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sentence where I made a simple change was The tuition for this course is only $7,000, and
includes the cost for Basic Life Support Certification, Advanced Cardiac Life Support
Certification, and Pediatric Advanced Life Support Certification. First I change the and before
the description of what the tuition includes to which since it seems like a better word choice to
show what the tuition included. I also struck out the $ symbol since I had the word dollars after
the quantity since it seemed redundant and unnecessary. Further in the essay, I didnt frame a
quote very well by using the word saying, which was not necessary. Without the word, the quote
flowed better within my paper and seemed more natural.
Revising my paper once again afterwards helped me to better understand the student
learning objectives set out for us to learn through the assignment. It helped me to notice how
much further I had to analyze a different source like an advertisement to understand what exactly
the advertisement was trying to make their audience do. Through the revision of my paper, I
further analyzed the advertisement and was able to better understand it in order to make sure that
I included all the necessary information that most students look for. It also helped me better
understand how the advertisement used pathos, logos, and ethos to their advantage by making me
reflect on the way they used it and how it influenced my opinion on the university.
Overall, I am not disappointed in myself as the amount of things I later decided to change
in my paper. There were a few errors that I felt like I could have caught earlier, like grammatical
errors and word choices, if I would have paid closer attention to my own writing. As far as the
amount of effort needed to analyze an outside source, like an advertisement, I noticed that it
takes a great deal of attention to detail. In the end everyone makes mistakes, it is just important
to learn from them to grow; in this case, as a writer.