December 11, 2013 Dr.

Leslie Bruce Department of English, Comparative Literature, and Linguistics California State University, Fullerton P.O. Box 34080 Fullerton, CA 92834-9480 Dear Dr. Bruce, The purpose of the cover letter is to demonstrate my excellent writing abilities through completing the student learning outcomes (SLOs). Ive decided to include my revised profile essay, the original profile essay with your comments, a paragraph from my persuasive essay, and finally a peer review written by me and a peer review document written for me. The revised profile essay will account for the majority of the fulfillment of the SLO requirements. This essay demonstrates my ability to write formally, in and out of the class, for a variety of audiences and purposes. This essay was written for my peers and for you, the teacher, to provide the necessary information to consider adding water resistance to your current workout regimen. This essay also fulfills the second SLO. I had some difficulty providing correct citations in my original paper. I thought that I had done them correctly but after looking at your comments I realized my mistake. For instance, all my citations were presented as end of sentence citations. However this didnt provide the correct introduction to the sources of my citation and it didnt bring credibility to them either. Youll notice that in my revised essay Ive corrected all the citations and provided them with the proper introduction and brought credibility to them by providing some of their credentials. The revised profile essay also helped me demonstrate my ability to organize my thoughts and communicate them clearly. The essay is written in way that flows much better than my original submission and communicates to the reader much better. In addition, the revised essay also displays my ability to satisfy the fifth SLO. Ive written a paper that is sensitive to gender and cultural differences and refrains from using improper language as not to offend the reader. In order to fulfil the informal writing portion of the first SLO Ive included a single page of my rough draft for my persuasive essay. I really enjoyed the in class assignment where we broke apart the essay into individual portions (claim, reason, and evidence) in order to help us write better. I did the same exercise at home when I was writing my persuasive essay. It provided an easier method to writing my persuasive essay by taking it in baby steps rather than attempting to take the essay on as a whole entity. The fulfillment of the third SLO is demonstrated in an excerpt from my persuasive essay. My original point was to demonstrate the importance of working out in water and the benefits that an athlete can gain from doing workouts in water. However a counter point that could be presented was that not all athletes have access to a body of water that allows them to do those workouts in water. My rebuttal to that point states that if an athlete is motivated enough then they will seek out a body of water in order to have those water workouts. Finally my last SLO to satisfy is the sixth SLO. I had Stephanie Borja take a second look at my profile essay. I had her review the submitted profile essay and see what suggestions she had about my paper. She gave a lot of positive feedback and made some hand written suggestions as well. She helped me revise my first paragraph so that it was more fluid than what I had originally submitted. Im also submitting a peer review that I wrote for Stephanie and her

persuasive essay. It has some positive feedback as well as some suggestions to make her paper better. Hopefully with the completion of all these SLOs I have demonstrated how Ive improved from the beginning of the class. Going forward I hope that these skills that Ive learned can be used in future papers. Sincerely, Javier Acevez