Talcott

Peer Workshop
By Evan Barnett
Intro (Page 1)
I really like the design of the webpage. Dark background and light text is always a plus! Makes it very
easy to read, and the red font jumps out at you. I believe you said you werent sure on the picture and
just left it as the stock photo, so Ill leave that up to you. I tried to differentiate them from each page at
least, and also link somewhat into what I was talking about. Maybe that will give you some ideas.
The introduction you wrote was a good balance of describing what the page was, your thoughts and
feelings towards it and what the purpose of creating this website was. I like that you gave a little bit of
background information about EE. It allows the reader to be able to relate more.
Genre Analysis (Page 2)
I think you chose the correct page layout here. It segues well into the description of the page. You
explained very efficiently what your paper was about, however maybe you can tie in a little more about
what the Genre Analysis is/was. It might help the reader to think about Genres in a different context as
we were taught. Also, maybe include a bit more background as to why the Medias negative light on FPS
games is important to you.
Overall, a clean, efficient page. It gets the point across and is easy to work through. Just add a little
more background information on the subject and you should be good.
Micro-Ethnography (Page 3)
Here you explained well on what a Micro-Ethnography is. Its also good you were able to include the
observations and interviews. You did well on saying why you chose a Pottery class as a discourse
community. I think one thing to include in this description would be any trials and tribulations you had
in conducting the interviews. And/or anything interesting you noted in your observations. Perhaps you
had preconceived notions of pottery making?
I think you could expand on the sources you were not familiar with- add a link to the pottery site for
audience reference. What style of writing do you normally use? Does the audience know?

Forum Posts (Page 4)
This description is very well suited to forum posts. For references, the audience need only look at the
posts you have provided. I think it was beneficial that you included your own personal methods of
completing the forum posts. It helps assign an identity to you, and conveys that identity to your
audience.

Now that I think about it; the posts you provide will undoubtedly illustrate your examples in the
description, but it may be helpful to include a written one in the description. Maybe one you found
particularly interesting, a link to one of the readings, etc. Good job.

Day-Book Activities (Page 5)
I like how you ended this description. I felt the same way- even more so in that I usually try to think
things over before putting them down on paper. Im sure most of the audience would be able to relate
as well. In writing this, you were able to make a connection and keep readers interested in what you are
presenting to them.
For this section, perhaps you could describe your own thoughts of the Day-Book Activities themselves.
Did they improve your writing? I think you essentially say that with the forced me to come up with
ideas quicker than I was used to. Or describe the class atmosphere while completing them. Did most
people seem nervous, impatient, ambivalent, etc.
Other Assignments (Page 6)
This is a bit tricky. I think the introduction does the job of preparing the audience for the reading. I can
see this introduction as sort of a hook for the reader. Perhaps they are wondering why you never liked
writing- But you will go on to explain that, procrastination and other preconceived notions in the letter
to Olivia and the 2 reflections.
Apart from that, I like how you split up the introductions and made them pertain to their respective
assignments. Im not sure what else I would do; I think this page does its job very well, I.e., not much I
can think of to improve upon.

Category

Genre Analysis
(20 points)

Micro-Ethnography
(20 points)

Midterm Reflection

Scoring Criteria
Genre Proposal
2 peer workshops
Draft 2
Olivia's comments (either comments or summary)
Revision Workshop
Final Draft (see rubric)
Field Notes & Interview Questions
Swales Chart
Outline
2 peer workshops
Draft 2
Olivia's comments (either comments or summary)
Final Draft (see rubric)
PowerPoint Presentation
Final Draft (see rubric)

Total
Points
1
2
1
1
1
14
1
1
1
2
1
1
11
2
5

Score
0
0
1
0
0
0
0
0
0
0
0
0
0
0
5

(5 points)
Final Reflection
(15 points)
Daily
Assignments
(5 points)
Overall
Construction
(10 points)
Portfolio
(5 points)

Score

2 peer workshops
Final Draft (see rubric)
Letter to Olivia
5 Daybook Entries
2 In-Class Assignments
5 Discussion Forum Posts
5 Discussion Forum Replies
2 peer workshops
A short introduction is included for each page, which
includes a detailed description of the items presented.
The portfolio meets the needs of the intended audience.
The portfolio contains a strong personal introduction that
frames the rest of the portfolio.
The writer demonstrates a firm grasp of the conventions
of written English (spelling, capitalization, punctuation
etc.). There are no typos.
Total Points

1.5
13.5
1
1
1
1
1
1
1
1
1

0
0
1
0
0
0
0
0
1
1
0
1

1
70

I honestly do not think this rubric was entirely necessary at this point. She did say we only needed to
have the introductions for the peer workshops. Once you get all the work in and add a bit more to the
background information for the introductions, I think youll be set!