Economy

What is economy? If you ask me about it I may answer in many ways, but
im gonna start by saying that nowadays its very important and is reflect
in many things around us. It is a system of production, and the trade of
goods and services of a company or a country. It tries to balance the
available resources, against the wants and needs of consumers.
There are three types of economy: planned economy, market economy and
mixed economy. In a planned economy the government makes all decisions
for society. The main benefits are that most workers are employed and
most people enjoy a similar basic lifestyle. In market economies the
government limits to provide legislation to protect businesses and
consumers. The mixed economy is a combination of both planned and
market

economies.

(technically

this

is

plagiarism

http://businesscasestudies.co.uk/vodafone/using-technology-to-improveeconomies/what-is-an-economy.html#axzz3WXdm06Qh)
Economy is the basis of all countries, it is everything around us, it's useful
to maintain or balance money, it has become mostly a way to improve or
increase our incomes, every company and more specifically every person
things about the economy a thousand times a day.
Finally, I think that if people make good better use of

the economy it

would bring many benefits to the companies, the countries, the

businesses, and us. I cannot say I have a detailed use of economy in my
life, thus the money I have, comes from what my parents give me every
month, that's not as much as in a company, but even though I've learned
that if I make a proper use of it, I can make great things.
Mariana Riao 8
Ok, you have made some nice points here, but half your essay is plagiarised
from other sources. You must use quotation marks or re-write the material into
your own words!

You have some little mistakes with determiners (the), word choice, word form
(conjugation) and you have used gonna !

Area
Task Response

high
fully addresses all parts of the task
presents a fully developed position in
answer to the question with relevant, fully
extended and well supported ideas

Coherence and
Cohesion

uses cohesion in such a way that it

attracts no attention
skilfully manages paragraphing
uses a wide range of vocabulary
with very natural and
sophisticated control of lexical
features; rare minor errors occur
only as slips

Lexical Resource

Grammatical Range uses a wide range of structures with

and Accuracy
full flexibility and accuracy; rare minor
errors occur only as slips
Formatting
Emails have name, class, and title in
subject line.
Essay has a title, name, and class.
Other formatting guidelines are followed.
Paragraphs
Student uses paragraph structures.
Forming them correctly based around
subject
Capitalization and
Student uses both competently and
punctuation.
fluidly.

low
barely responds to the
20-0
task
does not express a
position
may attempt to present
one or two ideas
but there is no
development
has very little control of 20-0
organizational
features
uses an extremely limited 20-0
range
of vocabulary; essentially
no
control of word formation
and/or
spelling
cannot use sentence
20-0
forms except in
memorized phrases
Student fails to use
10
formatting

Grade
17

Student fails to use any

form.

Student fails to use any. 5

doesnt use sentence
structure

100-0

14
16

15
10

Total
77 -70