Multiculturalism in the UK

According to the opinion of Rob from London, United Kingdom, foreign people from
different countries in the world can live in peace. This is because in this country,
people respect the cultural, religious, races, among others issues. Immigrants

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actually, can integrate to the society and act as common British citizens. In addition
to this opinion, the author expose his point of view against foreign that are not
happy in the country, saying if they not feel comfortable with the British culture,
they can move to a country where they can fix better inside of it. So as the public
can read this opinion, can infer two different points of view from native British

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separate paragraph

people. On one hand, the United Kingdom society feels comfortable with the
immigrants or refugees, in some cases, living in their country. This is because,

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foreign works to adapt them in this new culture, accepting their religious, rules,

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historical issues and so on. In addition to the previous point, immigrants can apply

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for the same rights of native people, like getting married, work, buy a propriety,

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among others, and live just like as a common native British citizen unafraid to

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express their cultural customs. On the other hand, the previous opinion shows a
kind of hostility from the author against a little number of immigrants who are not

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pleased with the country where they are living now. The writer of this opinion
exposed that little group of foreign do not want to participate in the typical activities
of the community because of racist, religious, cultural issues. This people are not

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respecting the United Kingdom rules nether the way of life of the citizens and they

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are segregating their culture from the other different, living in the same

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neighborhood and applying their our cultural and religious rules, left the British

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rules away from them. Another issue is how this rebels immigrants react to foreign

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people with different beliefs. As the author explains in his comment, this little

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communities acts with violence against dissimilar culture citizens, attacking them

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and do not respecting the rules of the country where are they living now.

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Concluding with this point, the owner of this opinion suggest to this people to move

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to a country where they can feel relaxed with their cultural issues and they can fix

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better into the society. As a final conclusion of the comment of this person from the
United Kingdom, like in every society are different points of view about the

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immigrants in the country. Some of them contribute to create a better society

showing how can they help to the community with their actions, ideas and

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behavior, respecting different life styles, beliefs, religious, among others. Although,

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there are few little groups against the country where they are living because they

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are trying to create a little cultural state in places where they living. This problem
must be stopped by the government and maybe they can create laws to respect
the foreign culture rules but at the same time respect the British law let them
interfere when it should be necessary.
Lucas Salas Ferrada
Section 1

CORRECTIONS: MULTICULTURALISM IN THE UK.

Singularity: among others issues

Correction: among other issues.
Third person mistake: the author expose his point of view against foreign that are
not happy in the country.
Correction: the author exposes his point of view against foreigners that are not
happy in the country.
Missing word mistake: saying if they not feel comfortable with the British culture.
Correction: saying if they do not feel comfortable with the British culture.
Organization mistake: So as the public can read this opinion, can infer two
different points of view from native British people.
Correction: So as the public can read this opinion, can infer two different points of
view from native British people. (This idea is a summary of a previous ideas.
According to the reaction paper, this idea should be in a different paragraph).

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Punctuation mistake: This is because, foreign works to adapt them in this new
culture
Correction: This is because foreign works to adapt them in this new culture
Word choice: This is because, foreign works to adapt them in this new culture,
accepting their religious, rules, historical issues and so on.
Correction: This is because foreigners work to adapt to this new culture, accepting
their religions, rules, historical issues and so on.
Prepositional mistake: This is because, foreign works to adapt them in this new
culture, accepting their religious, rules, historical issues and so on.
Correction: This is because foreigners work to adapt to this new culture, accepting
their religions, rules, historical issues and so on.
Word choice: This is because, foreign works to adapt them in this new culture,
accepting their religious, rules, historical issues and so on.
Correction: This is because foreigners work to adapt to this new culture, accepting
their religions, rules, historical issues and so on.
Word Choice: In addition to the previous point, immigrants can apply for the same
rights of native people
Correction: In addition to the previous point, immigrants can have the same rights
of native people
Correlation mistake: like getting married, work, buy a propriety, among others.
Correction: like getting married, working, buying a property, among others.
Spelling mistake: like getting married, work, buy a propriety, among others.
Correction: like getting married, working, buying a property, among others.
Pluralization mistake: The writer of this opinion exposed that little group of foreign
do not want to participate

Correction: The writer of this opinion exposed that little groups of foreigners do not
want to participate
Word choice: The writer of this opinion exposed that little group of foreign do not
want to participate
Correction: The writer of this opinion exposed that little groups of foreigners do not
want to participate
Pluralization mistake: This people are not respecting the United Kingdom rules
Correction: These people are not respecting the United Kingdom rules
Spelling mistake: This people are not respecting the United Kingdom rules nether
the way of life of the citizens.
Correction: This people are not respecting the United Kingdom rules neither the
way of life of the citizens.
Structure mistake: and they are segregating their culture from the other
different
Correction: and they are segregating their culture from the host country
Word choice: living in the same neighborhood and applying their our cultural
and religious rules, left the British rules away from them.
Correction: living in the same neighborhood and applying their own cultural and
religious rules, leaving the British rules away from them.
Correlation mistake: living in the same neighborhood and applying their our
cultural and religious rules, left the British rules away from them.
Correction: living in the same neighborhood and applying their own cultural and
religious rules, leaving the British rules away from them.
Word choice: Another issue is how this rebels immigrants react to foreign people
with different beliefs.

Correction: Another issue is how these rebel immigrants react to foreign people
with different beliefs.
Word choice: As the author explains in his comment, this little communities acts
with violence against dissimilar culture citizens.
Correction: As the author explains in his comment, these little communities act
with violence against dissimilar culture citizens.
Addition mistake: attacking them and do not respecting the rules of the country
where are they living now.
Correction: attacking them and not respecting the rules of the country where are
they living now.
Subject, verb, agreement: the owner of this opinion suggest to this people to
move to a country where they can feel relaxed with their cultural issues and they
can fix better into the society.
Correction: the owner of this opinion suggests this people to move to a country
where they can feel relaxed with their cultural issues and they can fix better into the
society.
Addition mistake: the owner of this opinion suggest to this people to move to a
country where they can feel relaxed with their cultural issues and they can fix better
into the society.
Correction: the owner of this opinion suggest this people to move to a country
where they can feel relaxed with their cultural issues and they can fix better into the
society.
Omission: As a final conclusion of the comment of this person from the United
Kingdom, like in every society are different points of view about the immigrants in
the country

Correction: As a final conclusion of the comment of this person from the United
Kingdom, like in every society there are different points of view about the
immigrants in the country.
Addition: Some of them contribute to create a better society showing how can
they help to the community with their actions
Correction: Some of them contribute to create a better society showing how can
they help the community with their actions
Word choice: Some of them contribute to create a better society showing how can
they help to the community with their actions, ideas and behavior, respecting
different life styles, beliefs, religious, among others.
Correction: Some of them contribute to create a better society showing how can
they help to the community with their actions, ideas and behavior, respecting
different life styles, beliefs, religions, among others.
Punctuation: Although, there are few little groups against the country where they
are living because they are trying to create a little cultural state in places where
they living.
Correction: Although there are few little groups against the country where they are
living because they are trying to create a little cultural state in places where they
living.
Word choice: This problem must be stopped by the government and maybe they
can create laws to respect the foreign culture rules but at the same time respect
the British law let them interfere when it should be necessary.
Correction: This problem must be stopped by the government and maybe they
can create laws to respect the foreign culture rules but at the same time respect
the British law let them work when it should be necessary.