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6418
focus on experiments
here, not background
what journal is
this? need title
GENERAL COMMENTS
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Instructor
Ken,
T his would be an inf ormative, stylish piece f or a
non-scientif ic audience. Your sources are attributed
with sophistication.
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redundant
somewhere in this sentence, you've used words that are unnecessary because other words in
the same sentence already serve your purpose (as in "f ree gif t").
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this section should discuss older knee injury treatments, and early stem
cell experiments on knee tissue. Your audience would already know this.
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S/V Agreement
Subject-verb agreement:
Subjects and verbs should match in number and person. Singular subjects require singular
verbs; plural subjects require plural verbs.
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Audience's needs
Always consider the education and experience of your readers when you write. If you are writing
to general audience, you will need to def ine scientif ic words or terms and concepts that are
specif ic to your f ield. Likewise, you will need to explain any background to which you ref er. On
the other hand, a specialized audience may f ind such def initions and explanations unnecessary.
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Audience's needs
Always consider the education and experience of your readers when you write. If you are writing
to general audience, you will need to def ine scientif ic words or terms and concepts that are
specif ic to your f ield. Likewise, you will need to explain any background to which you ref er. On
the other hand, a specialized audience may f ind such def initions and explanations unnecessary.
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citation add
You need a citation here.
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Absent/Below
Basic
SLO #1: Write f ormally and inf ormally, in-class and out-of -class, f or a variety of audiences and purposes.
ABSENT/BELOW
BASIC
Audience's needs are of ten not recognized: terms and ideas either need explanation
or are over explained and language needs adjustment f or the journal's audience.
Purpose (to f amiliarize readers with research regarding a contemporary subject of
interest) isn't clear or achieved.
DEVELOPING
Shows some attention to audience's needs, sometimes def ining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to f amiliarize readers with
research regarding a contemporary subject of interest) may be unclear at times, and it
may not be achieved convincingly.
PROFICIENT
Usually shows attention to audience's needs, def ining necessary terms and ideas
and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to f amiliarize readers with
research regarding a contemporary subject of interest) may be implied, but it's clear
and achieved.
ADVANCED
Shows sophisticated attention to audience's needs, def ining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to f amiliarize readers with
research regarding a contemporary subject of interest) is clear and achieved with
style.
SOURCES
Developing
SLO #2: Find, evaluate, select, synthesize, organize, ethically cite, and present inf ormation f rom a variety
of sources appropriate to their disciplines.
ABSENT/BELOW
BASIC
Fails to use MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works
cited list as specif ied by journal. Frequently uses irrelevant or unpersuasive sources.
DEVELOPING
PROFICIENT
Almost always uses MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and
works cited list as specif ied by journal. Use of sources is usually relevant and
persuasive.
ADVANCED
Correctly uses MLA- or APA-style parenthetical citations, quotation marks, and works
cited list as specif ied by journal. Use of sources is always relevant and persuasive.
PERSUASION
Developing
SLO #3: Compare, contrast, and synthesize caref ully and objectively the relative merits of alternative or
opposing arguments, assumptions, and cultural values.
ABSENT/BELOW
BASIC
Fails to demonstrate similarities and dif f erences between research of dif f erent
scholars. May be biased in presentation of research. Descriptions of research may be
unclear.
DEVELOPING
Sometimes demonstrates similarities and dif f erences between research of dif f erent
scholars. Attempts to synthesize this research caref ully and objectively. Some
descriptions may be unclear.
PROFICIENT
Usually demonstrates similarities and dif f erences between research of dif f erent
scholars with clarity. Synthesizes this research caref ully and objectively. Describes
the research, usually noting objectively merits of various procedures.
ADVANCED
Demonstrates similarities and dif f erences between research of dif f erent scholars
with clarity and sophistication. Synthesizes this research caref ully and objectively.
Describes the research, noting objectively merits of various procedures.
ORGANIZ AT ION
Developing
SLO #4: Organize ones thoughts and communicate them clearly to address a rhetorical situation. Employs
IMRAD structure where appropriate.
ABSENT/BELOW
BASIC
DEVELOPING
PROFICIENT
ADVANCED
Prof icient
SLO #5: Recognize, evaluate, and employ the f eatures and contexts of language and design that express
and inf luence meaning and that demonstrate sensitivity to gender and cultural dif f erences.
ABSENT/BELOW
BASIC
DEVELOPING
PROFICIENT
Appropriate tone and design conf orm to assigned audience and genre. Spelling,
syntax, diction, or punctuation errors are f ew and do not distract f rom meaning.
ADVANCED
Sophisticated tone and design engage reader and conf orm to assigned audience and
genre. Outstanding control of language, including ef f ective diction and sentence
variety.