confused by complicated wording, it made no sense. 10. After Joe cleared his throat, his voice sounded much better to me. After clearing his throat, Joe sounded much better to me. Your answer: After his throat was clearly, his voice sounded much better to me.
1. After we walked for hours, the car looked wonderful After walking for hours, we thought the car looked wonderful.
Your answer: After I walked for hours, the car looked wonderful. 2. While I am watching a classic film, commercials are irritating. While watching a classic film, I find commercial irritating. Your answer: While I watch a classic film, commercials are irritating. 3. To please the children, they set off some fireworks early. The children were pleased when some fireworks were set off early. Your answer: Some fireworks were set off early to please the children 4. When I was twelve, my mother entered me in a contest. At the age of twelve, I was entered in a contest by my mother. Your answer: When I was twelve, my mother entered me in a contest. 5. Because I took good care of myself, the flu never kept me from work this winter. By taking good care of myself, I never had to take off work for the flu this winter. Your answer: Because I took good care of myself, the flu never kept me from work this winter. 6. Budgeting his money carefully, he finally paid his debts. Because he budgeted his money carefully, his debts were finally paid. Your answer: Because he budgeted his money carefully, his debts were finally paid. 7. To lose weight, you should avoid fatty foods. If you want to lose weight, fatty foods should be avoided. Your answer: Fatty foods should be avoided from her to lose weight. 8. By digging test wells, they located new oil sources. When they dug new test wells, new oil sources were located. Your answer: They digged test wells, so new oil sources were located. 9. Dropped in the bushes, the missing keys were found by the child.
The child found the missing keys that were dropped in the bushes. Your answer: The child found the missing keys dropped in the bushes, 10. Carrying a heavy pile of books, she caught her foot on the step. When she was carrying a heavy pile of books, her foot caught on the step. Your answer: When she carried a heavy pile of books, her foot caught on the step.
9. An army which lacks proper equipment will not be an effective fighting force. ___ 10. To enter the Olympics, an athlete must compete very hard. ___ 11. Television influences children through its emphasis on violence. ___
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13. Never buy a car from a dealer with a broken odometer. 14. Only give the book to Tony. ___
15. American writers who live in Europe gain new perspectives on culture. ___ 16. The car was parked on the edge of a cliff which was rusty. ___ 17. Country music is loved by many people because it praises simple virtues. ___ 18. College students succeed in every aspect who work hard. ___
19. Hitting the tin roof, my sleep was disturbed by the rain. ___ 20. Houses provide comfort for people with central air conditioning. ___ Edit the following essay for dangling and misplaced modifiers. If you see an error, use the appropriate editing symbol (either DM or MM) to label it. Then correct the error. (1) I think you should meet my friends Ted and Fred someday. (2) They are a very unusual pair. (3) Let me illustrate what I mean. (4) One day I decided to stop by their apartment. (5) Ted answered the doorbell dressed in a cowboy suit and invited me in. (6) Fred explained that their costumes were intended to help them enjoy a spaghettiwestern fully. (7) You can imagine my chagrin when I noticed they were wearing genuine .357 Magnums. (8) As I looked around the room, I saw clay targets broken on the floor. (9) At that point, I began to worry about Ted and Fred. (10) Watching the movie, I observed them very carefully. (11) Their reactions were quite different to the western. (12) Engrossed in the fight scenes, Ted was oblivious to his surroundings totally. (13) Fred, on the other hand, fidgeted in his seat until the violence subsided. (14) I started getting nervous and decided to leave. (15) Ted, Fred, and I parted company after that day. (16) Rumor has it that Ted tried to shoot his way out of a paper bag and that Fred organized a posse to catch a marauding rat.
5. Because of his ability in math, the position of Chief Accountant was awarded to Jerry. ___ 6. The Navy offers its recruits many opportunities. ___
7. Science has brought us many miracles which make our lives easier. ___ 8. To obtain a loan, the bank officer must be seen. 9. While driving a car, safety must be of first importance. ___ ___
10. Foods which are low in calories often do not taste as good as foods which contain more calories. ___ 11. Avarice is one of the seven deadly sins which is greed. ___
12. We drove our car into a service station with a flat tire. ___ 13. Television with its emphasis on violence corrupts young children. ___ 14. Terry bought a bike from Mrs. Smith with broken gears. ___
15. British writers gain new perspectives who live in America. ___
16. To swim the English Channel, endurance and strength are required. ___ 17. Puppies are adorable with good dispositions. ___
Modifier Placement
Basic Principle: Modifiers are like teenagers: they fall in love with whatever they're next to. Make sure they're next to something they ought to modify! MISPLACED MODIFIER: Some modifiers, especially simple modifiers only, just, nearly, barely have a bad habit of slipping into the wrong place in a sentence. (In the sentence below, what does it mean to "barely kick" something?) The issue of the proper placement of "only" has Repair Work He kicked that ball barely twenty yards. long been argued among grammarians. Many careful writers will insist that "only" be placed immediately before the word or phrase it modifies. Thus "I only gave him three dollars" would be rewritten as "I gave him only three dollars." Some grammarians, however, have argued that such precision is not really necessary, that there is no danger of misreading "I only gave him three dollars" and that "only" can safely and naturally be placed between the subject and the verb. The argument has been going on for two hundred years. DANGLING MODIFIER: When we begin a sentence with a modifying word, phrase, or clause, we must make sure the next thing that comes along can, in fact, be modified by that modifier. When a modifier improperly modifies something, it is called a "dangling modifier." This often happens with beginning participial phrases, making "dangling participles" an all too common phenomenon. In the sentence below, we can't have a car changing its own oil. Confusion Changing the oil every 3,000 miles, the car seemed to run better. Confusion He barely kicked that ball twenty yards.
Repair Work Changing the oil every 3,000 miles, Fred found he could get much better gas mileage.
A participial phrase followed by an Expletive Construction will often be a dangling participle but the expletive construction is probably not a good idea anyway. This faulty sentence can be remedied by changing the participial phrase into a full-fledged clause with a subject and verb.
Changing the oil every 3,000 miles, there is an easy way to keep your car running smoothly. Repair Work If we change the oil every 3,000 miles, we can keep our car running smoothly.
Confusion
A participial phrase followed by a Passive Verb is also apt to be a dangler because the real actor of the sentence will be disguised. Confusion Changing the oil every 3,000 miles, the car was kept in excellent condition.
Repair Work Changing the oil every 3,000 miles, we kept the car in excellent condition.
An infinitive phrase can also "dangle." The infinitive phrase below should probably modify the person(s) who set up the exercise program. To keep the young recruits interested in getting in shape, an exercise program was set up for the summer months. Repair Work To keep the young recruits interested in getting in shape, the coaching staff set up an exercise program for the summer months. SQUINTING MODIFIER: A third problem in modifier placement is described as a "squinting modifier." This is an unfortunate result of an adverb's ability to pop up almost anywhere in a sentence; structurally, the adverb may function fine, but its meaning can be obscure or ambiguous. For instance, in the sentence below, do the students seek advice frequently or can they frequently improve their grades by seeking advice? You can't tell from that sentence because the adverb often is "squinting" (you can't tell which way it's looking). Let's try placing the adverb elsewhere. Confusion Students who seek their instructors' advice often can improve their grades. Confusion
Repair Work Student who often seek their instructors' advice can improve their grades. Repair Work Students who seek their instructors' advice can often improve their grades.
Practice Exercises 1 Correct the following sentences by using the rules discussed above. Possible answers appear on the last page of this handout. 1. Maintaining a daily exercise program, my weight seemed to decrease faster than usual. 2. To eliminate the errors, the paper needs to be rewritten. 3. While studying for my college exam, my daughter interrupted me and wanted to play 4. Drawing quite a crowd, the auditorium was packed with Garth Brooks fans. 5. Running around the block, the sidewalk seemed slicker than usual. 6. While changing the baby's diaper, the powder fell on the floor.
7. Even as an athlete who has competed in the 5k run, the dog was able to run faster than me. 8. Carrying the groceries to the car, my foot got stuck in a pot hole. 9. Taking the chance that she might win, the lottery ticket seemed a small price to pay. 10. Having recognized the mistake, the problem seemed much easier to fix. 11. As a traveling businessman, my mom didn't get to see my dad very often. 12. While learning how to ride a bike, my knees got skinned up quite a bit. 13. Carrying the clubs for the golfers, the tees got lost by the caddy. 14. Removing the tag from the pillow, the pillowcase seemed to fit better. 15. Upon sitting down at the bar, the beer was waiting for us. 16. After removing the old songs from the jukebox, the music seemed to get better. 17. To end the trial, the documents were signed. 18. In sending the flowers to that address, the wrong house received the delivery. 19. Sparkling with flames, the water was used to extinguish the fire. 20. As a member of the school board, children are my dad's favorite topic. 21. Coloring the pages with neon crayons, the pictures seemed to come alive on the paper. 22. Removing her hat before entering the church, the priest nodded for her to sit on the third row. 23. Explaining the format for completing the form, the document shouldn't take too long to fill out. 24. As a manager of a major league baseball team, my six-year-old daughter would like to see one of our games. 25. To score a hole in one, the golf club must be just right.
Practice Exercise 1 Answers The following revisions are just some of the options for eliminating the dangling modifiers in each sentence. If you have different options youre not sure of, ask a tutor to go over them with you. 1. My weight seemed to decrease faster than usual as I maintained a daily exercise program. or While I maintained a daily exercise program, I seemed to lose weight faster than usual. 2. I need to rewrite the paper to eliminate the errors. or To eliminate errors, I need to rewrite the paper. 3. While I studied for my college exam, my daughter interrupted me and wanted to play dolls. 4. Garth Brooks fans packed the auditorium as the show drew quite a crowd. or Drawing quite a crowd, Garth Brooks packed the auditorium. 5. The sidewalk seemed slicker than usual as I ran around the block. 6. While I was changing the babys diaper, the powder fell on the floor. 7. The dog was able to run faster than I, an athlete who has competed in the 5k run. or Even as an athlete who has competed in the 5k run, I was not able to run as fast as the dog. 8. As I carried the groceries to the car, my foot got stuck in a pothole. 9. The price of the lottery ticket seemed a small price to pay considering she might win. 10. The problem seemed much easier to fix after Sally recognized the mistake. or After she recognized the mistake, Sally found it much easier to fix the problem. 11. My mom didnt get to see my dad, who is a traveling businessman, very often. or Because my dad is a traveling businessman, my mom doesnt get to see him very often. 12. My knees got skinned up quite a bit while I was learning how to ride a bike. or While Iwas learning how to ride a bike, I skinned my knees up quite a bit. 13. The caddy, who carried the clubs for the golfers, lost the tees. or While carrying the clubs for the golfers, the caddy lost the tees. 14. After Beverly removed the tag from the pillow, the pillowcase seemed to fit better. 15. The beer was already on the bar as we sat down. or Upon sitting down at the bar, we noticed the beer was waiting for us. 16. The music seemed to get better after we removed the old songs from the jukebox. 17. The judge signed the documents to end the trial. 18. The wrong house received the delivery after Kyle sent the flowers to the wrong address. 19. As the house sparkled with flames, the firemen used the water to extinguish the fire. 20. As a member of the school board, my dads favorite topic is children. or Because he is a member of the school board, my dads favorite topic is children. 21. Coloring the pages with neon crayons, Brealyn made the pictures come alive on the paper. or As she colored the pages with neon crayons, Brealyn made the pictures come alive on the paper.
22. After Cyndi removed her hat before the entering the church, the priest nodded for her to sit on the third row. 23. Once Jimmy explains the format for completing the form, the document shouldnt take long to fill out. 24. My daughter would like to see one of my major league baseball games since I am the teams manager. 25. In order to score a hole in one, Saras golf club must be just right.
Verbal phrases (gerund, participial, infinitive) which do not clearly and logically refer to a noun or pronoun in the sentence are called dangling modifiers. A. DANGLING GERUND PHRASE: A dangling gerund phrase can be corrected by adding a noun or a pronoun for it to modify. Original: After finishing the research, the job was easy. Revision: After finishing the research, we found the job to be easy. Another way to correct a dangling gerund phrase is to make the phrase a clause. Original: After finishing the research, the job was easy. Revision: After we finished the research, the job was easy. B. DANGLING PARTICIPIAL PHRASE A participle is a word that ends in "ing" or "ed" and looks like a verb; yet it actually is an adjective that must modify a specific noun or pronoun. If it doesn't, it is called a dangling participle. The three most common forms of dangling participles are caused by the writer not observing the following rules. 1. The participle should be placed closed to the word to which it refers, and there should be no intervening noun to which the participle might seem to refer. Original: A complete report is submitted by our branch office, giving details about this transaction. ("Giving" is the participle; it should modify "report," but it seems to modify the intervening noun "office.") Revision: Our branch office submitted a complete report, giving details about this transaction. CLUE: Sometimes changing the sentence from the passive to active voice will correct the modification problem. 2. A participle at the beginning of a sentence (or at the beginning of a second independent clause in a compound sentence) should refer to the subject of the sentence of the independent clause. Original: Working at full speed every morning, fatigue overtakes many of the employees in the afternoon.
Revision: Working a full speed every morning, many of the employees become tired in the afternoon. 3. A participle following the main clause should refer to a definite noun, not to the general thought expressed by the clause. Original: These accounts disappeared from the vault, thus causing us very much worry. (Instead of modifying a particular word, "causing" modifies the entire clause that appears before the comma.) Many times the idea conveyed in the dangling participial phrase should be emphasized rather than subordinated in a modifying phrase. In order to emphasize the idea and to get rid of the dangling modifier, the writer should transform the participial phrase into an independent clause-Revision: Because the accounts disappeared from the vault, we are very worried. C. DANGLING INFINITIVE PHRASE Correct a dangling infinitive phrase by supplying the missing noun or pronoun that provides the subject of the infinitive phrase. Original: To improve typing skills, practice is needed. Revision: To improve typing skills, you must practice. Original: To evaluate the feasibility of the project, the centralized plan will be compared with the present system of dispersing facility sites. Revision: To evaluate the feasibility of the project, the committee will compare the centralized plan with the present system of dispersing facility sites. D. DANGLING SUBORDINATE CLAUSE Occasionally a subject and verb are omitted from a dependent clause, forming what is known as an elliptical clause. If the omitted subject of the elliptical clause is not the same as the subject of the main clause, the construction dangles. Simply adding the subject and verb to the elliptical clause solves the problem. Original: When ten years old, his father started the company. Revision: When Bill Krebs was ten years old, his father started the company.
Exercise 1: In the following sentences underline the modifying phrases and/or subordinate clauses, and indicate whether the sentence is correct (C), or whether the sentence contains a misplaced (M) or dangling (D) modifier. Sample: __M__ Being an old customer, we know that you are familiar with our Christmas displays. 1. _____ The check arrived six days late, causing me to write a collection letter. 2. _____ Realizing our mistake, we immediately sent a new one to replace the first check. 3. _____ Please go down to the main office, and lying on the manager's desk you will find a copy of the latest report. 4. _____ To enjoy a 5% earning, a savings account should be opened. 5. _____ Being a savings association, our customers do not have checking accounts here. 6. _____ When changing monthly loan payments, it will be necessary to get approval from the loan department. 7. _____ To improve product appeal, the sales staff decided to use blister packaging. Exercise 2: Rewrite the following sentences to correct any misplaced or dangling modifiers. 1. If paid within ten days, you will receive a 3% discount. 2. Your new account has been approved after viewing your personal background and excellent reputation. To familiarize you with our billing process, you will receive an itemized bill the first of each month. 3. In reviewing your case, several questions came to my mind. 4. Before buying a car, a loan must be obtained usually. 5. To obtain the best results, the instructions must be followed closely.
6. Having been damaged in the tornado, we weren't able to inventory all the glassware. 7. To complete the research, more data must be acquired. 8. Those files are incomplete, causing the confusion in our personnel department. 9. Rushing to meet the manager's deadline, many mistakes were made. 10. I recommend her as an employee without qualification.
across the bay. 8. Vacations abroad are very inexpensive when working for a hotel chain. 9. I saw descending a fire escape a policeman. 10. There was a discussion yesterday on the incidence of suicide among students in the Deans office.
Answer Key
Answers will vary. Brown designates the modifier, and violet the word being modified. 2. He had almost lost all the buttons off his coat. (original) He had lost almost all the buttons off his coat. (correction) 3. Convicted of murdering his wife, the judge sentenced him to life imprisonment. Convicted of murdering his wife, he was sentenced by the judge to life imprisonment. 4. Most accidents take place when tired. Most accidents take place when people are tired. 5. When at university, my high marks in mathematics attracted the attention of my professor. When at university, I earned high marks in mathematics, attracting the attention of my professor. 6. Previously viewed as an exploration of the unconscious, critics now also see Alice in Wonderland as social and political satire. Previously viewed as an exploration of the unconscious, Alice in Wonderland is now also seen by critics as social and political satire. 7. Standing at the hotel window, the yachts with their colourful spinnakers raced across the bay. Standing at the hotel window, I could see the yachts with their colourful spinnakers racing across the bay. 8. Vacations abroad are very inexpensive when working for a hotel chain Vacations abroad are very inexpensive when one works for a hotel chain. 9. I saw descending a fire escape a policeman. I saw a policeman descending a fire escape. Or
As I descended the fire escape, I saw a policeman. 10. There was a discussion yesterday on the incidence of suicide among students in the Deans office. There was a discussion in the Deans office yesterday on the incidence of suicide among students.
Correcting Dangling Modifiers Exercises: Rewrite the following sentences to correct the dangling modifiers. Identify which word the phrase or clause is modifying. 1. To get to town quickly, the highway is best. 2. While jogging one morning, the solution was suddenly obvious. 3. At the age of five, Pauls uncle took him to the circus. 4. Wandering aimlessly in the woods, the first sight of camp was welcome. 5. After hearing of the refugees plight, emergency funds were made available. 6. Getting up much earlier than usual, the house seemed strangely quiet. 7. To receive the free booklet, a stamped, self-addressed envelope must be enclosed. 8. Absorbed in the puzzle, the time passed very quickly. 9. To keep up with the news, a daily paper is a must. 10. Sailing far out from shore, a squall suddenly arose. Correcting Misplaced and Dangling Modifiers Exercise: Rewrite the following paragraph to correct any misplaced or dangling modifiers. Stan is a successful architect and interior designer whose custom-built homes stagger the imagination. Priced beyond what the average person can afford, his unique inspiration can be seen in the house on the corner. The front of the house is made entirely of glass. Extended outward from the second floor, eight vertical steel pillars support a balcony. Within the center of the house, a huge tropical aquarium rests on a marble floor five feet in diameter. A wrought iron staircase winds its way around the aquarium connecting the first and second stories. Recessed in the ceilings, each room is softly lit by fluorescent lights. To enjoy music in any location, there is a dial on the wall next to the thermostat. In the winter, fireplaces provide warmth; in the summer, cool air is circulated by fans. By closing your eyes and dreaming, the house can become yours.