Redundancy can happen in the middle of sentences too. The plump fat cow mooed at me. The slippery, newly-shining floor caused problems for the students.
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september 22 2015 agenda redundancy and coordinate adjectives 2
Redundancy can happen in the middle of sentences too. The plump fat cow mooed at me. The slippery, newly-shining floor caused problems for the students.
Redundancy can happen in the middle of sentences too. The plump fat cow mooed at me. The slippery, newly-shining floor caused problems for the students.
2) Review: Locating redundancy in writing and fixing it.
3) You try it.
4) Coordinate adjectives 101 5) You try it.
FINISHING FROM YESTERDAY:
Write one 4 sentence paragraph that
follows the NTSSTS principle.
You try it review
*Sarah was hungry. *She ate fifteen hot dogs at lunch. Make the above sentences into a compound sentence and a complex sentence.
Redundancy can happen in many forms.
Yesterday we talked about redundancy at the beginning of sentences. I think I love her. I think shes so hot. I think Im going to lose my mind when I see her in class today. I think I want to marry her
However, redundancy can happen in the
middle of sentences too.
Heather whispered quietly in the library.
You dont need to describe whispered
with the word quietly. Its redundant. The meaning of whisper involves something done quietly.
The dishonest man cheated on the
college exam. He wasnt truthful at all.
Dishonest = wasnt truthful.
No need to say it twice. Thats being redundant.
The boy shouted and hollered on the
playground.
Shouted is the same thing as hollered.
Dont need to say it twice in the same sentence.
The huge giant towered over me.
Giants are huge. No need to be
redundant.
Kids sometimes use adjectives to
describe nouns in the same way. This can also lead to redundancy. The plump fat cow mooed at me.
My dirty, unclean room annoyed my
mother. Dirty and unclean are the same thing.
You try it Redundant or not? 1) The teacher screamed loudly at the principal.
2) John bought a new glistening,
sparkling car in his dream.
3) The slippery, newly-shined floor
caused problems for the students.
4) The new, unused marker lay on the
floor.
5) The dead grass was surprisingly soft
on my feet.
6) The old, ancient teacher needed to
retire yesterday.
7) The wet water drenched my clothes.
8) The grumpy and cranky troll
frightened me.
9) My intimidating father scolded me
for missing my curfew twice in a row.
10) The speakers buzzed in my ears.
Once you establish that the two
adjectives are not redundant, you need to make sure you punctuate them correctly. Heres the rule:
Deciding when a comma is necessary
If two or more adjectives are coordinate, a comma is used to separate them to provide clarity. If you can replace the comma with the word and and reverse the order of the adjectives, the comma is necessary.
Example 1 (CORRECT):
Slippery, treacherous roads are common after a big snowfall.
Slippery and treacherous roads are common after a big
snowfall.
Treacherous, slippery roads are common after a big
snowfall.
Example 2 (INCORRECT):
Shannon loves wearing pink nylon sweaters in the winter.
Shannon loves wearing pink and nylon sweaters in the
winter.
Shannon loves wearing nylon, pink sweaters in the winter.
More Examples:
*The shiny red sports car zoomed down
the street. The shiny and red sports car zoomed down the street. That sounds dumb, so drop the comma.
*The hot, windy day irritated me.
The hot and windy day irritated me. That sounds ok, so keep the comma
You try it.Do the
coordinate adjectives need a comma or not????
1) The tall slender man walked
through the park.
2) The sticky yellow glue dripped on
arm.
3) The evil brown snake hid in the
garden.
4) The old dusty keyboard had
smoke billowing from it.
5) The football team wore shiny
black helmets.
6) The moldy gross paper fell from
the students desk.
7) Kevin wore a flashing circular
button on his jacket.
8) The magical colorful sunset sent
chills up my spine.
You try it.
Write two sentences with coordinate
adjectives that should have a comma. Write two sentences with coordinate adjectives that should not have a comma.