Focus Comments Targets

Cinematography Nice range of shots N/A

Appropriate pace and
content
Paced fairly well 59-69 seconds could be
paced faster
Character representations Representation is clear N/A
Targeting the audience Not sure if this targets the
right audience
Target the audience
better
Dialogue Dialogue easily tells us
the type of characters
they are
Dialogue is a bit too
spaced out though
Music/ sound effects Sound effects clearly tell
what is happening. There
is also a good range of
music
N/A
Editing Lots of suitable editing Could have some
additional range of
transitions
Additional focus: Plot Childish plot. Not sure if it
appeals to target
audience.