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Fernando Mendoza
Professor Sharon Lim
English 114A
2 December 2015
Reflection
Writing wasn't really my thing, I was better at math. But after taking this English
114A course I was able to improve my writing skills. As a writer I has strength and
weaknesses just like an athlete where he had weaknesses to improve, I had to do the
same to that my writing could be coherent enough so that that the reader could
understand my writing. My strength as a writer was that I had great ideas and thesiss
but my grammar and punctuation wasn't really that great which made my ideas
sometimes not understandable to the reader. So throughout this essay I am going to
talk to you about my strengths and weaknesses as a writer, but most importantly I will
show you how I improved my weaknesses to become a better writer.
Like I said before I my Strengths were that I had good Ideas and thesiss. For
example, this is my thesis for my Bullying essay, Cyberbullying can have both a
negative effect on the bully and the victim because it can lead to the bully becoming a
violent person while the victim who is the person that is being bullied could have
depression and mental issues. The reason that I say that I have a great thesis because
I stated was I was going to talk about through the essay. By reading this thesis you were
able to understand that Cyber bullying has a negative effect on both the bully and the
victim. So reading this thesis the reader is able to easily understand what the writer is
going to talk about. The Webster dictionary states that a thesis is, a short statement,

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usually one sentence, that summarizes the main point or claim of an essay, research
paper, etc., and is developed,supported, and explained in the text by means of
examples and evidence. My thesis in the Cyber bullying essay is a good thesis
because it summarizes the main point of a essay and its also supported by evidence
within the essay. In addition, another good thesis in my Nike v.s. Adidas essay. The
thesis to this essay goes like this, The nike commercial uses Cristiano Ronaldo to
appeal that the cleats that he uses will also provide you with the same explosive speed
that Ronaldo has, while the Adidas commercial uses Leonel Messi and David Villa to
appeal that if you use their F50 cleats you will be as fast as them, like that car they were
being compared to and the audience of these commercials are people who enjoy
playing soccer. By reading this thesis the reader is going to understand the main point
and the main point is that the new soccer cleats in the commercial made Messi,
Ronaldo, and Villa faster and stronger it was like once you put the shoes on you had
super powers. So if you bought those cleats, you would play exactly the same as the
professional athletes. Writing Thesis are my strengths because I am able to tell the
audience what the essay it going to talk about and it's going to be supported through
evidence and examples within my essay.
My weakness as a writer was that my grammar and punctuation sometimes
made my sentences harder to understand. For example, in my Cyberbullying essay a
sentence goes like this, In this article a young girl named Megan was bullied by Josh a
myspace user who was a fake profile and whatever he said made Megan take her own
life. In this sentence I didn't add three commas that would have made my sentence
easier to understand. I should have put a commas after the words article, Josh and

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profile. If I would have added these three commas my sentence would have sounded
more coherent. A way to improve my weakness in punctuations is that I had to look at
different examples and I also had to practice them, so I did. By just practicing I was able
to my punctuation skills which made me a better writer.
This English 114A class had my write most of the time, so by having me write a
lot more my writing skills gradually increased. My weaknesses started not to become
my weakness because I practiced it a lot more. In the next English 114A semester I
have a goal of improving my writing skills by working on my grammar and punctuation,
even though I have improved I still have a long way to got to get better at it. And the
only way to get better at writing is practicing it, so that's what I'm going to do.