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where you see this. How would you improve it? For example, if the author has chosen to use
asterisks between snapshots, would titles, numbers, or epigraphs (opening quotes) be better to
structure the snapshots? Is there sufficient repetition of the main points/images of the authors
literacy history or present and at the same time avoid monotonous repetition?
The organization of prompts within the essay have a decent flow because the paper was written in a
continuous format and not divided into the different snapshot prompts. Dividing the prompts would
make the different topic more evident and alleviate the need for transitions and such.
6. Does the author consider the audience? Indicate how the author could address the audience
better or where the author does a good job of considering the audience.
He definitely considers his audience. He defines acronyms and explains what they are. The whole
paper has a conversational tone about it that makes it much easier and more enjoyable to read.
7. List two things you think the author does a good job on. List two things you think the author
should work on. Make at least one suggestion for how she/he might go about improving each of
those aspects of the essay.
Emilio makes the paper very personal, which makes it enjoyable and easy to relate too. He
acknowledges his writing faults and difficulties but continues to explain why they exist. I couldnt
imagine how hard it is to not only learn a new language, and pursue a college education with it is
impressive. While it may not be grammatically correct I enjoy reading the paper the way it was
written. It seems very genuine and explains the authors position well without the need of detail on
top of detail. The way it is written shows great personality.
8. List two things you would like to hear more about. What does the author not deal with as much or
as well as youd like? Explain what and why you think these elements are important enough to
include. Personally, I want to hear more about the grandfather and how he gained his political
status. He was obviously hugely influential in the authors life so Id like to hear a little more about
him. Id also like to here more about the ruthless writing teacher.