Peer Review: Reflective Essay draft

Authors name: Brandon Morris

Reviewers name: _________Ugochukwu Okechukwu__________________
Author: Provide the following information about your essay:
1. Write your thesis statement/main idea below (if it is still a work in progress, say so)
The main idea Im aiming for in my reflection is growth as an individual.
2. Write out one or two questions about your draft you would like your reviewer to answer.
Is everything covered?
Reviewer: Read the writers entire draft once. As you reread the draft, respond to the following:
1. Introductory paragraph(s): Write down the sentence or sentences that contain this reflection
papers main idea (according to you). Does the author focus on an overarching theme/metaphor/quote
symbol/etc.? Suggest how the thesis statement/main idea could be strengthened, clarified, or otherwise
improved. Does the author state which evidence will be examined in the rest of the essay? Suggest
how the author could improve this part of the essay.

At the beginning of the semester, I expected this English class to be exactly like the previous English
classes I had already taken my freshmen and sophomore year. It quickly came apparent that this class
was less about writing about how you would create an unnecessarily long and drawn out report on an
unoriginal topic and more about how writing and research could help someone achieve employment,
scholarships, and/ or other business related goals. Yes his evidence are well stated. Also talk more in
details how that class has improved you.

2. Supporting paragraphs: Check to make sure the content of the paper supports the thesis and that
additional evidence or content is not needed to support it. Indicate one paragraph in which the writers
evidence is strong, and state the reasons why you think so. Then find one paragraph that needs more
evidence. Drawing from your own experiences or understanding of the type of assignment the author is
discussing, suggest evidence that might work to better illustrate or develop the main idea or subclaims.

When the first assignments we given, I found that they required not too much time to
complete and were somewhat similar introduction assignments to other classes
introductory work. However, unlike other courses, these led expanded into future topics
for reading and writing.

3. Organization: Number the paragraphs in the authors paper. Then, use the space below to describe
the purpose or main idea of each paragraph. Check to make sure the paper follows a consistent
organizational pattern and is effectively organized with clear paragraphs (focused around one subclaim) and smooth transitional/topic sentences. When you finish, suggest where the writer might
improve the organization of the paper through the use of transitional sentences, by focusing on one
topic in each paragraph, by restructuring the order of paragraphs, etc.
He thought his English class was like his previous class. Talk more about our it has improved you.
He thought the assignment would not take a lot of time. How easy did you understand it.
After he understood the topic he could write project faster.

4. List the 2 most important things the author should focus on during revision.
Grammatical errors
More details works on how your writing how improved
Need a quote
5. Respond to the authors questions in number 2.
Youre on the right track everything is covered

Author: When your essay is returned, read the comments by your peer reviewer and do the following:
1. Compare your description of the thesis statement with your readers. Consider your readers
comments and revise your thesis statement if necessary.

2. What additional evidence from the research youve read, from your experiences, from your
observations, etc. would strengthen the support for your thesis?

3. Make a revision plan. List, in order of importance, the 3 most important things that you need to do
as you revise your essay.