Peer Revision Guide

Author _____Jane Doe________

Reviewer _______Catherine Megison_____

Assignment Title: ___Self-Advocacy Plan_____________

Writing issue

Does the summary describe the students

needs in terms of being successful in school or
employment?
Are the needs based on characteristics of the
student?
Do the strategies/supports/accommodations
seem like they will be helpful for the student?
Is there evidence of metacognition (the student
understanding how he/she learns and what
he/she needs)?
Will the suggested
strategies/supports/accommodations help the
student to be a self-advocate?

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Is it good? How?
Does it need improvement? Why? How?

CONTENT
Yes! You did a good job describing her needs. However, I
would note the type of job that she wants. I think it is
babysitting from previous submissions. However, if it is, I
dont think the math part needs to be included as she
probably wont be needing this skill to babysit.
Yes, definitely. Your student is very well described.
Most seem helpful; however, I am not sure that the math
section in the job section will benefit her with her future
career endeavors.
There is some evidence; however, I think it could go deeper.
Particularly the independent living section. The others are
very well done.
Yes, everything suggested gives Jackie the chance to
advocate for herself.

ORGANIZATION
Does the overall organization seem logical to
The organization is clear and does not need to be changed.
you? How could it be improved?
Does each paragraph have a clear topic
sentence? Is everything in the paragraph then
related to the topic sentence? Is the paragraph
clearly related to the purpose (~thesis)?

There are not topic sentences. However, the layout gives a

clear indication as to what is described in each paragraph. I
do not think thesis statements need to be added.

Is the sequencing logical? Is it conceptually

repetitive? Should anything be rearranged?
What changes would make it stronger?

The sequencing is logical and does not need to be changed.

Are the relationships between ideas, opinions &

facts clear? How could they be made clearer?

Most of the paper is written as fact; however, the last

sentence of the employment section sounds like opinion. I
would change it to sound more like a fact. The first sentence
in independent living also sounds like an opinion.
No closure is included, but I do not think one is needed.

Does the closing remind the reader of the goals

and adequately answer the question who
cares? What would make it better? What
questions do you have as you read?
Are the paragraphs reasonable in length? If too
long, what would be a logical way to split it/them
into more than one paragraph?

Each paragraph is very reasonable and is created well.

VOCABULARY/WORD CHOICE
The word also is used very often. I would reword
Vocabulary is all appropriate and clear
Is usage correct and appropriate? Which words
Not too wordy
& where are problems?
Word usage is good, nothing sounds uncommon
Correct usage and no confusing sentences
Is the terminology (i.e., technical vocabulary)
Is it repetitive? Which words?

appropriate and clear?

Does it feel/sound wordy? Do you have the
feeling the person has tried to make it sound
fancy by using too many uncommon words?
(This is different from correctly using technical
terms relevant to topic.) Where?
How can the author correct these problems?
GRAMMAR & MECHANICS
Check to see if
Subjects and verbs agree
the subjects and verbs all agree;
Tense is logical
the tense is consistent and logical;
A few punctuation errors- these are marked with
the punctuation (commas, etc.) is correct;
comments on the word document
the capitalization is correct;
no contractions used
contractions are used;
correct pronoun usage
pronoun usage is correct (there/their, its, etc.);
correct spelling
the pronoun referent is CLEAR (Can you
identify exactly what every it, there, they,
Great job! The mechanics and grammar in this assignment
etc., is referring to?);
were done really well!
spelling is correct;
& other editing/proofreading issues
OTHER STUFF
**What two things, specifically, did you like most
1. I like how detailed your post-secondary education
about this text?
section is. It is clear that you know your student and
the ways that she can advocate for herself are very
clear.
2. I like the accommodations for Jackie in independent
living. They sound very beneficial for her and seem
to work well with her abilities/needs.
**What two things did you think were most
1. The recreation leisure section seems like that could
important to change? Why? Suggestions (if
be said for any person. No one likes to have negative
they are not somewhere else)?
comments or hostile situations. I would try to make it
more applicable to her as an individual. This could be
done through rewording.
2. I would proof read your paper to ensure that
everything said is fact instead of opinion. While there
is mostly fact, some sentences are more
opinionated.
Other stuff & things you ran out space for
Nothing else. Very clear and a good rough draft!
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