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James Baldwin was an eloquent spokesman for the rights of black Americans in the 1950s through 1970s who helped readers understand the need for civil rights progress at that time. The long-term benefits of walking and jogging include a stronger heart, healthier arms and legs, and a more attractive physique.
Focusing a Subject to a Thesis If you have only a large subject area to begin with, first move towards a thesis by dividing your subject into smaller and smaller areas. For example, when writing about a subject such as college life, you can divide your subject as follows: College life / university life. Commuter students / residential students Traditional students / non-traditional students Second, take one of your subdivided subjects and divide it even further by creating topic-sized categories related to the subject. For example, if discussing traditional students, you could add the following facts about them: Ages 17-22 / High school graduates Financed by parents, loans, and scholarships Changing from daily high school schedules to two-day / three-day schedules More responsibility and self-discipline required Third, take your more specific topics and ask questions about them: What social and intellectual limits do traditional students have that might cause problems for them when attending college? Does todays high school education prepare students well enough for college life? What obligations, if any, do college students have to their parents or other financial supporters? What specific skills do traditional students need to be responsible and self-disciplined in college? Fourth and finally, answer the questions you have posed. Such answers will become the working theses that you could use in the first draft of an essay: Too many traditional students may not have the social networks and intellectual curiosity required to succeed in todays competitive college atmosphere. High schools need to do more to prepare students for understanding the purpose of different college educations and the level of maturity that college professors and administrators expect them to have when they arrive at college. College students should do well in school not so much to satisfy their parents, bankers, or the government, but to satisfy the duty they have to themselves to become intelligent and mature people ready to succeed in their personal and professional lives. Traditional students need to know how to act in adult settings such as the college classroom, how to read and study for essays and examinations, and how to organize their social lives so they can develop supportive friends and academic partners. Testing the Quality of Your Thesis After you have come up with a thesis, you should verify that it will work well as the controlling idea for your essay. The following five guidelines, complete with examples of weaker and stronger theses, can help you to determine if your thesis is worth defending.
1. A good thesis is a single sentence. Poor: Situation comedies present single-parent families unrealistically. These television shows say it is easy to succeed financially. They also suggest that these families have view major emotional challenges. And finally, they dont portray the world very realistically. Poor: Teenagers often dont have strong family units or good friends. So these teenagers look to their fellow mall rats for help. They also look for help from people at casual events like parties or from dangerous groups like gangs. Better: Situation comedies on television often present single-parent families as fully competent units, but such portrayals mislead us about the economic and emotional hardships usually faced by these families in the actual world. Better: Teenagers who lack intimacy with their families and friends often turn to peers they meet at malls, casual and one-time social events, or even dangerous entities such as gangs to provide them with emotional guidance and support. 2. A good thesis asserts one controlling idea. Poor: EBay is a good Web site for making money, and you can save a lot of money when buying new products by using comparison-shopping sites like MySimon.com. Poor: People can make good investments using Web sites like Hoovers.com, and you can learn a lot about investing from Fool.com too. Better: People with good-quality products to sell, a basic ability to work with computers, and the discipline needed to maintain an online business can make regular profits on Web sites like Ebay.com. Better: People with effective business research and investing skills can make a livable annual salary through online business portal such as Bigcharts.com, Fool.com, and Hoovers.com. 3. A good thesis says something definite and substantial about your topic. Poor: A recycling law can be very controversial. Poor: Some people favor recycling laws and some people oppose them. Better: To be effective, recycling laws must cover key types of materials, include regulations that are easy to follow, and be fairly enforced. Better: The general public initially opposed strict recycling laws but has begun to see their value in the face of increasingly fewer dumping grounds, the need to recycle oil-based products, and the simplicity of most recycling laws. 4. A good thesis has an appropriate tone and clear purpose. Poor: My essay is going to talk about stuff related to lousy college policies. Poor: It really stinks that we cant trust politicians and liars like that to tell us the truth about things. Better: Poor campus facilities, a low percentage of full-time faculty, and confusing or vague advice from administrators often prevent college students from completing their college career in four years. Better: President Clintons misleading statements about sexual harassment charges against him and President Bushs over-reliance on false intelligence before the Iraq war have caused both Republicans and Democrats to drop out of the political process. 5. A good thesis has the focus appropriate to the length of the essay that will support it. Poor: Yard sales reflect the times we live in. Poor: Lawyers can help you avoid lots of problems.
Better: Yard sales help circulate needed low-cost goods during times of high inflation, poor employment, and similar difficult economic times. Better: Despite the stereotypes about them, lawyers can help people avoid significant financial problems by preparing last wills and testaments, living wills, and similar documents. Understanding Purpose, Audience, and Tone To create an effective essay, identify the purpose and audience for it. In this regard, you may think that the purpose of writing is to earn a good grade, and that your audience is your instructor. Nope. Getting a good grade may be your motivation for writing the essay, but it should never be your purpose. Likewise, your teacher is only the grader of the essay, not its audience.2 Finally, you may think that you can write almost any essay in a personal, even folksy, tone of voice. However, just as you would choose different words for speaking to adults rather than to children, so also you should consider carefully how informal or formal the tone of your essays should be. In general, the purpose of any essay is to write about a worthwhile topic and to make an interesting point about it. More specifically, your purpose may be to entertain people about an amusing life situation; inform people about an important social, cultural, or religious issue; speculate about the possibilities of how to solve an important public problem; or persuade people to adopt your view on a controversial topic. Your purpose also may vary according to the type of essay you are writing. For example, essays often have a dominant rhetorical mode. Rhetoric is the art of using the most effective word in the proper place to achieve a desired effect. The rhetorical mode is the main method or way of communicating your essays information. The four main rhetorical modes are narration, description, exposition, and argumentation. The table on the next page defines each mode, gives sample essays for each mode, and lists the potential purpose of that essay:
Rhetorical Mode
Narration
Definition
Telling a story about a person, place, or event Using concrete words to create a visual image Explaining or informing about a noncontroversial topic3 Attempting to persuade readers to adopt your view about controversial topics4
Sample Essays
Maya Angelou, Graduation Annie Dillard, The Death of a Moth Bruce Catton, Grant vs. Lee: A Study in Contrasts George Orwell, Politics and the English Language
Purpose
To tell how a black eighth-grader restored the dignity of his classmates after a visiting education official displayed discriminatory attitudes To compare the death of a moth in a candle flame to the sacrifices that writers must make to be successful at their craft To explain the similarities and differences of the personal and military qualities of Ulysses S. Grant and Robert E. Lee to show why Grant was the more successful Civil War general To persuade people that the misuse or corruption of a language leads to misguided political results
Description Exposition
Argumentation
There may be one exception to this advice. When writing examination answers to prove that you paid attention in class during a semester, think of your instructor as your audience. If you dont know how to approach the exam, ask ahead of time. Many instructors will offer advice on how to succeed at the test. 3 While people may endlessly debate the morality of war, they can generally agree as to who won a series of battles by looking at statistics on number of casualties, amount of ground gained, etc. 4 A topic is controversial if it involves how you think people ought to treat other people, animals, the environment, and so onthat is, if there is some debate about ethical or moral aspects of an issue.
The audience for an essay is its intended readership. When you write an e-mail to a friend, your intended reader probably is about your own age and is likely to share your personal interests.5 When you write a thank-you note to a loved one, your intended audience may be older and more mature, and may or may not share your interests. When you write an essayespecially an academic essayyour audience could be any number of people with any number of interests. However, for the purposes of a writing class, you may assume that your intended audience is a general readership of reasonable people. In other words, your audience will vary in age, race, religious views, political positions, and so on. However, they also will have either a pretty good formal or informal education, and should be open-minded enough to consider a logically presented presentation backed up by evidence.6 If you have trouble picturing a general readership of reasonable people, think of your fellow students as your audience. Choose topics that will interest a broad readership and that can endure the scrutiny of classroom experts. Use fresh and original language to capture peoples attention. Come up with arguments that skeptical classmates will find convincing. Most of all, challenge them to think about the opinions that they uncritically accept so they can live fuller and richer lives. The tone of an essay is the mood or feeling that it conveys. Since you dont have body language and voice volume to work with when writing an essay, your tone will come through only in your word choice, sentence and paragraph structure, and punctuation. When you decide on the tone for an essay, remember to consider also your purpose and audience. If you are trying to entertain your classmates, even to get people to laugh, then an informal tone of voice will be appropriate. If you are informing people in general about relatively non-controversial topics, then a middle-level tone might be more proper. And if you are writing about serious political and/or cultural issues for a large college or public audience, then you probably should adopt a formal tone. Using Idea-Generating Techniques Many writing teachers tell their students to develop essays as follows: Pick a topic, decide on a thesis, write an outline, and then write a rough draft and a final draft. There can be at least two problems with such advice: people usually dont write this way and usually dont succeed at writing this way. In other words, we dont know what to write about until weve actually written about it. Therefore, before you even choose a thesis, you may want to try the following prewriting techniques to get your mental powers flowing. Freewriting - Write without stopping for about five to ten minutes. If you become stuck, keep writing the last word that you wrote down, or write down something like I cant write, I cant write.... At the end time, stop writing even if you are in the middle of a sentence. Put the material away and look at it at least a few minutes later. Leaving the material alone for a few minutes will promote further thought about your topic. Printed below is an example of freewriting. Notice that the paragraph repeats and wanders. Thats OK, because the purpose of freewriting is not to create a beautifully finished essay. Rather, it is just to help you work out ideas or feelings that keep you from writingto help you get unstuck at the start of the writing process. I am going to write about working at two jobs. It can be fun working two different jobs but I, I dont know what to write, but the jobsthat is the going
You dont always need to use e-mail. Keep the art of letter writing alive too. Doing so will slow down your life and help you to enjoy it more fully! 6 Part 6 provides advice on how to form logical arguments and present persuasive evidence.
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back and forth can be draining, and I can lose focus. I also can get confused about which, if either, should be the more important job and which I should try to keep doing. Of course, some jobs are easy to accept and others are easy to reject, so its important to have some values or standards by which you choose what job to pick or to keep or to keep working on or focusing your energies on. Its also interesting, or important, to know which job is not only more important, but also which job is more interesting. That is, which job keeps my attention, which seems more fulfilling, which seems more rewarding, and which is the job that I would like to keep doing in the future. I mean, no one ever says on their deathbed, Gee, I wish Id spent more time at work. I mean, that just doesnt happen. Brainstorming - For about 5-10 minutes, make a list of topics, ideas, and/or questions about a specific topic. Do this alone or in a small group. While making the list, feel free to write down any idea that comes to mind, to repeat an idea, or to rephrase an idea. Unlike freewriting, feel free to stop, organize your thoughts, and then start recording ideas again. After writing down all ideas, go back and cross out any duplicate ideas or irrelevant ideas, and then group the remaining ideas by common threads of thinking. The purpose of brainstorming is to free the mind from preconceived categories, to generate as many ideas as reasonably possible, and to figure out the various ways in which ideas can express themselves. Heres a list of brainstorming ideas related to the topic of truth before crossing out duplicates or irrelevant ideas:
Justice Fairness in the courts Anything related to accuracy and facts Beauty Which values are most important Tests or standards of validity Scientific truth Religious truth Personal vs. abstract or general truth Preferring peace (quiet) over speaking the truth Preferring the truth over good relationships
Clustering - Write down a word or phrase, like love, in the middle of a sheet of paper. Think of a related idea, circle it, and then draw a line between the first and the second idea. Keep writing down and circling related ideas, and then draw lines between the newer ideas and the previous ideas they relate to. At the end of the process, you will have a field of circles or ovals and connecting lines. The purpose of clustering is to generate ideas, to suggest which ideas go with which other ones, and to discover how many different sub-categories of ideas you have.
Asking Reporters Questions Newspaper and magazine reporters are taught that, to cover a story thoroughly, they must ask who, what, when, where, why, and how, and only then are they to write the story. You can take the same approach when pre-writing an essay. For example, if you want to write about how the print media covered a presidential scandal, you would need to ask yourself the following: Who was the president involved in the scandal? Who were his friends, family, or political appointees involved as well? What started the scandal and how did the president respond to it? What did other people do? What did the newspapers do when they discovered the scandal? When did the scandal occur, and when did the newspapers learn about the key events? When did they reveal what they had learned? Where did the scandal take place, and where was the first newspaper, magazine, or Internet site that located the evidence? Where did the media get its evidence? Why did those involved in the scandal do what they did, and why did the media try to expose the event? How did people try to cover up the scandal, and how did the media discover the truth, if at all? Remember: Whether you freewrite, brainstorm, do clustering, or ask yourself reporters questions, your main goal in the pre-writing stage is to overcome writers blockthat is, to generate ideas in a non-threatening atmosphere that eliminates the dreaded blank page. In such open-ended situations, words or phrases that you write down early in the session may relate closely to the first recorded word. However, since our minds can wander very quickly from an original term, words that you write down last may relate only indirectly. For example, in the ballooning diagram above, love and peace may seem closely related as personal goals. However, terms such as League of Nations, NATO, NAFTA, war, etc., may relate to peace more closely as a political concept. In the pre-writing stage, feel free to accept such quick topical shifts. In the final draft of a paper, however, be sure that all sections of the paper stay on topic and relate back to your thesis. Understanding Writing as a Process Some writers think of writing as a one-step task. They think that the best way to write is to think and think and think about their topic and then write down everything they can remember. However, when they try this approach, they often find that they cannot record all of their thoughts quickly enough, even if they use a word processor. They also may try to write perfect drafts the first time around. When they dont do so, they may become frustrated, think that they can never become good writers, and give up. However, as the section on developing a thesis suggests, you will be more successful at writing if you think of writing as a processthat is, a series of interrelated steps that lead to a goal. If you take the process approach to writing, the following strategy often will lead to stronger essays: 1. Write down whatever you are thinking in the earliest stages of the project. 2. Review how your ideas look on paper. 3. Clarify confused statements. 4. Eliminate excess wording and phrasing. 5. Express underdeveloped ideas more fully. 6. Find more supporting evidence for your ideas. 7. Rewrite your introduction and conclusion until your essay opens and ends strongly. 8. Proofread and correct structural, grammatical, and punctuation errors.
The diagram on the next page suggests how to organize the writing process to achieve regular success with assignments. Since the diagram only suggests how to approach the process, you can vary it as time and other conditions dictate. For example, if you are exceptional at developing ideas in your head, you may be able to skip the activities in the prewriting stage and go directly to the second stage. On the other hand, if you are not a native speaker of English or have a learning disability like dyslexia, you may want to add the additional step of showing your work to someone else after the editing/proofreading stage and have that person thoroughly review your work before typing the final draft. START: Prewriting Think of ideas:
Generate ideas by brainstorming, clustering, asking reporters questions, freewriting. Gather information from reading, taking notes, interviews, etc. Consider your assignment, audience, purpose, and tone.
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Evaluating Your Essays before Submission Before submitting a finished essay, evaluate it against the following questions to ensure that you have done the best job possible: 1. Does the essay have a clear thesis? Does the writer stay focused on the thesis throughout the essay? 2. Does the essay have a purpose and tone that is appropriate for its topic and audience? 3. Does the essay use a middle level of diction, or is the vocabulary too slangy or formal for its topic, purpose, and audience? 4. Is each sentence immediately clear to the reader? 5. Does the essay contain focused and unified paragraphs? Is the essay well organized? That is, does the essay move from topic to topic, or does it repeat ideas unnecessarily? 6. Does the opening paragraph draw you into the essay in a focused and interesting way? Does the last paragraph just summarize what the author said earlier, or does it tie up the essay by giving the reader something to think about without starting on a new topic? 7. Does the essay have generally accepted grammar, punctuation, and spelling? 8. If the essay is a research paper, does it follow generally accepted academic standards for physical format, sentence citations, works cited, and avoiding plagiarism?
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The sample dictionary entry for party contains the following information: Spelling and word division Pronunciation Part of speech Inflections (word endings) Grammatical status Definitions Usage information Idioms Etymology (the historical development of a word) Understanding Levels of Diction Different writing situations require different levels of dictionthat is, different levels of word choice. When you write to a friend, especially in an e-mail, you probably would use very casual language. When preparing a legal document, you would more serious language. In college writing assignments, however, prefer middle diction over slang or formal diction. The table below gives examples of middle diction and the extremes to avoid. Slang (Avoid) Kids Rip off Prof commie Crib Middle Diction (Use) Children Steal Instructor/Professor Communist House Formal Diction (Avoid) Descendants Expropriate Professional educator Marxist-Leninist Single family dwelling unit
More and more, it seems, some people use abusive languagethat is, language that is profane, obscene, lewd, discriminatory, or offensive to a general audienceeven in public. While free speech is (or should be) a major value in colleges and universities, exercise common sense and respect for others when choosing your words. Do not use abusive language in your papers or in class, unless there is a very good reason to do sofor example, when discussing the history of words, speech styles, social or cultural violations, or similar subjects.7 When aiming for middle diction, use words in their traditionally accepted senses, and avoid fad words. Fad words arise when people take one part of speech and then turn it into another one, inventing an overly new use for it.
Avoid My sister wants to cocoon for the weekend, rather than come to our house. During his campaign for the presidency, the candidate talked a lot about growing the economy. Use My sister wants to stay in for the weekend, rather than come to our house. During his campaign for the presidency, the candidate talked a lot about strengthening the economy.
Barbara Lawrence has written an excellentand shortessay on why people should avoid profanity entitled Four-Letter Words Can Hurt You. You can find the essay at the following Web page: http://www.uwec.edu/asc/Competency%20Exam%20Workshops/sample_readings.htm.
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Use terms that a general audience would understand, and avoid jargonlanguage that is used for specialized academic situations, specialized jobs, etc.
Jargon (Avoid) Andr was really paranoid about his bosss intentions for growing the company. I need to finalize my paper before class. Sylvie facilitates discussion between disparate populations. Going forward, we should optimize our strategies for maximizing student enrollment. Middle Diction (Use) Andr worried greatly about his supervisors plans about company growth. I need to finish my paper before class. Sylvie helps different groups of people talk to each other. We should plan carefully for how to increase student enrollment.
A clich (klee-SHAY) is a phrase that people use so frequently that it has lost its freshness as an image. For example, if you work very hard, you might say, I keep my nose to the grindstone. If you focus totally on school assignments, you might say, I keep my eye on the ball. If you pay close attention to what your business competitors do, you might say, I have my ear to the ground. The phrases in quotation marks are so common and overworked, that people no longer take them literally. Imagine if people DID have their nose on a grindstone, their eye sockets against a baseball, and their ears against the groundwhat an impossible physical position THAT would be! Another problem with clichs is that people use them so often in so many different ways, that the same clich might have differenteven contrastingmeanings in different contexts. The table below includes a list of common clichs, and some suggested phrases to use as substitutes.
Clich I work so hard that I feel as if Ive got my nose to the grindstone. Although we went to the movies together, Joanne and I are water under the bridge. After all is said and done, people should keep their ear to the ground concerning whos running for office. I was quiet as a mouse when I came home in the dead of the night. Fresh Language I work so hard that I feel as if I am wearing myself out. Although we went to the movies together, Joanne and I no longer date. People should play close attention to who runs for office. I was very quiet when I came home late.
Commonly Misused or Misspelled Words Addendum 1, just after the Exercise section of this book, contains a list of words that writers commonly confuse with each other, complete with correct definitions and sample sentences that clarify how to use those words. Addendum 2 contains a list of words that writers commonly misspell, complete with their correct spellings. Whenever you are in doubt as to how to use or spell a word, consult the two addendums or a college-level dictionary.
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Conjunction a connecting word that introduces a main clause or subordinate clause Interjection expresses emotion
As noted above, once you know the basic grammatical terms, you can begin to repair problem sentences. The following seven strategies will help you to do so: 1. Understanding Verb Tenses Verb tense is the form of the verb that indicates the time at which an event occurs, or the time at which a state of being exists. Tense also indicates whether an event has happened once or is ongoing. For example, the simple tenses of verbs indicate a one-time event, while the progressive tenses indicate an ongoing action or state of existence. The verb tense that indicates something existing or occurring right now is, of course, the present tense. The other five verb tenses relate to or build upon the present tensethat is, they indicate the existence or occurrence of something in relation to the present. The following table lists the six main verb tenses, explains how to use them properly in English sentences, and gives examples of each tense. Past Perfect Past Present Perfect Present - Future Perfect Future Verb Tense
Present
Past
Future
Present Perfect
Past Perfect
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Verb Tense
Future Perfect
Progressive Tenses
2. Distinguishing Between Sentences and Fragments Know the difference between groups of word that are just fragments and groups that constitute actual sentences. Remember that a fragment expresses an incomplete thought, but a sentence contains a subject, verb, and complete idea. Fragment After I left the house. When I went to lunch that day. Brushing my teeth in front of the mirror in the first-floor bathroom. Because I was tired and wanted to go to bed early. Complete Sentence I left the house after I had breakfast. When I went to lunch that day, I had pasta and sugar-free cola. I brushed my teeth in front of the mirror in the first-floor bathroom. I did not watch the news because I was tired and wanted to go to bed early.
Notice that fragments 1, 2, and 5 begin with the connecting words after, when, and because. These words are subordinating conjunctions. Subordinating conjunctions join a subordinate clause to a main clause. Fragments 3 and 4 begin with verbals known as participles. 3. Preferring Action Verbs The verb is the strongest part of speech in an English sentence, and English language sentences tend to express ideas more strongly than do sentences in many other languages. Therefore, you should prefer sentences with action verbs over those with just linking verbs. An action verb expresses action, while a linking verb simply expresses a state of being or existence. The following table demonstrates that converting linking verbs to action verbs tend to make for stronger, clearer sentences:
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Linking Verb Sentences Our boss was under the suspicion that we would not be able to finish the job on time. If I am able to arrive on time, then that would be to my advantage in making a good impression. While I seem to be good at writing sentences that are clear, I am often in the habit of using more words than are necessary. It is clear that my father was someone who loved me very much, but it was his habit not to show emotion.
Action Verb Sentences Our boss suspected that we would not finish the job on time. If I arrive on time, I will make a good impression. While I appear to write clear sentences, I often use more words than needed. My father clearly loved me very much, but he usually showed little emotion.
4. Preferring the Active Voice Prefer sentences with action verbs in the active voice over those in the passive voice. In an active voice sentence, the grammatical subject performs the action, and therefore is active. In a passive voice sentence, the subject is someone or something other than the performer and therefore is passive. The following table shows that sentences in the active voice tend to be shorter and clearer than those in the passive, and therefore more understandable: Passive Voice It is believed by many literary critics that Alice Walker is an excellent spokeswoman those who were formally silenced in society. The wallpaper was completely examined by Jane. The car was struck by a van which had its headlights broken. Our country will be considered economically stronger when more American cars are being purchased by our citizens and when high-tech jobs are not being outsourced to other countries by American businesses. Active Voice Many literary critics believe that Alice Walker speaks well on behalf of those that society used to silence. Jane examined the wallpaper thoroughly. A van with broken headlights struck the car. Americas economy will improve if our citizens buy more American-made cars and our companies keep high-technology jobs in the country.
5. Using Parallel Constructions A parallel sentence is one in which words or phrases of equal importance appear in the same type of grammatical structure. Using the same type of structure doesnt just indicate that the words or phrases are equal in value. Such a structure also save words and makes it easier for readers to follow your ideas. The table below gives examples of sentences that are not parallel and examples of how to correct them. Notice that each revised example has a series of elements that are roughly equal in length.
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My mother taught me to be courteous to women and that I should be avoiding jokes at their expense or make an insult about their style of dress. The speaker bored the audience because he dragged on, he was using repetitive phrases in every paragraph, and it was his first time in front of a large audience. My younger brother likes softball and he likes to do computer work and he very often goes to church.
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My mother taught me to be courteous to women, avoid jokes at their expense, and respect their style of dress. The speaker bored the audience because he talked too long, repeated himself in every paragraph, and had no experience in front of large audiences. My younger brother likes to play softball, work at his computer, and go to church.
6. Being Concise Be concise by preferring fresh and original language. To avoid creating tired and dull sentences, eliminate wordy expressions, redundancies, circumlocutions, euphemisms, clichs, and mixed metaphors. A wordy expression - uses more words than necessary to communication your meaning. Wordiness tends to show up in early drafts of your writing. Therefore, if you habitually write only one or two drafts, your finished papers probably will have wordy expressions. As you revise your work, look for wordy constructions and cut them out of your work. The table below shows some typical wordy expressions and some suggested revisions. Wordy During the course of class, I asked a large quantity of questions. I have the exact same problem as my twin sister. In view of the fact that July is a hot and humid month, my personal preference is to go to the beach. Historians often give about four different reasons regarding why the Civil War occurred. Concise During class, I asked many questions. I have the same problem as my twin. Since July is hot and humid, I like to go to the beach then. Historians often give about four reasons about why the Civil War occurred.
A redundancy is a phrase containing two or more words with similar meanings when just one of those words will make your point. Writers often use redundancies because they dont realize that they are repeating themselves unnecessarily. Other times, they think that such phrases will make their meaning more emphatic. In fact, just the opposite is true: when you make the same point in fewer words, each word carries more power and, therefore, more emphasis. The following table gives examples of common redundancies and some suggested revised sentences that delete them. Redundancy If you stand too close to the edge of that steep precipice, you could fall off! Each individual player chose her own jersey number. Our house on Warren Avenue is singularly unique. More Concise Sentence If you stand at the edge of that precipice, you could fall off! Each player chose her own jersey number. Our house on Warren Avenue is unique.
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Redundancy The two film critics had polar opposite views about the new movie.
More Concise Sentence The two film critics had opposite views about the new movie.
Note: Do not confuse redundancies with effective repetition. Sometimes, repeating a word or phrase heightens the emotional effect of your presentation, especially if your repetition has a memorable rhythm. One writer and speaker who used repetition effectively was the civil rights leader Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr. This last paragraph from his 1983 speech during the March on Washington illustrates effective repetition, not pointless redundancy: And when this happens, when we allow freedom ring, when we let it ring from every village and every hamlet, from every state and every city, we will be able to speed up that day when all of God's children, black men and white men, Jews and Gentiles, Protestants and Catholics, will be able to join hands and sing in the words of the old Negro spiritual: Free at last! Free at last! Thank God Almighty, we are free at last! A circumlocution is a roundabout way of saying something. Talking around a subject creates a drag on ones writings, like walking through mud rather than on the sidewalk. Writers who overuse circumlocutions either dont realize what they are doing or are trying, often accidentally, to sound sophisticated. Its perfectly all right if such expressions appear in early essay drafts when you still are trying to find the words to say what you mean. However, before you hand in a paper, cut out all the dead wood you can. The following table lists common circumlocutions and then suggests revised, more concise sentences: Circumlocution The man at the airport was inebriated out of his mind, in a manner of speaking. We live in a single family dwelling unit on Warren Street. Due to the fact that the divine being established an intimate relationship between us, I will look upon you with unconditional positive regard. The administrative staff at the hospital center seemed to be of an overworked nature. Concise Sentence The man at the airport was very drunk. We live in a house on Warren Street. Because God made you mine, Ill cherish you.
A euphemism is an overly nice word or phrase for stating something unpleasant. Euphemisms are wordy and often confuse readers. The most common euphemism probably is pass away instead of die. While you might want to use this euphemism at an actual funeral, you should not do so in an essay describingfor examplethe death of a literary character. Examples of other euphemisms appear in the table below:
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Euphemism Bathroom tissue Collateral damage Comfort station Law enforcement officer
Disenfranchised populace Poor people A mixed metaphor is an implied comparison that shifts from one basis of comparison to another, unrelated one. For example, My dad flew off the handle at the traffic cop when he should have cooled his jets seems at first to be a consistent metaphor because flying and jets go together. But flying off the handle is not the same as flying a plane. A clearer sentence would be My father lost his temper at the police officer when he should have remained calm. The problem with mixed metaphors is that they often contain clichs and create such a jumbled image in a readers mind that they become meaningless. To maintain your readers interest by keeping your language fresh and original, build consistent metaphors like the ones in the second column of the following table: Mixed Metaphor While he was a lion at work, my roommate turned into a wet noodle when trying to spend quality time with his girlfriends parents. Our cleanup hitter folded quicker than a twodollar suitcase when the curve fluttered across the plate. Although our debating team is in the pits after our last whipping in the clutches of St. Marys College, our coach sees nothing but roses in our future. I tackled my term paper with boundless energy, but my so-called friend clouded my academic future with a rip-off that I never saw coming. Consistent Metaphor While he was a lion at work, my roommate turned into a nervous kitten when visiting his girlfriends parents. Our cleanup hitter was out of rhythm and missed the pitched when the curve ball jitterbugged across the plate. Although our debating team is depressed after losing badly to St. Marys College, our coach is high on our chances for success. I tackled my paper with great energy, but a former friend injured my chances for academic success by intercepting my paper and passing it off as his own.
7. Using Respectful Language All sorts of reasons exist for using respectful language. Some people justify this policy by saying that all people are made in Gods image and therefore deserve the same kind of respect that you might reserve for the Almighty. Others say that doing so shows that you are willing to abide by generally accepted ethical principles. Still others say that doing so recognizes the often overlooked historical forces of racism, gender discrimination, etc. If none of these arguments works for you, just remember that what goes around comes around. If you insult others in speech or writing, they will start insulting you. And you dont want to be insulted.9
For an interesting response to extreme measures to enforce even the appearance of bias, see Denis Duttons essay: http://denisdutton.com/what_are_editors_for.htm. See also the humorist P.J. ORourkes comments on the same book that Dutton comments upon: http://people.ku.edu/~dadams/review.htm.
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and science chose high tech, while others flocked to business school, thinking that success was spelled MBA.10 Sometimes, to provide variety and maintain interest, you may want to place your topic sentence in the middle of a paragraph. There is no crime in doing that as long as you have good reason to do so. For example, if you need to provide some context, present your main idea, and then support it, you can place the topic sentence in the middle of the paragraph between the background material and supporting material of the thesis. The following narrative paragraph provides some historical context to a persons life, introduces a shocking discovery she made, and then follows up with additional material. Notice that the thesis of the paragraph is italicized: My neighbor grew up in the frightening Cold War era, but attended a good elementary school and took advanced classes throughout high school. Her parents fought often but also loved her and helped pay her way through a leading university, where she studied hard. Given this mixed personal history, she grew up believing that the best way to survive as an adult is to become a sharp thinker. She wasnt going to let politicians or ordinary people ruin her life; she was going to be smarter than the next guy. However, one day, after only a few years of marriage, her husband left her. Despite knowing that he had had problems of his own, my neighbor also knew that she had been mean to him, which helped drive him away. One day, while sitting in a small apartment and brooding over how much she hated her ex and hated herself, my neighbor realized that the same idea kept bubbling up in her mind: Forgiveness is more powerful than judgment. Forgiveness is more powerful than judgment. Now, she lives a happy life with a new husband, has a good job, and takes each day as it comes. Now, instead of trying to be a sharp thinker, she tries to have a warm heart. You also can place a thesis sentence at the end of a paragraphfor example, when you want to make a series of specific observations that lead to a general conclusion. The following paragraph illustrates the strategy of moving from a series of general statements to a specific conclusion. In this paragraph, a writer draws a general conclusion from the specific features of business clothing that U.S. Secretary of State Condoleezza Rice wore on a diplomatic mission in early 2005: Rice challenges expectations and assumptions. There is undeniable authority in her long black jacket with its severe details and menacing silhouette. The darkness lends an air of mystery and foreboding. Black is the color of intellectualism, of abstinence, of penitence. If there is any symbolism to be gleaned from Rice's stark garments, it is that she is tough and focused enough for whatever task is at hand.11
Daniel H. Pink. Wired.com. February 2005. Volume 13, Issue 2. http://www.wired.com/wired/archive/13.02/brain.html 11 Givhan, Robin. Condoleezza Rice's Commanding Clothes. Washington Post. February 25, 2005, page C01. http://www.washingtonpost.com/ac2/wp-dyn/A51640-2005Feb24?language=printer
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Introducing Paragraph Development Besides opening with a thesis sentence that you then support throughout the rest of the paragraph, most effective paragraphs share three more characteristics: they have thematic unity, structural coherence, and appropriate development. Unity A unified paragraph covers only one topicnot two, not three, not ten. It sticks to its intended subject and does not wander off of it. The following two paragraphs are almost the same. However, the first contains a sentence that does not really belong in the paragraph, while the second is truly unified by eliminating the unneeded sentence. The italicized sentence does refer to the Internet, but only briefly to compare it to the transcontinental telegraph, which is the real topic of the sentence. Without the italicized sentence, the original paragraph focuses more tightly on the purpose and use of the Internet. The Internet has revolutionized the computer and communications world like nothing before. The invention of the telegraph, telephone, radio, and computer set the stage for this unprecedented integration of capabilities. The first transcontinental telegraph line was like the Internet of the nineteenth century. The Internet is at once a world-wide broadcasting capability, a mechanism for information dissemination, and a medium for collaboration and interaction between individuals and their computers without regard for geographic location. The Internet has revolutionized the computer and communications world like nothing before. The invention of the telegraph, telephone, radio, and computer set the stage for this unprecedented integration of capabilities. The Internet is at once a world-wide broadcasting capability, a mechanism for information dissemination, and a medium for collaboration and interaction between individuals and their computers without regard for geographic location.12 Coherence In a coherent paragraph, all of its sentences clearly relate to each other. No sentence wanders from the paragraphs topic. You can create a coherent paragraph by using the following strategies: Repeating the same word or phrase from sentence to sentence Using synonyms from sentence to sentence Using sentences that relate back to earlier ones and/or forward to later ones Using transitional words and/or phrases Repeating a Word The following paragraph uses the first strategy, repeating words or ideas from sentence to sentence. By repeating the word technology, the author ties one sentence to another and then to another:
Barry M. Leiner. A Brief History of the Internet. 11 Oct. 2004. The Internet Society. July 15, 2005. http://www.isoc.org/internet/history/brief.shtml#Introduction.
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Throughout history, people have used technology to change the world. Our technology has been of two kinds, green and gray. Green technology is seeds and plants, gardens and vineyards and orchards, domesticated horses and cows and pigs, milk and cheese, leather and wool. Gray technology is bronze and steel, spears and guns, coal and oil and electricity, automobiles and airplanes and rockets, telephones and computers. Civilization began with green technology, with agriculture and animal breeding, 10,000 years ago. Then, beginning about 3,000 years ago, gray technology became dominant, with mining and metallurgy and machinery. For the last 500 years, gray technology has been racing ahead and has given birth to the modern world of cities and factories and supermarkets.13 Using Synonyms Instead of repeating the same word from sentence to sentence to make a paragraph cohere, you can use synonyms. Synonyms are words that have similar meanings to those of other words. By using synonyms, you provide some verbal variety within the paragraph while maintaining the readers train of thought. The following paragraph illustrates the effective use of synonyms. About halfway through his speech at his second inauguration, President Bush uses synonyms for the word freedom to tie together his thoughtsfor example, liberty and independence. He also uses the phrase agent of his or her own destiny to suggest the idea of personal freedom and the words prosperous, just, and equal to suggest characteristics of free societies: In America's ideal of freedom, citizens find the dignity and security of economic independence, instead of laboring on the edge of subsistence. This is the broader definition of liberty that motivated the Homestead Act, the Social Security Act, and the G.I. Bill of Rights. And now we will extend this vision by reforming great institutions to serve the needs of our time. To give every American a stake in the promise and future of our country, we will bring the highest standards to our schools, and build an ownership society. We will widen the ownership of homes and businesses, retirement savings and health insurance preparing our people for the challenges of life in a free society. By making every citizen an agent of his or her own destiny, we will give our fellow Americans greater freedom from want and fear, and make our society more prosperous and just and equal.14 Using Sentences that Relate Back and Forward Besides using the same word or a synonym to unify a paragraph, you can use words or phrases within sentences so that they recall some idea in an earlier sentence and hint at an idea in a later one. Such a set of sentences is like a well-designed web or network, smoothly interlinking one sentence with another so that you move your discussion along without pounding your reader with
Freeman J. Dyson. Science, Guided by Ethics, Can Lift Up the Poor. The Norton Sample.: Short Essays for Composition. 6th ed. New York: W. W. Norton, 2003. Page 154. 14 George W. Bush. Second Inaugural Address. The White House. 12 July 2005. http://www.whitehouse.gov/inaugural/index.html.
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overly obvious signals as to sentence structure. The following paragraph illustrates the use of signal words and phrases (italicized for emphasis) that refer back and forth to unify the paragraph. The following paragraph by Theodore Roosevelt describes all the land north of the Black Hills and the Big Horn Mountains and between the Rockies and the Dakota wheat-fields. Notice that, throughout the paragraph, Roosevelt uses words that emphasize the dryness of the land that he visited: The country throughout this great Upper Missouri basin has a wonderful sameness of character; and the rest of the arid belt, lying to the southward, is closely akin to it in its main features. A traveler seeing it for the first time is especially struck by its look of parched, barren desolation; he can with difficulty believe that it will support cattle at all. It is a region of light rainfall; the grass is short and comparatively scanty; there is no timber except along the beds of the streams, and in many places there are alkali deserts where nothing grows but sage-brush and cactus. Now the land stretches out into level, seemingly endless plains or into rolling prairies; again it is broken by abrupt hills and deep, winding valleys; or else it is crossed by chains of buttes, usually bare, but often clad with a dense growth of dwarfed pines or gnarled, stunted cedars. The muddy rivers run in broad, shallow beds, which after heavy rainfalls are filled to the brim by the swollen torrents, while in droughts the larger streams dwindle into sluggish trickles of clearer water, and the smaller ones dry up entirely, save in occasional deep pools.15 Using Transitional Words and Phrases Students sometimes complain about having trouble making their essays flow. When they say this, they often mean that their writing sounds choppy or disjointed. One idea does not seem to connect with another. To make your essays flow, you can use transitional words and phrases between sentences. Similarly, make the overall essay clear by using transitional words and phrases between paragraphs. To understand the value of transitional words and phrases, look at the following two paragraphs. The first is an edited version of the second, from which I deleted the transitional elements. The second paragraph is from an essay that describes a man who was found living in a Florida swamp. Since the second one contains transitions, it flows more clearly than my edited version. Notice also that, quite often, you will need very few transitional elements within a paragraph to make it cohere: For eight months in 1975, residents on the edge of Green Swamp, Florida, had been reporting to the police that they had seen a Wild Man. They stepped toward him. He made strange noises in a foreign language. He ran back into the saw grass. Authorities said the Wild Man was a mass hallucination. Maneating animals lived in the swamp. A human being could hardly
Theodore Roosevelt. The Cattle Country of the Far West. Ranch Life and the Hunting-Trail. 1896. http://www.bartleby.com/54/1.html.
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find a place to rest without sinking. It was some kind of a bear the children had seen. For eight months in 1975, residents on the edge of Green Swamp, Florida, had been reporting to the police that they had seen a Wild Man. When they stepped toward him, he made strange noises as in a foreign language and ran back into the saw grass. At first, authorities said the Wild Man was a mass hallucination. Man-eating animals lived in the swamp, and a human being could hardly find a place to rest without sinking. Perhaps it was some kind of a bear the children had seen.16 The following table lists several categories of transitions that you may want to express in a paragraph with their corresponding transitional words and phrases: Used to Express Addition Similarity Contrast Concession Examples Emphasis Transitional Words/Phrases in addition, moreover, furthermore, another, as well as, and, also, besides, or, nor similarly, likewise, in the same way, but, yet, in contrast, still, surely, nevertheless, however, nonetheless, instead, rather than, unlike, whereas, even so, conversely although, though, granted, admittedly, obviously, to be sure, of course for example, for instance, in particular,, in general, whenever, frequently, usually, specifically indeed, in fact, certainly, clearly, of course, to be sure, naturally,, for that matter, more important, most important, frankly, oddly enough, as noted earlier, in any case, in other words thus, therefore, hence, then, consequently, because, due to, as a result, since, it follows , and so, accordingly if, whether first, second, third, next, then, after before, after, until, while, since, when, currently, next, meanwhile, thereafter, soon, earlier, later, immediately, by that time, shortly, at that moment so, in conclusion, finally, in sum, in short, to sum up, therefore, on the whole, in brief, all in all, in a word
Adequate Development Like the first two beds in the story of Goldilocks and the Three Bears, a paragraph can be too big or too small. However, a properly developed paragraph is just right. In other words, it discusses its topic until it has adequately covered that topic. Such a paragraph introduces its topic, discusses it fully, and then finishes off the discussion. It has a beginning, middle, and an end or at least it has the feeling of being complete. If you tend to underwrite your paragraphs, you may need to combine
Maxine Hong Kinston, The Wild Man of the Green Swamp. Modern American Prose. 3rd ed. J. Clifford and R. DiYanni, eds. New York: McGraw-Hill, 1993. 258.
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two or three of them to make a fully developed one. In contrast, if you find that you ramble on and on, you may need to break a huge paragraph into two or three smaller ones.17 The three writing samples below illustrate the need for proper paragraph length. The first sample shows two paragraphs that could be combined. The second is a paragraph of appropriate length. The third is a paragraph that you could break into two smaller paragraphs. Sample 1 Underdeveloped Paragraphs A home computer system generally contains a computer, complete with a keyboard, monitor, and mouse. Some people also have a scanner or other additional piece of equipment. In my mind, however, an essential piece of equipment is a printer. Thats because I often have to take work home and night and then bring printed materials into work the next morning. I also use the printer for personal interests such as charity work and printouts for my sons Little League team. Comment: At first, it may appear that two paragraphs are appropriate here. The first paragraph seems to discuss one topicnamely, what people generally have in a home computer. The second seems to discuss another topicpersonal reasons for owning a home printer. However, the two paragraphs really belong together because the first two sentences introduce information about what people generally own and the last two sentences narrow down that discussion to focus on what one person owns. Sample 2 Properly developed paragraph A home computer system generally contains a computer, complete with a keyboard, monitor, and mouse. Some people also have a scanner or other additional piece of equipment. In my mind, however, an essential piece of equipment is a printer. Thats because I often have to take work home and night and then bring printed materials into work the next morning. I also use the printer for personal interests such as charity work and printouts for my sons Little League team. Sample 3 Excessively long paragraph A home computer system generally contains a computer, complete with a keyboard, monitor, and mouse. Some people also have a scanner or other additional piece of equipment. In my mind, however, an essential piece of equipment is a printer. Thats because I often have to take work home and night and then bring printed materials into work the next morning. I also use the printer for personal interests such as charity work and
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printouts for my sons Little League team. If you must bring home work from the office, you also may need a printer, especially if you often have meetings as soon as you arrive at work in the morning. And if you have hobbies or other interests that call for printed materials, you have even more reason to buy one. A high-quality printerone that can stand up to the demands of business-related printingcan cost around $500. Such a machine will be able to print large quantities and almost certainly will do automatic duplex printing. That is, it will be able to print on both sides of the page without having to remove a one-sided printout and then flip it over and reprint. And with printer prices falling rapidly in the last few months, you may even be able to purchase a color-laser printer that can add extra impact to printed presentations. Comment: Here is a case where two paragraphs would be better than one. The sentence that begins If you must bring stops discussing the writers reasons for having a printer and starts to discuss both whether the reader should buy a printer and the possible cost and features of such a machine. Because of the shift in topic and in point of view from first person to second person, two paragraphs are called for. Introducing Patterns of Development Regarding paragraph development, you should do more than just cover your topic sufficiently. You also should have a clear overall structure that makes it easy for readers to follow your discussion of that topic. Well-developed paragraphs often have a distinct pattern of developmentthat is, the structure used to organize sentence after sentence in that paragraph. Do not choose any pattern just to have a pattern. Instead, choose the pattern that most closely matches the purpose of your discussion in each essay section. For example, in a biology paper about the cell division, you could open with a paragraph that defines the terms meiosis and mitosis. Then the next few paragraphs could compare the two processesthat is, show how they resemble each other. Your concluding paragraphs could contrast the two processesthat is, explain how the two processes differ. Identifying the Patterns of Development Writing teachers generally agree that there are about seven different patterns of development. This section defines those patterns, supplies a sample paragraph that illustrates each one, and then concludes with a table that summarizes them. Analogy compares an unfamiliar thing to a familiar thing in order to make the unfamiliar thing more familiar. (In other words, the author explains something that he or she knows about by comparing it to something that readers in general may know about.) The following paragraph compares the house of the authors grandmother to one of those large, compartmented, spiralshaped shells that people often find when walking along an ocean beach: My grandmothers house is like a chambered nautilus; it has many rooms, yet it is not a mansion. Its proportions are small and its design simple. It is a house that has grown organically, according the needs of its inhabitants. To all of us in the family it
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is known as la casa de Mama. It is the place or our origin; the stage for our memories and dreams of island life. Judith Ortiz Cofer, More Room Cause/Effect demonstrates how an earlier event (or set of events) brought about a later event (or set of events. You can use this pattern to write about personal or public events from the distant or recent past. The following paragraph argues that teachers sometimes kill a little childs interest in reading by forcing him or her to read aloud in class: From the very beginning of school, we make books and reading a constant source of possible failure and public humiliation. When children are little, we make them read aloud, before the teacher and other children, so that we can be sure they know all the words they are reading. This means that when they dont know a word, they are going to make a mistake, right in front of everyone. Instantly, they are made to realize that they have done something wrong. Perhaps some of the other children will begin to wave their hands and say Ooooh! O-o-o-oh! Perhaps they will just giggle, or nudge each other, or make a face. Perhaps the teacher will say, Are you sure? or ask someone else what he things. Or perhaps, if the teacher is kindly, she will just smile a sweet, sad smileoften one of the most painful punishments a child can suffer in school. In any case, the child who has made the mistake knows that he has made it, and feels foolish, stupid, and ashamed, just as any of us would in his shoes. John Holt, How Teachers Make Children Hate Reading Comparison/Contrast shows the similarities and differences of two somewhat related items. For example, you could in fact compare apples and oranges to create an essay that communicates fruitful information. But there probably would be little knowledge to be gained in comparing apples and donkeys. The following paragraph compares and contrasts the two most famous generals of the American Civil War in order to show how each of them symbolized the societies that they fought for: So Grant and Less were in complete contrast, representing two diametrically opposed elements in American life. Grant was the modern man emerging; beyond him, ready to come on the stage, was the great age of steel and machinery, of crowded cities and a restless burgeoning vitality. Lee might have ridden down from the old age of chivalry, lance in hand, silken banner fluttering over his head. Each man was the perfect champion of his cause, drawing both his strengths and weaknesses from the people he led. Bruce Catton, Grant and Lee: A Study in Contrasts Definition sets the boundaries or limits of an item. Just as a foul line sets a baseball field within a larger stadium and then separates it from the foul ball area, so also definition places an item within a large category and then distinguishes it from other items in that category. The following paragraph explains the meaning of the linguistic term doublespeak:
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Doublespeak is language that pretends to communicate but really doesnt. It is language that makes the bad seem good, the negative appear positive, the unpleasant appear attractive or at least tolerable. Doublespeak is language that avoids or shifts responsibility, language that is at variance with its real or purported meaning. It is language that conceals or prevents thought; rather than extending thought, doublespeak limits it. William Lutz, Doublespeak Division/Classification separates a group of items into related subgroups. By dividing or classifying, we make a large, even huge, area of knowledge more manageable by breaking it into smaller groups. The following paragraph breaks down the overall act of listening to classical music into three more specific types of listening: We all listen to music according to our capacities. But, for the sake of analysis, the whole listening process may become clearer if we break it into its component parts, so to speak. In a certain sense, we all listen to music on three separate planes. For the lack of a better terminology, one might name these: (1) the sensuous plane, (2) the expressive plane, (3) the sheerly musical plane. The only advantage to be gained from mechanically splitting up the listening process into these hypothetical planes is the clearer view to be had of the way in which we listen. Aaron Copland. How We Listen Example/Illustration supplies several instances or samples of an item in order to make that item more understandable. By supplying instances or samples of something, especially an abstraction, we give that thing flesh and bone so that people can see that thing more readily. The following paragraph supplies humorous examples of events in a womans life to illustrate her belief that she was a victim of entropyin other words, that her life was breaking down: It was about two months ago when I realized that entropy was getting the better of me. On the same day my car broke down (again), my refrigerator conked out, and I learned that I needed root canal work in my right rear tooth. The windows in the bedroom were still leaking every time it rained, and my sons baby sitter was still failing to show up every time I really needed her. My hair was turning gray and I needed glasses. My sons sneakers were developing holes and I was developing a deep sense of futility. K. C. Cole, The Arrow of Time Process breaks down a procedure into its individual steps or stages. This pattern of development helps differs from the cause/effect pattern because this pattern generally involves a repeatable series of activities. In contrast, the cause/effect pattern generally involves a series of events that happened once and for all. The following paragraph explains the steps involved in the scientific process photosynthesis:
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The initial process in photosynthesis is the decomposition of water into oxygen, which is released, and hydrogen. Direct light is required for this process. The hydrogen and the carbon and oxygen of carbon dioxide are then converted into a series of increasingly complex compounds that result finally in a stable organic compound, glucose, and water. This phase of photosynthesis utilizes stored energy and therefore can proceed in the dark. In general, the results of this process are the reverse of those in respiration, in which carbohydrates are oxidized to release energy, with the production of carbon dioxide and water.18 The table below lists each pattern, defines it, and then gives the titles of essays that commonly appear in college composition collections and that display that pattern: Pattern 1. Analogy Definition Comparing the unfamiliar to the familiar in order to make the unfamiliar more familiar Showing how an earlier event or set of events brought about a later event or set of event 3. Comparison/Contrast Showing the similarities and differences of two somewhat related items Setting the boundaries or limits of an item 6. Example/Illustration Supplying several instances or samples of an item 7. Process Breaking down a procedure into a sequence of steps Examples Annie Dillard, The Death of a Moth Barry Lopez, My Horse William Severini Kowinski, Kids in the Mall: Growing Up Controlled Maya Angelou, Why Blacks Are Returning to Their Southern Roots Bruce Catton, Grant and Lee: A Study in Contrasts Deborah, Gender in the Classroom Joan Didion, Self-Respect Francis Bacon, On Revenge Randy Shilts, Good AIDS, Bad AIDS Judith Viorst, What, Me? Showing Off? Thomas Jefferson, The Declaration of Independence Mary Karr, Dysfunctional Nation Alexander Petrunkevitch, The Spider and the Wasp Jessica Mitford, Behind the Formaldehyde Curtain
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Opening and Closing Paragraphs Because of their positions in essays, opening and closing paragraphs have special functions that paragraphs in the body of the essay do not. For example, an essays opening paragraph functions much like a thesis sentence at the top of a paragraph does. That is, the opening paragraph introduces the essays topic, announces its thesis, and sets the tone of the essay. Conversely, a closing paragraph completes an essay by conveying the sense that the writer has properly covered his or her subject and has satisfied the main reasons for writing. Opening Paragraphs Some effective types of opening paragraphs are named below, with advice on how to use them. Direct Opening Open the first paragraph with the thesis of the entire essay. The following paragraph illustrates this style. Written in the early 1940s, the paragraph reflects both the more conservative spirit of that era and the careful and methodical nature of its subjectnamely, Wilbur and Orville Wright, inventors of the airplane: From earliest years both Wilbur and Orville Wright were motivated by what Thorstein Veblen called the instinct of workmanship. Their father, the Reverend Milton Wright, used to encourage them in this and never chided them for spending on their hobbies what little money they might have. But he did urge them to try to earn enough money to meet the costs of whatever projects they were carrying on. All the money anyone needs, he used to say, is just enough to prevent on from being a burden on others.19 Inverted Pyramid Start with a general statement, narrow to a more specific statement, and then end with the most specific statement as the thesis of your essay. In the broad, opening statement, the writer generally says something that readers already know and then moves toward an idea that readers dont know, but which the essay will discuss. This strategy creates a link between peoples current knowledge and new information that the essayist wants them to learn. By moving gradually from the known to the unknown, the inverted pyramid paragraph (also called a funnel paragraph) pulls you in and keeps your reading. The following paragraph begins with the simple fact that lots of people like camping vacations and then uses more and more narrow statements to arrive at a specific point about potential camping problems that people may not be aware of: Each year, thousands of people throughout the United States choose to spend their vacations camping in the great outdoors. Depending on an individual's sense of adventure, there are various types of camping to choose from, including log cabin camping, recreational vehicle camping, and tent camping. Of these, tent camping involves "roughing it" the most, and with proper planning the experience can be gratifying. Even with the best planning, however, tent camping can be an extremely
Fred C. Kelly. The Wright Brothers. New York: Harcourt, Brace and Company, 1943. Rpt. New York: Dover Publications, 1989. Page 5.
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frustrating experience due to uncontrolled factors such as bad weather, wildlife encounters, and equipment failures.20 Question Pose a question in the first sentence of the opening paragraph and then answer it by the last sentence of the opener. Make that last sentence the thesis of your essay. The thesis need not answer the question directly, but the thesis must follow logically from the series of intervening sentences in order to show readers the respect they expect and deserve. Writers who use the question/answer strategy believe that a starter question arouses a readers curiosity and keeps him or her reading in hopes that the writer will satisfy that feeling. The following paragraph introduces a Time magazine essay that discusses how raw contemporary wrestling shows on television have become over the last twenty years: What kind of programming do you identify with cable television? Probably shows like Larry King Live on CNN and Nick at Nites reruns of Bewitched, or Biography on A&E and maybe those documentaries about Adolf Hitler that the History Channel always seems to carry (this weeks is a classic: Hitler and the Occult). These offerings may seem emblematic of cable, but if you think they represent its most popular shows, you are very wrong. Cables TVs true signature is not a conversation between Larry King and Trent Lott; it is a Hell in a Cell bout between Stone Cold Steve Austin and his archrival Kane.21 Serious writers almost always write to solve a problem for themselves or to answer a question of their own, so you might think that this opening strategy is very common. In fact, it isnt. For example, Andy Rooney, the veteran CBS reporter, seems famous for beginning his commentaries at the end of the television show, 60 Minutes, with the nasaltoned remark, Have your ever? In research we did while preparing this book, however, we discovered that he almost never, if at all, begins his commentaries that way. And when we looked at hundreds of essays in composition anthologies, we also found that the question/answer opener is very rare. So feel free to make this strategy your own. Just dont overuse it in one class or in class after class with the same instructor! Anecdote or Description An anecdote is brief story about an event. The anecdote should not only introduce the essay but also illustrate the thesis to be supported in the rest the essay. In other words, dont begin with a story just to begin with one, hoping that it will grab readers for whatever comes next. As with an anecdote, you can begin with a brief, lively description that sets the scene for the rest of the essay. (Remember that description uses concrete words to create a picture in the readers mind.) The description need not name the thing being described. (In fact, sometimes a picture of some unnamed person, place, or thing can be very intriguing.) But the description itself must be clear, consistent, and precise. The paragraph below, by Gretel Erhlich, vividly describes something. At first, we are not sure what it is; however, as we read further, we realize that she is writing about her first semi-conscious moments after having been hit by lightning:
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Deep in an ocean. I am suspended motionless. The water is gray. Thats all there is, and before that? My arms are held out straight, cruciate, my head and legs hang limp. Nothing moves. Brown kelp lies flat in mud and fish are buried in liquid clouds of dust. There are no shadows or sounds. Should there be? I dont know if I am alive, but if not, how do I know I am dead? My body is leaden, heavier than gravity. Gravity is done with me. No more sinking and rising or bobbing in currents. There is a terrible feeling of oppression with no oppressor. I try to lodge my mind against some boundary, some reference point, but the continent of the body dissolves.22 What to Avoid in an Opening Paragraph Beginning with dull or needless definition Opening with a dictionary definition, especially of a well-known term. o Example: The dictionary defines love as strong affection or deep regard for another person. Restating assignment Repeating for your instructors or reading audiences what they already know to be your topic. o Example: Its important that we respond to our instructors assignment regarding the cruelties of slavery that helped cause the Civil War and the great costs of intolerance against former slaves after the war. Stating something blatantly obvious Saying something so obvious or bland that you immediately kill your readers interest in your topic. o Example: In todays world in which we live, young people face many challenges. [Notice also the unnecessary repetition in the introductory clause.] Apologizing Claiming or pretending to be unqualified to handle the topic of the essay. o Example: Although the mapping of the human genome has received much publicity in the media, I am not sure that I can predict what the future holds for society in light of our new scientific knowledge. Being lazy or careless - Making a false statement or committing a major typographic error. o Example: What do historians find when they put their noses into the anals of history?23 Closing Paragraphs Summarize briefly Sum up the thesis of each paragraph block from the body of the essay, but do so only briefly. (In a short essayfewer than three pagesomit it.) By creating an essay in miniature, you help readers reabsorb the whole essay in just a few sentences and give them a sense of intellectual and stylistic wholeness. In an essay about the Civil War figure Joshua Chamberlain, Glenn LaFantasie uses the strategy of a summarizing final paragraph. The essay itself discusses Chamberlains commitment to chivalry and honor, his success at being praised as a hero, and his enthusiastic retelling of the 20th Maine
Gretel Ehrlich. Struck by Lightning. A Match to the Heart: One Womans Story of Being Struck by Lightning. New York: Pantheon Books, 1994. (Rpt. In Barbara Fine Clouse. Patterns for a Purpose: A Rhetorical Reader. 3rd ed. Boston: McGraw Hill, 2003. 137.) 23 For this example of an unintended opening to a students final examination essay, I am indebted to Douglas Carlson, former teaching colleague at The Kings College in New York, who now teaches at Northwestern College in Iowa.
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Regiments exploits on the second day of the Battle of Gettysburg. LaFantasie organizes his final paragraph similarly and creates the sense of wholeness that many essayists (and readers) desire:
Like nothing else in his life, the charge at Gettysburg defined who Joshua Chamberlain was and who he would always be. But his greatest achievementgreater than any assault he led, any would he survived, any medal he earned, any obstacle he overcamewas how he had lived his dreams and made them come true. He wanted to be a chivalrous knight and an Old Testament warrior, and so in his own eyes and those of his contemporaries he became those things. The Civil War gave him the opportunity to turn his deepest aspirations into reality. But it is our need for heroes that has enabled Chamberlain to achieve the glory he longed for throughout the war and most of his life. All in all, he accomplished what few men, either in his own time or in our own, can ever honestly claim: he lived his dreams to the fullest.24
Look to the future Suggest to your readership the importance or benefit to them of what you have said in the essay. Whether you write to tell a story, describe a scene, provide information, or defend a viewpoint, you also must consider how readers might profit from what you have written. They are spending time reading your writing, after all, and they should derive some reward for their effort. In the following paragraph, Martin Luther King, Jr., concludes an essay-like letter that he wrote to some Birmingham, Alabama, clergymen who wanted him to go slow with early efforts at racial integration. After arguing many points raised by those who wrote to him, King concludes by discussing the benefits of more rapid progress toward racial equality in their city and the nation:
I hope this letter finds you strong in the faith. I also hope that circumstances will soon make it possible for me to meet each of your, not as an integrationist or a civil-rights leader but as a fellow clergyman and a Christian brother. Let us all hope that the dark clouds of racial prejudice will soon pass away and the deep fog of misunderstanding will be lifted from our fear-drenched communities, and in some not too distant tomorrow the radiant stars of love and brotherhood will shine over our great nation with all their scintillating beauty.25
End with a clinching statement The equivalent of beginning an essay directly is to end with a clinching statement. Such a statement seals or confirms what has gone before. It tries to capture in one concentrated phrase both the intellectual and emotional content of the essay. To execute this strategy, for example, some writers restate the thesis in the words of a famous quotation from the Bible, a historical figure, or other revered source. Other writers may quote the words of someone they interviewed when preparing the essay and who seems to encapsulate the authors own ideas. The following paragraph uses even another clinching strategy: the blunt remark that is both ironic and satiric. The irony and
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satire of this closing paragraph is especially strong because it comes after a twenty-sixparagraph-long description of how bodies might be prepared for viewing at a funeral home:
It is the function of directing the participants through this maze of gadgetry that the funeral director has assigned to himself the relatively new role of grief therapist. He has relieved the family of every detail, he has revamped the corpse to look like a living doll, he has arranged for it to nap for a few days in a slumber room, he has put on a well-oiled performance in which the concept of death has played no part whatsoeverunless it was inconsiderately mentioned by the clergyman who conducted the religious service. He has done everything in his power to make the funeral a real pleasure for everyone concerned. He and his team have given their all to score an upset victory over death.26
Recall the opening anecdote or description If you begin an essay with a brief anecdote/description, then often the most logical way to finish the essay is to round off the anecdote/description in the final paragraph. By completing the opening anecdote/description, the final paragraph satisfies readers curiosity as to why you opened as you did and gives a sense of stylistic completeness too. The following two paragraphs come from an essay about the dangers that could arise as more and more nations developing nuclear weapons. The first paragraph opens the essay and introduces a scene from 1945, right after the end of World War II. The second paragraph ends the essay by recalling the opening scene and by tying up the authors thesis about the need for effective diplomacy to stop nuclear proliferation:
Sixty years ago, on a stormy night in 1945, the charismatic American physicist Robert Oppenheimer mounted the stage of a movie theater in the secret city of Los Alamos, New Mexico. Lean and intense, he was there to address hundreds of scientiststhe men and women who built the first atomic bombs under his direction. Exploded over the Japanese cities of Hiroshima and Nagasaki on August 6 and 9, 1945, those bombs had just ended the most destructive war in human historyand changed the face of war forever. * * * * * Neils Bohr and Robert Oppenheimer would recognize our dilemma: What to do with the double-edged sword they handed us, forged from exotic metals by a nuclear reaction that science stumbled across one day in 1938 while going about its business of discovering how the world works. Their advice, I think, still holds: Only cooperation among nations can secure the deadly metals from which nuclear weapons are made. Only negotiated reductions in arsenals and limitations on weapons development can diminish the long-term risk to us all. Thats what Bohr and Oppenheimer fervently believed, and what Oppenheimer told the scientists of Los Alamos that rainy night 60 years ago.27
Mitford, Jessica. Behind the Formaldehyde Curtain. The American Way of Death. New York: Knopf, 1998. (Rpt. From Barbara Fine Clouse. Patterns for a Purpose: A Rhetorical Reader. 3rd ed. Boston: McGraw-Hill, 2003. 339). 27 Rhodes, Richard. Living with the Bomb. National Geographic. 208:2. August 2005. 100, 113.
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What to Avoid in a Closing Paragraph Repeating the thesis Dont just restate the thesis, especially in a short essay, as if you forgot to do so. Starting on new topic Dont wander onto a new topic unrelated to the topic of the essay. Pretending to prove more than you have Dont claim that your essay shows more than you have shown. If your discussion is incomplete or your argument is weak, complete the discussion or strengthen the argument. Unnecessarily bringing thesis into doubt Dont apologize for weaknesses in the essay or claim a false humility.
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who write in the opportunity to vent their emotions. For example, in the first paragraph of the following example, the letter criticizes the Federal Communications Commission for 2005 rulings against indecent broadcasting practices by using inflammatory words like burden ourselves, taken control, and indiscriminately, without offering any evidence that the offenses referred to have actually occurred. The second paragraph describes the writers fellow citizens as people who sit idly by like sheep and elected officials as a gang of crooks and liars. This paragraph also lacks any supporting evidence, helping to make the letter sound like a frustrated outburst rather than a reasoned attempt to persuade readers: Dear Editor: We should all feel a little lighter. No longer do we have to burden ourselves with deciding what to watch and listen to. Our government has taken control of the dials. The Federal Communications Commission can now indiscriminately levy huge fines against anyone it chooses, without precedent, guidelines or a day in court ["Crackdown on indecency," News, Feb. 17]. And we all sit idly by like sheep. The people we elected have failed us, and the only way to fight back is to make sure you don't vote for anyone, Republican or Democrat, currently in office. Kick them out and give the next gang of crooks and liars a chance to stand up for us and prove their worth.30 The following letter does a better job of telling the truth and respecting its audience. The two quoted wordsvoluntary and freeat first appear to be sarcastic or ironic quips, but they actually are quotations from the news story to which the letter responds. Similarly, this letter (written by a college student) offers evidence for its positions without losing control of its tone: Dear Editor: It is ironic that the Daily printed an editorial supporting free air time for candidates on the same day that they printed a special section on the First Amendment. The Federal Communication Commission's plan to encourage stations to give free air time to candidates is a violation of the free speech rights of the stations involved, and would not have the positive effects that the editorial suggests. Broadcasters should be allowed to own the airwaves they broadcast on just as newspapers are allowed to own the printing presses with which they print their papers. As long as the FCC is given the arbitrary authority to deny renewal of the licenses to any broadcaster who doesn't do what it wants, free speech in the broadcast industry is a farce. This case is one example of this problem. Regardless of what the FCC says, when they ask a station to carry free political ads, it is not "voluntary." Behind such a request is the thinly veiled threat that the FCC will force them to comply or revoke their licenses if they don't. The editorial writer is also unreasonably optimistic about the practical results of such a plan. Like all businesses, TV stations are there to make money, and they will put the "free" advertising in the lowest-priced slots in their lineups. This means that the ads will tend to run late at night and in the early morning when almost no one is watching. Furthermore, there is no reason to think that the broadcasters would give third-party candidates air time, since the FCC is run by people appointed by Republicans and Democrats. Rather than leveling the
February 21, 2005 letter to Newsday, the major newspaper on Long Island, NY, as printed at the following URL: http://www.newsday.com/news/opinion/letters/.
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playing field, this could further increase the advantage that major-party candidates have over their third-party opponents. The FCC was created to ensure that wireless communications and electrical devices do not interfere with each other, and that is all it should do. Political decisions regarding campaign financing and broadcasters' obligations should be dealt with by our elected officials, not bureaucrats who are not responsible to the American people.31 Tell the truth by understanding and using logic and evidence. To help you write more logically, you should learn a few basic terms of logic. Knowing these terms will help improve your chances of writing logically and avoid fooling yourself and others. More importantly, perhaps, learning these terms will help you reduce the odds that others will fool you with writing that appears sensible but is nothing more than fancy words and slick tactics. Understanding the Two Basic Types of Reasoning 1. Induction drawing a general conclusion from representative specific events or instances. a. Example: My roommate goes out for pizza three days a week. Therefore, my roommate probably loves pizza. b. Example: New York State has voted Democratic in the last five straight presidential elections. Therefore, New York has more Democrats than Republicans. 2. Deduction drawing a specific conclusion from more general principles. (Deduction often uses a syllogism, which is a three-part deduction based upon a major premise and a minor premise.) a. Example: All students in the RCC Honors program must have at least a 3.00 GPA. John Smith is in the RCC Honors program. Therefore, John Smith has at least a 3.00 G.P.A. b. Example: All men are mortal. Socrates is a man. Therefore, Socrates is mortal. Besides learning some basic terms of logic, also watch for common errors in reasoning that you could fall into unless you think through things carefully. Examples of Informal Fallacies (Fallacy a faulty form of reasoning; that is, reasoning illogically, whether from true or false premises, and whether arriving at a true or false conclusion.) 1. Faulty Generalization drawing a general conclusion from insufficient or unrepresentative specific evidence. a. Example: When faced with a major purchase, men are always more irrational than are women! b. Example: I dont understand how Bush could have won the election! I dont know anyone who voted for him! 2. Begging the Question (or circular reasoning) drawing a conclusion from a premise that states essentially the same idea as the conclusion itself. a. Example: Anyone who is old enough to fight for his country should have the vote because anyone over 18 should be allowed to vote.
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2. Contain research from books and articles, interviews, surveys, clinical observations, and/or laboratory experiments. 3. Require that you follow a citation format for quotations, summaries, and paraphrases that is approved and published by an academic or professional society. 4. Require a Works Cited page, which lists just the sources used in the paper, or a Bibliography, which lists sources used in the paper and additional suggested readings on the topic of the paper. 5. Count for a significant or majority portion of the final grade. Introducing Library Research When setting business priorities, many business people do whats called a cost-benefit analysis. Simply put, a cost-benefit analysis involves determining how much it will cost a business in raw materials, services supplied by outside suppliers, employee hours, and similar expenses vs. the financial and related benefits that the company will receive from those expenses. When deciding to do assignments, you probably make a similar decision. However, for you, the analysis doesnt involve items such as raw materials, but the following: How much time you want to spend on the assignment (The cost) What kind of grade you want (Benefit 1) What you will learn from doing it (Benefit 2) Now that students have access to the Internet for doing college work preparation, they often give in to the temptation of cutting back on preparation and research time by using questionable Internet sources. You should resist this temptation by knowing the following: What departments and resources does your library offer? How do you find books and articles for a paper? How do you record information from books and articles that you may use in the paper? The following three sections offer guidance on these key questions. Knowing Library Departments and Resources Different schools have different departments and resources, but they all generally have an online catalog, a reserve section, a reference section, a periodicals department, open stacks, and multimedia. The Online Catalog Instead of the hundreds of wooden drawers that students used in the 1980s and earlier, today you can find lists of books and articles by searching a computer-based catalog. Before computerized catalogs, students could search for books only by subject area, book title, or book author. Now, you can search by not only the three previous features but also the following features: ISBN, or International Standard Book Number Library of Congress Subject Heading Publisher Document type Library of Congress call number Language in which the book is written The Reserve Section Instructors sometimes assign readings from personally owned materials or very new books or articles not readily available to other people. In these cases, instructors often have librarians hold books or journals in a dedicated section of the library (usually behind the checkout desk) and limit checkout times to one hour, two hours, overnight, or some other brief time
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limit. Putting difficult-to-obtain books in this dedicated area makes it easier for all students in the class to read the book without someone in the class hoarding the book, making it hard for others to read it. The Reference Section This department contains dictionaries, encyclopedias, journal indexes, anthologies, author or subject bibliographies, and similar materials that provide general information on all sorts of topics. Almost always, students may not remove reference books from the library because large reference books are expensive and they provide foundational background information to which all students need access. Quite often, reference books also contain bibliographies of more detailed readings to guide you toward further research materials. In the case of author or subject bibliographies, the whole book is just a list of other books, magazines, newspapers, academic journals, and similar materials. These bibliographies often have short, descriptive sentences or paragraphs, called annotations, that help you quickly determine whether the bibliography item relates to the specific topic that you want to write about. The following table lists major books in print for different academic fields that you usually will find in a reference section:32
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Abstracts in Anthropology Annual Review of Anthropology Dictionary of Anthropology Encyclopedia of World Cultures Art Abstracts Art Index BHA: Bibliography of the History of Art Encyclopedia of World Art. McGraw-Hill Dictionary of Art Biological Abstracts Biological and Agricultural Index Encyclopedia of the Biological Sciences Hendersons Dictionary of Biological Terms Zoological Record Accounting and Tax Index Blackwell Encyclopedia of Management Encyclopedia of Business Information Sources ABI/Inform Chemical Abstracts (CASEARCH) Dictionary of Chemistry Van Nostrand Reinhold Encyclopedia of Chemistry
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Illustrated Encyclopedia of the Classical World Oxford Classical Dictionary Princeton Encyclopedia of Classical Sites Annotated Media Bibliography Communication Abstracts International Encyclopedia of Communications Journalism Abstracts
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Geographical Abstracts Longman Dictionary of Geography Modern Geography: An Encyclopedic Survey Bibliography and Index of Geology Challinors Dictionary of Geology The Encyclopedia of Field and General Geology American Geological Institute American Medical Association Encyclopedia of Medicine Cumulated Index Medicus Medical and Health Information Directory Nutrition Abstracts and Reviews Martindales Health Science Guide America: History and Life Dictionary of Historical Terms Encyclopedia of American History An Encyclopedia of World History Historical Abstracts Cambridge Encyclopedia of Language An Encyclopedic Dictionary of Language and Languages International Encyclopedia of Linguistics LLBA: Linguistics and Language Behavior Abstracts MLA International Bibliography Concise Oxford Guide of Literary Terms Handbook to Literature MLA International Bibliography The New Princeton Encyclopedia of Poetry and Poetics American Statistics Index Dictionary of Mathematics International Dictionary of Applied Mathematics Mathematical Reviews (MathSciNet) Music Index New Grove Dictionary of Music and Musicians New Oxford Companion to Music RILM Abstracts of Musical Literature Dictionary of Philosophy Philosophers Index Routledge Encyclopedia of Philosophy
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Dictionary of Physics McGraw-Hill Encyclopedia of Physics Physics Abstracts Almanac of American Politics Congressional Quarterly Almanac Encyclopedia of Government and Politics International Political Science Abstracts Public Affairs Information Service (PAIS) International Dictionary of Psychology International Encyclopedia of Psychiatry, Psychology, Psychoanalysis, and Neurology Psychological Abstracts Dictionary of Bible and Religion Encyclopedia of Religion Religion Index Annual Review of Sociology Encyclopedia of Social Work Encyclopedia of Sociology Sociological Abstracts International Index to the Performing Arts International Encyclopedia of the Dance McGraw-Hill Encyclopedia of World Drama Womens Studies: A Guide to Information Sources Womens Studies Abstracts Womens Studies Encyclopedia
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The Periodicals Department This department contains magazines, newspapers, academic journals, and other publications that appear daily, weekly, monthly, or at other regular intervals. These types of publications help when you are writing papers about the literary reputations of authors when they were alive, about first impressions of eyewitnesses to historical events, about current events, and so on. This department also contains printed periodical indexes that list articles by author, subject, and/or title so that you can find articles more readily. The Open Stacks These are the library shelves that contain books intended for general circulation. Elementary schools, high schools, and public libraries usually organize books by subjects numbered with the Dewey Decimal System, from 000 to 900or ten categoriesplus a fiction section. However, almost all colleges and universities use the Library of Congress Classification (LOCC) to number their books and journals. The LOCC has the advantage of dividing materials into more sections, since it divides books from A to Z. Do not assume that books on anthropology appear in the A section or that literature appears in the L section. The following table indicates which letters represent which general topics:
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Multimedia This is the newest section of college libraries, and contains items such as records, films, videotapes, CD-ROMs, DVDs, and similar materials that contain audio or audio-visual materials rather than text-based documents. Finding Books and Articles To find books and articles in the library, follow this general strategy. 1. Start by reviewing reference books to learn general background information about the topic you will write about. For example, depending on the class your are taking, you may want to look at a literary dictionary that contains brief biographies of literary authors, a science encyclopedia that explains the basics of the Big Bank theory, an encyclopedia of biomedical ethics that discusses the competing views on stem cell research, a historical encyclopedia that lists major battles of the American Civil War, etc. Feel free to call upon reference librarians to help you find general-level materials that will best inform you about your chosen topic. Even within a narrow area such as literature, you can find books devoted to languages, United States literature, British literature, other European literatures, South American literature, Asian literature, African literature, Canadian/Australian/New Zealander literature, poetic and other literary terms, and on and on and on. 2. Develop a list of books, articles, and other sources related to your author or specific topic and find them in the librarys online catalog. Look for the books in the open stacks, and check out the ones that seem most helpful to your paper. If you know that a book exists but cannot find it on the shelves, ask a librarian if it is in the reserve section or is checked out. Sometimes, you can put in a written request for a book or article and the library will notify the person who has it and request that he/she return it for your use, especially if that person has had the material for several weeks or longer. 3. Look for articles in the periodicals department. If needed, look at printed indexes as well as the online catalog for potential research sources, since some libraries may catalog periodicals in their computer databases only after they have finished with their books. 4. Finally, unless you are writing a paper on a piece of music or film, go to the multimedia department last. While you may be fascinated by videos and DVDs about authors,
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historical movements, scientific discoveries, etc., your instructors will look mostly for written sources on the Works Cited page of your research paper. Even the most serious of television productions can, in one hour, cover only the surface of serious topic. Recording Potentially Useful Information After checking out materials from the library, you must record information from those sources on pages or cards that you can use at all hours of the day or night. Keeping books and articles for several weeks or the whole semester may make life easier for you when writing a paper, but doing do shows great disrespect for your instructors, classmates, and other people whose academic life is just as important as yours. With easy access to photocopy machines, the Internet, word processors, and similar text-handling tools, you may be tempted just to make copies or printouts of the research materials and underline or highlight them as you read. If you have the money to generate such large amounts of paper, feel free to do so. However, by listing books and taking notes on note cards, you gain the advantage of truly absorbing and organizing the material you are reading and of identifying the most essential material you need for a paper. The following strategy for taking notes is a tried and true method, and will earn you the deep and undying love and admiration of your instructors. Bibliography Cards Record the bibliographic data of books and articles on 3 x 5 index cards. Be sure to include any and all information that you will need to place in a Works Cited page, and include a short summary of the source so that you have an overview of the source. In one of the upper corners of the card, identify the source by the last name of the author or by a letter of the alphabet. For each new source, record the last name or a new letter, the bibliographic information, and a summary. A sample bibliography card appears below: Buckley Buckley, James, Jr. Classic Ballparks. New York: Barnes and Noble Books, 2005. Summary - Excellent introduction to the Polo Grounds, Fenway Park, Tiger Stadium, Ebbets Field, Wrigley Field, and Yankee Stadium. Complete with many photographs and index.
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Understanding Paraphrase, Summary, and Direct Quotation When writing papers, students often ask when to use supporting paraphrases, summaries, or direct quotations. Before providing advice on such strategies, we should define our terms clearly so that you understand the differences among these types of information: A paraphrase involves restating a text or passage in your own words, in roughly the same number of words, to clarify the sources meaning for yourself. You often would use paraphrase to remember source information and to ensure that you understand it thoroughly.
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A summary also involves restating a text or passage in your own words, but in much fewer words. For example, you might summarize a book chapter in just a paragraph or a paragraph in just one sentence. Again, your goal in summarizing usually is to help you remember the source information and to ensure that you can express the material in terms that you understand. A direct quotation involves repeating the exact words of an original source. Quote a source whenever your readers would benefit from seeing the exact wording of a writer rather than just a summary. For example, o To express a thought in concise terms that might take you longer to summarize. o To display the style of a source that you intend to analyze. o To express the exact words of a source because those words are in dispute. o To restate or reinforce something you have said or will say in your own words.
When writing a paper that requires supporting material, generally use only summaries or direct quotations, not paraphrases. As noted above, a paraphrase is roughly the same length as the source it comes from and is in your own words. Thus, a paraphrase has two disadvantages: its phrasing is no more economical than that of its source, and it contains a less accurate rendition thereof. Also, you can confuse a long paraphrase with an actual quotation, accidentally incorporate it into your paper, and make the mistake of putting quotation marks around it. Much to their regret, a surprising number of professional writers have committed this error. You could too. Using a Paraphrase As stated above, use paraphrasing mainly as a learning tool. For example, imagine that you are reading the essay entitled The World's Oldest Virtue, by the etiquette expert Judith Martin (also known as Miss Manners).33 To paraphrase the opening two paragraphs of her essay, you might rewrite her phrasing as follows: Original Source Whenever there is a contest between etiquette and acknowledged virtues, etiquette loses. Hardly anyone would dispute the proposition that morals are more important than mere manners, and the assertion that etiquette can and should be jettisoned for a higher good is commonly made and accepted in everyday life. "I'm concerned about people's health," is a typical explanation offered by someone who admonishes others, sometimes even strangers in restaurants, that what they're eating is bad for them. The moral virtue of devotion to the well-being of others supposedly obliterates the rule of etiquette against minding other people's business. [97 words] Paraphrase of Source Whenever people struggle between following etiquette and what they view as moral, etiquette loses. Most people would argue that morals are more important than manners. They also would say that we should reject manners when a higher value is at stake.
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Im focused on peoples health, is what you might say, even to strangers in a restaurant, if you thought they were eating something unhealthy. If you feel you have the right to give advice to people about their health, you might ignore the etiquette of minding your own business. [90 words] Comment: The paraphrase uses some words of the original, but contains mainly your own words, uses common synonyms, and has a more casual tone of voice. (Most of us write more informally than does Judith Martin.) Also, the paraphrase is roughly the same number of words as the source. In short, the paraphrase puts the source into simpler terms readers easily can understand, helping them to assimilate the sources meaning. Using Summary When you summarize a source in a research paper, introduce that source with words of your own. This introduction, or frame, should provide a proper grammatical transition between your own words and those of the source and will advise readers that the upcoming words are someone elses. For example, imagine that you want summarize the first two paragraphs of Martins essay. Your summary might look something like this. According to one etiquette expert, most people say that their values are more important than manners. You might tell people, I want people to be healthy if you think they are eating something unhealthy or feel that giving advice about their health is more important than keeping quiet (Martin 22). Comment: In this case, you have omitted Martins details and focused on only her key points, so your rewrite runs to less than half the length of her original remarks. Your five-word frame makes your summary forty-eight words long. Since you have not mentioned Martins name in your frame, you must add her name, along with the sources page number, in your MLA parenthetic citation. Finally, for a short quotation or summary, place the period of your last sentence after the closing parenthesis. If you added Martins name to your frame, your summary would look like this: According to the etiquette expert Judith Martin, most people say that their values are more important than manners. You might tell people, I want people to be healthy if you think they are eating something bad for them or feel that giving advice about their health is more important than keeping quiet (22). Comment: Because you have placed Martins name in your introductory frame, you need not include it in your MLA parenthetic citation. Again, notice that the period goes after the closing parenthesis. Using Direct Quotation As you should with summaries, always introduce a quoted source. Again, this frame should provide a proper grammatical transition and advise readers that a source is coming. The following samples demonstrate various ways to introduce quoted material.
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Short Quotation with Authors Name in Frame Begin with an introductory frame that includes the authors name, use a commaif neededto introduce the quotation, open the quotation marks, reproduce the sources exact wording, close the quotation marks, give only the page number in the parenthetic citation, and then end with a period. (If the quoted source has a quotation inside of it, use single quotation marks for the interior quote.) The etiquette expert Judith Martin has written, Whenever there is a contest between etiquette and acknowledged virtues, etiquette loses (22). Short Quotation with Authors Name in Parenthetic Citation Begin with an introductory frame that omits the authors name, add a comma if needed, open the quotation marks, reproduce the sources exact wording, close the quotation marks, provide the parenthetic citation with the authors name and page number, and then add a period. (Again, if the quoted source has a quotation inside of it, use single quotation marks for the interior quote.) One etiquette expert has written that [w]henever there is a contest between etiquette and acknowledged virtues, etiquette loses (Martin 22). Long Quotation with Authors Name in Frame Begin with an introductory frame that mentions the authors name, add a comma if needed, indent the whole quotation ten spaces from only the left margin, add the period, and then add the parenthetic citation with only the page number. (Since your long quotation is indented on the left, do not use opening and closing quotation marks. If your quoted source contains a quotation, however, reproduce the quotation marks just as they appear in the source.) According to the etiquette expert Judith Martin, Whenever there is a contest between etiquette and acknowledged virtues, etiquette loses. Hardly anyone would dispute the proposition that morals are more important than mere manners, and the assertion that etiquette can and should be jettisoned for a higher good is commonly made and accepted in everyday life. (22) Long Quotation with Authors Name in Parenthetic Citation Begin with an introductory frame that omits the authors name, add a comma if needed, indent the whole quotation ten spaces from only the left margin, add the period, and then include a parenthetical citation with both the authors name and the page number. (Again, since your long quotation is indented on the left, do not use opening and closing quotation marks. Also, if your quoted source contains a quotation, reproduce the quotation marks just as they appear in the source.) According to one etiquette expert, Whenever there is a contest between etiquette and acknowledged virtues, etiquette loses. Hardly anyone would dispute the proposition that morals are more important than mere manners, and the assertion that etiquette can and should be jettisoned for a higher good
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Limit your topic to a thesis. For this stage, you can follow the same advice that appears in Part 2 of this text: narrow the topic by brainstorming, clustering, freewriting, asking reporters questions, etc. Narrow the topic to a thesis by asking questions about your topic and then using your knowledge gained from your general education, your life experience, and your primary reading to come up with answers. Choose the best and most interesting answer and use it as the foundation for a rough draft. Write a rough draft of the paper, without using secondary sources. Having read your primary source(s) and taken notes, and having worked from a subject to a topic to a thesis, you can write a rough draft of your paper. You can organize such a paper in several different ways, but one traditional way of doing so is as follows: 1. Depending on the length of your poem, story, or drama, write a one- or two-paragraph summary of the literary work. Refer to events in the work in the present tense, as if the work comes alive as you retell it. If you refer to historical events about the literary work, such as when the author was born or when he or she published the work, provide that information in the past tense, because those are completed events in the past. 2. Focus on one aspect of the literary work for discussion, either plot, character, setting, or form. Describe that one aspect, being sure to use evidence from the work to support your interpretation. a. If you discuss the plot of a narrative or dramatic poem, a novel or short story, or a drama, then move through your analysis from earlier events to later events, even if the author tells of the events out of their normal chronological order. b. If you discuss a character, its a safe strategy to focus on three basic aspects of characterization: what the character says, what the character does, and what other say about the character. Otherwise, you can analyze the character scene by scene, but moving in chronological order even if the author tells about the characters actions in a jumbled chronology. c. If you discuss setting, focus on both time and place. When and why do events occur when they do? How does the historical period of the literary work limit or expand the characters or situation? Where does the literary work occur? Could the events of the story take place anywhere, or is there some special significance to the physical locale? d. If you discuss form, then what are the key elements of form that help us understand the literary work? For example, is there lots of imagery in the poem or is it fairly abstract. Does the presence or lack of imagery add to or detract from the poem? If so, how and why? In a drama, is there lots of foreshadowing of later events in the plot? If so, what tone or mood does that foreshadowing create? Does the foreshadowing exist to burden the tone or lighten the tone of the drama? 3. Conclude your discussion by discussing the significance or importance of the literary work. What, if anything, does the author want to show or teach us? How does the work reflect the time and place in which it was written, and what does that information tell us about the culture that the literary work grew out of? How does the literary work advance our understanding of ourselves or our culture?
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Read secondary sources about the literary work. After writing a rough draft, you then have a basic understanding of what you have read and have a context in which to read secondary sources. Secondary sources are the commentaries, analyses, or critiques about the primary source. These sources generally come in several different forms: Remarks or reviews written at the time that the literary work was published. The remarks can include diary entries by the author or his/her acquaintances, letters to and from the author, etc. Reviews would appear in magazines, journals, newspapers, and similar publications. Critical biographies and literary analyses by academic authors. One common obligation of college professors is that they must research and write about their field. English teachers, language professors, and the like write books and articles about literary works and publish them with accepted publishers or academic journals. Newspaper articles or reviews. Even long after a work is written, if it has enough respect in the literary world, journalists may write about it in later years. Major newspapers like the London Times, the New York Times, the Los Angeles Times, and so on have book review sections that cover these works. Anthologies and casebooks - Professors and other scholars sometimes publish books containing a collection of book chapters, articles, and other similar studies that comment upon the primary source. An anthology is a collection of literary pieces such as poems, short stories, or playsall of which relate to a common work or topic. The editors of anthologies often provide an introduction to orient you to the rest of the book. A book that collects both the original work and secondary sources that comment upon that work is called a casebook. Reference works - These sources include dictionaries, glossaries, encyclopedias, indexes, bibliographies, or related works. o Dictionaries, handbooks, and glossaries define the terms that people use in a particular academic field, like business, literature, science, and so on. o Encyclopedias provide brief overviews of authors, literary movements, literary terms, and so on. o Indexes provide a master list of articles that appear in specialized magazines, journals, and newspapers. o Bibliographies provide a master list of books and articles on a topic. Quite often, bibliographies have annotationsthat is, a sentence or paragraph that describes the nature and/or key points of each book or article listed in the bibliography. A list of helpful reference works for literature appears below: Dictionaries, Handbooks, and Encyclopedias Benet's Reader's Encyclopedia of American Literature - covers American literature from the era of European exploration to the early 1990s; contains entries on authors, titles, characters, literary genres, periodicals, movements, etc. Twentieth-Century Literary Movements Dictionary - defines literary terms and movements and authors associated with them. Common Knowledge: A Reader's Guide to Literary Allusions a dictionary that contains over four thousand literary allusions, or references, their sources, and brief explanations. A Handbook to Literature - defines major literary terms; also lists winners of literary prizes.
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Merriam-Webster's Encyclopedia of Literature identifies authors and works; literary landmarks and terms; characters from myth, folklore, and literature; literary movements; and awards and prizes. Includes pronunciation guides. The Oxford Companion to English Literature - includes author biographies, summaries of major works, and descriptions of literary societies, magazines, and prizes. The Oxford Companion to American Literature - includes author biographies, plot summaries of major works, and descriptions of literary societies, magazines, and prizes.
Bibliographies and Research Guides The Year's Work in English Studies - emphasizes English literature and covers other literature in English; organized by critic, author, and subject. Literary Research Guide key research sources in American and English literature; describes key bibliographies, indexes, databases, dictionaries, etc. American Literary Scholarship: An Annual - essays review the previous year's published research in American literature; organized by author and subject. Bibliographical Guide to the Study of the Literature of the U.S.A. - lists books and articles on American literature and literary research. The New Cambridge Bibliography of English Literature - covers authors in English from the Old English period to 1950; volumes 1-4 have a chronological, sub-divided organization by type of literature; volume 5 is an index. Biographies, Criticism, and History Contemporary Literary Criticism - provides biographical sketches, brief overviews, and excerpts from previously published criticism; each volume has a title index to the volume and a cumulative author index to this and other Gale Research anthologies series. Poetry Criticism contains biographical sketches, brief overviews, and excerpts from previously published criticism on poets; each volume has cumulative indexes by author and nationality. Short Story Criticism contains biographical sketches, brief overviews, and excerpts from previously published criticism on short fiction writers; each volume has cumulative indexes by author, topic, and nationality. A Literary History of England contains entries on major writers, literary movements, and types of literature. Indexes are by author and title. Columbia Literary History of the United States covers early Native American cave painting to the 1980s; long chapters cover major writers, literary movements, and types of literature. Indexes are by author and subject. Dictionary of Literary Biography contains many volumes on English and American writers; gives lists of works, biographical data, criticism, bibliographies, and illustrations; each volume includes a cumulative index to the entire series. Contemporary Authors - covers current authors in various fields and nationalities; entries include biographical and critical data, lists of works, and bibliographies. Parallel series exist for other genres and are entitled Contemporary Poets, Contemporary Dramatists, and Contemporary Novelists. Book Reviews and Articles Book Review Digest lists book reviews published in select American and English periodicals and includes abstracts and review excerpts; arranged alphabetically by book author; indexes by subject and title.
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Book Review Index lists more reviews than does Book Review Digest, but includes no abstracts or review excerpts. Arranged alphabetically by author. Indexed by book title. Essay and General Literature Index lists essays and articles in over six hundred books per year; contains biographical, critical, and bibliographical material. MLA Bibliography contains exhaustive lists of periodicals, books, and dissertations in modern languages and literatures; hardcopy is arranged chronologically within subdivisions by nationality; includes subject index; is available through libraries on the Internet.
As you read the secondary sources, you again should create bibliography cards and content cards. Remember: The bibliography cards should be coded by letter and contain all required bibliographic information. The content cards should have the book/article letter and the page number from which the quotation or summary originated. Write a second draft of the research paper. The second draft may differ only a little from the first draft. In such a case, you can expand your first draft by including relevant remarks from your secondary sources to further illustrate or support your first conclusions. If your secondary source reading has steered you towards a greatly revised thesis, then your second draft should reflect that information. Perhaps you missed some essential events or ideas in the literary work and your secondary reading has pointed you towards those things. Or you understood what happened in the literary work but missed important images or symbols that add greatly to the meaning of the work. Your secondary sources may have called those images or symbols to your attention. Whatever the case may be, make sure that any quotations or summaries of secondary sources appear along with MLA-style sentence citations of the author and page number right after your enter the quote or summary. Write successive drafts improving on the clarity, organization, and evidence in the paper. As you work toward the final draft, revise your word choice, rewrite your sentences, and reorganize your paragraphs so they are clear and concise. Be sure that your discussion keeps moving forward towards the last paragraph, but also includes sufficient evidence to make your interpretations and conclusions believable. Also make sure that sentence citations appear for every single quotation or summary that comes from a secondary source. Whether you accidentally or purposely leave out references to borrowed material, you have still committed plagiarism and can earn an F on the paper. Type a final draft and include a Works Cited page. Use the following checklist to verify that you have the correct format for an MLA-style paper on a literary work: Your last name and page number appear in the top right corner of each page, one-half inch from the top edge of the paper, in 10-point font. The rest of the paper is typed in 12-point font, with a one-inch top and bottom margin and a 1.25-inch left and right margin. On page 1, your name, the professors name, the course name and number, and the papers due date appear in the upper-left corner. The title of your paper is centered below the MLA heading but above the first paragraph. This title is in caps and lower case, not all caps, not bolded, etc. The first and succeeding paragraphs of your paper are indented one tab stop from the left, left aligned only.
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Short quotations (fewer than five lines) are introduced and ended with quotation marks, then follows the open parenthesis, then the authors last name, a space, the page number, the closing parenthesis, and then the period. Long quotations (five or more full lines) are NOT opened and closed with quotation marks. Instead, you indent one additional inch on the left and right. The parenthesis, authors name, page number, and close parenthesis appear AFTER the last period of the quotation. The Works Cited page appears at the end of the paper. You center the title, Works Cited. (but with no quotation marks) at the top of the page. Your book and articles entries are alphabetized by authors last name and typed with a hanging indent. That means that, in contrast to a paragraph, the first line of the bibliography entry is aligned left, but any following lines are indented one tab stop. All sections of the paper are double spaced. The heading is double spaced, the body of the paper is double-spaced, all quotations or summaries are double-spaced, and the cited works are double-spaced both within and between each entry.
Defining Plagiarism In general terms, plagiarism is the use of the words and/or distinctive ideas of someone else, but passing them off as your own. It does not matter whether you plagiarize accidentally or purposely. The only thing that does matter is if your presentation fails to indicate that that the source is someone other than you. You might be able to say that, ethically or morally, accidental plagiarism is not as serious as purposeful plagiarism. However, readersand gradershave no way of determining whether or not you intended to plagiarize. They can only determine whether you have given clear and proper credit for sources. Plagiarism can occur because you were lazy or dishonest and you didnt care whether you used someone elses material. It also can occur because you neglected to cite your sources or took sloppy notes and missed sources that need citing. Or it can occur because you had a personal emergency to attend to but still wanted to submit something to your instructor. Understanding the Penalties for Plagiarism Some teachers are lenient about plagiarism and will let you redo a paper. Others, especially those who give clear and repeated instructions, may discipline you in your first case. Colleges and universities often have the following policy about plagiarism: First offense an F on the assignment Second offense an F for the course Third offense expulsion from school All of this talk of penalties may suggest that the only reason to avoid plagiarism is to avoid a failing grade. But if that were the case, the quickest and easiest way to solve this problem would be to eliminate failing grades! Therefore, avoiding punishment may be your motivation not to plagiarize, but that cannot be your reason to avoid it. Instead, cite your sources properly for the following reasons: 1. To receive credit for looking at the work of other people 2. To acknowledge your debt to other people for the work they have done before you 3. To show that your ideas have the support of facts and/or well-reasoned opinion 4. To show who your opponents are in an argument if you want to argue partially or completely against what they have said 5. To let your fellow learners know where they can find more information on your topic
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Whatever your schools policy is, the best way to avoid plagiarism is to take careful notes on outside sources and properly acknowledge them in your papers. Examples of Plagiarized Passages and Solutions to Them Original Source 1 Throughout most of recorded history, theologians and philosophers have extolled propriety and correct social behavior as virtues akin to morality. It is chiefly in this century that they have come to regard etiquette as a dispensable frill, at best; at worse, they have denounced it as a sin. Hypocrisy is the damning label now attached to any polite inhibition that disguises a sincerely held opinion or restrains a righteous impulse for action. (Judith Martin, The Worlds Oldest Virtue. First Things 33 (May 1993): 22-25.) Plagiarized In most of recorded history, theologians and philosophers have claimed that proper etiquette and social behavior are virtues resembling morality. In the 20th century, these people have come to view etiquette as a dispensable frill or even a sin. They now use the word hypocrisy to describe any polite inhibition that disguises sincerely held opinions or restrains righteous impulses for action. Not Plagiarized Judith Martin notes that, before the 20th century, theologians and philosophers encouraged people to display proper social behavior. Only now do these thinkers regard such behavior as a dispensable frill or even a sin (23). Comment: The plagiarized version uses wording that is extremely close to the original and fails to cite the author and page number of the source. However, the non-plagiarized version provides a proper summary in your own words, supplies the authors name in the introductory frame, and includes the page number in the parenthetic citation. Original Source 2 Sometime around 130 B.C. Greek mathematician Hipparchus broke with the oral traditions of poetry and mythology, set pen to parchment, and compiled the first written catalog of the stars. His singular document contained about 850 entries, loosely organized by constellations and coordinates. It was a modest start for a distinctly immodest projecttaking stock of the entire universe and trying to figure out what, exactly, is out there. (Corey S. Powell, Field Guide to the Entire Universe. Discover 26:12 (December 2005) <http://www.discover.com/issues/ dec-05/cover>.) Plagiarized Around 130 B.C. Hipparchus broke with oral tradition, set pen to parchment, and assembled the first written star catalog. His distinctive document has over 800 entries arranged by constellations and coordinates. He made a modest start for a bold project, taking stock of the whole universe and trying to figure out what exactly is out there (Powell). Not Plagiarized One historian of astronomy has noted that, around 130 B.C., the Greek mathematician Hipparchus broke with the oral traditions of poetry and mythology, set pen to parchment,
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and compiled the first written catalog of the stars. His singular document contained about 850 entries, loosely organized by constellations and coordinates (Powell). Comment: Again, the plagiarized passage uses wording that is too close to that of the original source, even though the passage adds the name of the sources author in parentheses. However, the non-plagiarized version uses the original phrasing, provides quotation marks exactly where needed to mark the section of the source being quoted, and provides the source authors name. Since the source is an online Web page in HTML format, you need not provide page numbers because such numbers would vary according to the size of the font on your computer screen. Understanding the 2009 MLA Format for Bibliography Entries The following section contains names of actual authors, titles, publishers, etc. for books, articles, online sources, and so on. What is important is to learn the elements and order in which information appears. Notice that the format for Works Cited is to left align the first line of the entry and then indent the second and other following lines one tab space from the left. Note Well: We have saved space in this guide by single-spacing all sample entries. However, in an actual paper, you must double-space within and between all entries.
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Generic Form - Books Author(s). Title of Book. Additional Publishing Information [if needed]. Place of Publication: Publisher, Year of Publication. Publication Medium. Book with One Author Tan, Amy. Saving Fish from Drowning. New York: Putnam, 2005. Print. Two Books by the Same Author McPhee, John. The Founding Fish. New York: Farrar, 2006. Print. ---. Uncommon Carriers. New York: Farrar, 2002. Print. (After the first appearance of an author's name, use three hyphens and a period for the author's name for additional books. List books alphabetically by the authors last name and then by the first main word of the title.) Book with Two or Three Authors Clarke, Harold, Allan Kornberg, and Thomas Scotto. Making Political Choices: Canada and the United States. Toronto: U of Toronto P, 2009. Print. (If there are more than three authors, list only the first author followed by the Latin phrase et al. in place of the other names.) Book with a Corporate Author World Health Organization. The World Health Report 2008: Primary Health Care, Now More Than Ever. Geneva: World Health Organization, 2008. Print. Book with an Anonymous Author The Dorling Kindersley World Reference Atlas. London: Dorling, 2007. Print.
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Book with an Editor Plath, Sylvia. The Unabridged Journals of Sylvia Plath. Ed. Karen Kukil. New York: Anchor, 2000. Print. Book with a Translator Alighieri, Dante. The Inferno. Ed. Allen Mandelbaum. New York: Bantam, 1982. Print. A Government Publication Stiller, Ann. Historic Preservation and Tax Incentives. US Dept. of Interior. Washington: GPO, 2003. Print. A Sacred Text The Holy Bible. Thomas Scofield, NIV. Nashville: Thomas Nelson, 1983. Print. The Quran: Translation. Trans. Abdullah Usuf Ali. Elmhurst: Tahrike, 2000. Print.
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Generic Form - Book Section (E.g., Chapter or Essay) Author(s). "Title of Article." Title of Collection. Ed. Editor's Name(s). Place of Publication: Publisher, Year. Pages. Publication Medium. Article in an Anthology Manning, Brad. Arm Wrestling with My Father. The Brief Bedford Reader. 10th ed. Eds. X. J. Kennedy et al. Boston: Bedford, 2009. 126-130. Print. Two or More Items in a Collection Chopin, Kate. The Storm. Kennedy and Gioia 115-18. Kennedy, X. J. and Dana Gioia, eds. Literature: An Introduction to Fiction, Poetry, and Drama. 10th ed. New York: Longman, 2007. Print. OConnor, Flannery. Revelation. Kennedy and Gioia 368-81. (Supply the full bibliographic data for the anthology, but supply only the author(s), title, editor(s), and page number for the specific items. Alphabetize by the general editors and specific authors last names, even if the entry for the anthology appears after one of the specific titles.) Article from a Reference Book Sonata. The American Heritage Dictionary of the English Language. 4th ed. 2000. Print. Wenner, Manfred W. Arabia. The New Encyclopaedia Britannica: Macropaedia. 15h ed. 2007. Print.
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Article in a Magazine or Newspaper Lord, Lewis. Theres Something about Mary Todd. US News and World Report 19 Feb. 2001: 53. Print. Stout, David. Blind Win Court Ruling on US Currency. New York Times 21 May 2008, natl. ed.: A23. Print. Generic Form - Article in Academic Journal Author(s). "Title of Article." Title of Journal Volume:Issue (Year of Publication): Pages. Publication Medium. Article in an Academic Journal Ryan, Katy. Revolutionary Suicide in Toni Morrisons Fiction. African-American Review 34.3 (2000): 389-412. Print.
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Note Well: In listing electronic sources, be sure to list not only the publication date but also the access date because Web pages often change. At a later date, the desired source may be moved to a different Web address or be deleted. Generic Entry Entire Web Site Title of Web Site. Publisher or Sponsor, publication date. Electronic Medium. Access Date. Entire Web Site The Recovered Memory Project. Taubman Center for Public & American Institutes. Brown U, 2005. Web. 20 Nov. 2009. Generic Entry Page on a Web Site Author. Title of Work. Title of Web Site. Publisher or Sponsor, publication date. Electronic Medium. Access Date. Page on a Web Site Merriman, C.D. James M. Barrie. The Literature Network. Jalic, 2006. Web. 20 November 2009. Generic Form - Article in an Online Journal Author(s). "Title of Article." Periodical Title Volume.Issue (Year): Pages/Paragraphs. Electronic Medium. Date of Access. (Some journals and magazines provide paragraph or page numbers. Include them if they appear on a Web page.) Article in an Online Journal Nealon, Jeffrey T. The Swerve Around P: Literary Theory after Interpretation. Postmodern Culture 17.3 (2007): n. pag. Web. 20 Nov. 2009. Generic Entry - Article in an Online Newspaper or Magazine Author. Article Title. Newspaper or Magazine Title Day Month Year. Electronic Medium. Access Date.
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Article in an Online Newspaper or Magazine Dina, Stephen. Immigration Bill Is Promoted for 2010. The Washington Times. 14 Nov.
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text-based address on the Internet that correlates to the numeric address of a computer on the Internet. Each domain name must be unique so that, when you try to connect to that address, you reach only that address and none other. Also in the 1980s, the federal governments National Science Foundation (NSF) created the NSFnet to link five supercomputer centers. Soon, this network replaced the ARPAnet as the central element of the Internet. In 1995, however, the NSF decommissioned the NSFnet, and the private sector took over responsibility for the Internet. By the 1990s, the World Wide Web was booming because more and more people had personal computers and commercial enterprises were now allowed onto the Internet. By 2000, the number of U.S. adults using the Internet may have surpassed 100 million. In the last few years, the Internet has exploded with new types of Web sites and Web files. For example, in 2001 the open-source Wikipedia website (www.wikipedia.org) started. As an opensource site, it solicited encyclopedia entries from anyone and everyone, hoping that thousands of Internet users would create a free but reliable reference source. Unfortunately, the dream of free and reliable data has been problematic. Legal troubles in recent years have forced the site to impose stricter editorial controls over who can work with entries. The site still has too much unreliable or plagiarized data on it to be usable as an academically respected site, but it does have some beneficial features, such as interesting images as well as hyperlinks to many reliable data sources. In 2005, the YouTube website (www.youtube.com) came on line, where people post short videos that either they have created or culled from other websites that post videos. Personal networking sites like Facebook (www.facebook.com) and MySpace (www.myspace.com) also have come on line, making it easy for people to reach out to others with their personal data and stories. In the huge and chaotic world of the Internet, these sites have both positive and negative aspects. On one hand, site members can easily contact both old friends and new acquaintances without large expenditures of time and money. On the other hand, because such sites interconnect people with millions and millions of Internet users, some site members have suffered cyber-abuse from unethical and/or criminal elements. Internet crime in other areas also has occurred. The online site for the Information Please Almanac (www.infoplease.com) estimates that by 2003, Internet users had downloaded illegally more than 2.6 billion music files per month. Infoplease also says that in 2004, an Internet virus of the worm variety, called MyDoom or Novarg, spread through Internet servers, causing roughly one in twelve e-mail messages to be infected.34 On a more serious note, many government websites in democratic countries have suffered cyber-attacks from less scrupulous nations. On the positive side, however, the Internet makes it increasing possible for users of all ages to learn more about other people and cultures, do online research thought of as unthinkable just a few years ago, contact and/or interview famous people and experts without undue intrusions, and improve their purchasing power as the Internet has increased price competition for both goods and services. The following two tables offers some interesting statistics on Internet usage in the fifteen countries that use the Internet and some data on the purposes of Internet use in the United States, which hasby farthe most computers with Internet service.
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Understanding the World Wide Web The World Wide Web is a global collection of Web sites containing text and multimedia documents that constitute a huge library you can access via hyperlinks. A Web site is a page or set of related pages dealing with one subject or topic. The main page of a Web site is the home page, which should orient you to the Web site by indicating its main topic and organization.
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Web sites are written in Hypertext Markup Language (HTML). HTML is a coding language that enables you to establish the format of text and graphics, add hyperlinks to a page, create lists and tables, divide the page into subsections, insert and format graphics, etc. The advantage of HTML is that it works on different brands of computers and in different Web browsers. These days, Web page builders also use additional programming languages known as XML, JavaScript, and Flash. A Web browser is a software program that enables you to search for and find Web sites, that organizes sites on your computer screen, and enables you to navigate, or move among, Web sites. The two most common Web browsers are Internet Explorer and Netscape Navigator, commonly called just Netscape. When the World Wide Web first became popular, Netscape was the most common Web browser; however, about 90% of Web users now use Internet Explorer to navigate the Web. A hyperlink is a word, phrase, graphic, or other specific location on a Web page thatwhen clickedtakes you to another area of the same document, a different document in the same Web site, or a different site. Hyperlinks enable you to move quickly within a document, within pages of a Web site, or from site to site. Ideally, the hyperlinks in one site will take you to other information that directly relates to the information you have sought on the first site. However, some sites may contain hyperlinks to other sites that have little, if anything, to do with the site you just left. Finally, remember that the World Wide Web is just one part of the Internet, but because of its ease of use, has taken over the vast majority of the Internet. In fact, the World Wide Web is so popular that many people use the term Web interchangeably for Internet. Major Types of Web Sites Commercial sites contain product information, service information, advertising, answers to frequently asked questions, customer service pages, and other data that people commonly want and need from a company. Commercial sites may tell you about the following: Major international corporations like General Motors (www.gm.com) or Microsoft (www.microsoft.com). Small business like car repair shop (www.nowestautobody.com/) or a local florist (www.heavenearthfloral.com). Because it is easy to order products on the Web and have them delivered to you, many companies have no retail stores at all and do only electronic commerce, or e-commerce. E-commerce refers to the buying and selling of goods and services and/or the distributing and receiving of information on the Internet, especially the World Wide Web. Business people often use this term and a newer term, e-business, interchangeably. An example of a company that closed all of its brick-andmortar stores to go exclusively online is Egghead Software (www.egghead.com). Government sites contain information about official political regions and organizations. Sites for democracies generally have many separate web sites, usually for the executive, legislative, legal, and other branches of government. Restrictive countries tend to have very few Web sites and/or pages. Naturally, non-English speaking countries will display their official Web sites in their native language. However, some countries also have English-language pages containing much of the information contained in the non-English pages. Some sample governmental sites are the following:
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A nation like Iraq - http://www.iraqigovernment.org/ A political arm of the government like the United States Senate www.senate.gov A local ruling body such as the City Council of Auckland, New Zealand http://www.govt.nz/record?tid=2&recordid=210.
Educational sites contain information about elementary schools, high schools, colleges, universities, and related organizations. These sites often contain information about a schools location; its educational program and supporting organizations such as the PTA; its teachers, administrators, and support staff; and its student clubs and activities. Many school sites have a subsection where teachers can post classroom information and students can post homework or related material. Some schools even have a Web site section where students can create personal pages as long as those pages conform to the schools posting regulations. Different types of educational organizations will have different endings to their Web addresses. For example, only colleges and universities tend to use the .edu ending. The following table lists examples of education Web sites:
Name of Organization The Cittone Institute Levittown Public Schools Abbey Lane School Suffern High School Boston Latin School Rockland Community College University of California, Berkeley Type of Organization Private business school chain Public school district Public elementary school Public high school Private high school Public two-year school Public university Web Address www.cittone.com www.levittownschools.com www.levittownschools.com/abbeylane shs.ramapocentral.org www.bls.org www.sunyrockland.edu www.berkeley.edu
Organization sites contain information about non-profit organizations such museums, professional organizations, charities, public broadcasting stations, and the like. These sites generally display the work of qualified experts in the field covered by the site, so you usually can use their official materials in academic work. However, be careful to distinguish between those parts of the site that contain articles and other expert-generated materials and those parts that contain just raw data used in support of sitefor example, personal diaries or journals quoted in the official articles. The following table lists some examples of organizational sites:
Type of Organization Non-profit Professional Charities Public radio network Organization Name The Metropolitan Museum of Art The Modern Language Association The American Red Cross National Public Radio Web Address www.metmuseum.org www.mla.org www.redcross.org www.npr.org
Personal sites contain information about individual people. Computer programs like Microsofts FrontPage and Macromedias Dreamweaver have sprouted up that make it easy to create Web sites, so these types of sites have become exceedingly popular over the last few years. People may post personal information about themselves in resumes, information about pets and hobbies they have, photographs of friends and neighbors, genealogical information about their families, or similar data. Be cautious about surfing such sites because some of them can be somewhat gross or, at the worst, just plain obscene.
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Searching the World Wide Web Entering URLs The most direct and fastest way to find information on the Web is to enter the Web address, or URL, of the Web site in which you are interested into the address bar of the Web browser. The acronym URL stands for Uniform Resource Locator, which is a verbal equivalent of a numerical code used by all sites on the Internet. Using Search Engines A second way to find information is to use a search engine, which is a software program that enables you to enter search terms called keywords to find listings of Internet sites that might relate to the kind of information you seek. Major search engines are Google, Yahoo, Ask Jeeves, All the Web, AOL Search, and Teoma. Using Directories A third way to find information is to use a search directory, which contains very broad categories like art, business and finance, computing, education, religion, and so on. You pick one of the largest categories in the directory and then work through more and more narrow categories until you find specific sites related to your search. For example, if you start by searching in Art, you may be able to narrow your search to Literature, then American Literature, then Horror Fiction, and then Stephen King. Using Metasearch Engines Even another way to find information is to use a larger search engine that gathers information from several search engines and lists the search results either in one master list or by each search engine. Use this type of search engine when you find that using only one search tool produces disappointingly few results. You also may want to use such a tool when trying to compare and contrast how individual search engines find and sort the same Web sites using the same keyword(s). Evaluating Web Sites Since the Internet is a massive collection of files from anyone and everyone, be skeptical about the truthfulness of what you find there. Certainly, many Web sites are sponsored by major publishers, educational institutions, reliable non-profit groups, and the like. However, many otherseven those with attractive text and quality graphicsare nothing more than one persons unfettered image of reality. Therefore, double-check the content of a Web site that you want to use for academic work against the following basic guidelines: Accuracy Does the site contain correct or truthful information, or does it just promote the gut-level opinions of its owner or webmaster? Reliability Does the site contain information that comes from trained, educated, and/or experienced persons in the field(s) discussed on the site, or is it just the work of someone with few or no qualifications to speak on the issues? Neutrality Does the site have an independent position and role regarding controversial subjects that it discusses, or does it just promote the ideas of a particular interest group like a political party, special-interest group, and so on? Comprehensiveness Does the site contain exhaustive information on a topic, or does it pick and choose its material to promote a slanted agenda? Currency Does the site contain up-to-date information, or does it contain outdated information that does not account for recent research and discoveries related to its main topic? Using Search Engines and Web Sites Many search engines will provide feedback from virtually any type of site that contains the same keyword(s) that you entered for a search. Others will search only a limited range of predetermined sites in order to increase your chances of finding sites that directly relate to the topic on which you are performing a search. Similarly, many Web sites, such as news sites like MSNBC, will cover a wide range of topicseverything from art to entertainment to health to politics to sports. Others, such as the United States National Parks Service Web site, will focus on specific topicsin this
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case, the system of federally owned parks in the United States, what they contain, how to visit them, and similar topics of interest to vacationers and other visitors. The following table lists a few search engines and Web sites that are appropriate for general searching and/or information: General Topics
Search Engines (by Popularity) Google www.google.com Yahoo - www.yahoo.com Ask Jeeves - www.ask.com All the Web - www.alltheweb.com Hotbot - www.hotbot.com Teoma - www.teoma.com Web Sites (Alphabetical) Arts and Letters Daily - www.aldaily.com Dictionary.com www.dictionary.com Information Please Almanac - www.infoplease.com Encyclopedia.com - www.encyclopedia.com Internet Public Library - www.ipl.org Refdesk.com - www.refdesk.com
The table starting on the next page lists search engines and/or specific websites appropriate for searching and/or information in specific academic areas. For sites that have both lowercase and uppercase characters, be sure to use the exact font indicated in the Web address.
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Web Resources & Addresses American Anthropology Association http://www.aaanet.org WWW Virtual Library: Anthropology http://vlib.anthrotech.com/ Academic Info: Art & Art History http://www.academicinfo.net/art.html Art History: Resources for the Study of Art History http://Witcombe.sbc.edu/ARTHLinks.html Voice of the Shuttle Art History and Architecture http://vos.ucsb.edu/index.asp The Louvre http://www.louvre.fr/anglais/title.htm The Metropolitan Museum of Art, New York http://www.metmuseum.org/home.asp The National Gallery http://www.nga.gov/ BioLinks http://www.bioview.com National Science Foundation: Biology http://www.nsf.gov/home/bio/ WWW Virtual Library: Biosciences http://mcb.harvard.edu/BioLinks.html The Scout Report for Business and Economics Archives http://scout.wisc.edu/Reports/BusEcon/archive/ Bigcharts http://www.bigcharts.com Business Week Magazine http://www.businessweek.com/ CBS MarketWatch http://marketwatch.com Forbes Magazine http://www.forbes.com Fortune Magazine http://money.cnn.com/magazines/fortune/ Internet Public Library Business & Economics Section http://www.ipl.org/div/subject/browse/bus00.00.00/
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e) Use a comma between a [a] long introductory prepositional phrase, [b] subordinate clause, or [c] modifying verbal phrase and the independent clause that follows. Long prepositional phrase: In the movie theater down the road, I watch all sorts of movies. At the delicatessen on the corner, I have long conversations with the owner at closing time. Subordinate clause: When I am sick or exhausted, I love to watch situation comedies to cheer me. Even if I studied hard before an examination, I sometimes dont do very well on the test. Verbal phrase: To be or not to be, that is the question. Reading as fast as I could, I finished all of Joan Didions essays assigned for class. f) Use NO comma between an independent clause and a following dependent clause if the dependent clause restricts the meaning of the independent clause; DO use a comma between an independent clause and a following dependent clause if the dependent clause does NOT restrict the meaning of the independent clause. Dependent clause is restrictive: I watch horror movies only when I can go with my friends. I read all of Joan Didions essays that were assigned for class. I love to watch television shows that were first produced during the 1950s. Dependent clause is NON-restrictive: I watch horror movies regularly, which is why I often have nightmares. I read all of Joan Didions essays, even the ones that are in the back of the book. I watch situation comedies, although I dont like the ones with profanity. g) Use a set of commas, parentheses, or dashes at both ends of a sentence element that interrupts the flow of major sentence elements like the subject and predicate, predicate and direct object, etc. I watch horror movies, the only type of movie that I like, at my local theater. Joan Didions husband (who also was a writer) died about two years ago. The Boston Red Soxcan you believe it?!won the World Series in 2004!
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The names of geographic divisions, regions, localities, and topographical features such as rivers, lakes, and mountains: South America The Middle East the Atlantic Ocean Lake Mead Long Island the Ozark Mountains (Do not capitalize compass directions:) I live fifty miles south of Chicago. He lives three miles west of the main intersection of town. I like to go south in the winter. The names of major nationalities, ethnic groups, tribes, and languages, even when used as modifiers: Spanish, the Spanish language The Bantu tribe Asian-American heritage Titles that come before a name: President George W. Bush Aunt Juanita Doctor Samuel Johnson Professor Hammersmith Queen Victoria (Do not capitalize such terms elsewhere:) a biography of the queen the congresswomans speech my aunt, Juanita Jones the president's fundraising efforts the residence of the vice-president Epithets (i.e. labels or titles applied to person, especially famous ones): Ivan the Terrible was one of the czars of Russia. Abraham Lincoln is known as the Great Emancipator. New Orleans is sometimes called The Big Easy for its relaxed atmosphere. The names of specific political and judicial bodies, social organizations, councils, and departments: The United States Congress The Socialist Workers Party The Indianapolis Chamber of Commerce The American Red Cross
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The names of specific historical periods, events, and documents: The Early Middle Ages The Ancient World The Battle of Gettysburg The Declaration of Independence The names for streets, buildings, and monuments: Broadway The San Francisco Opera House Camden Yards The Statue of Liberty The names for the supreme deity and major religious books: God The Lord Almighty Allah The Talmud The Analects of Confucius The names for major religious faiths, groups, denominations, and their members: Catholicism, Catholics Hinduism, Hindus Islam, Muslims Judaism, Jews Protestants, Protestantism The days of the week, months of the year, holidays, and holy days: Monday, Tuesday, etc. January, February, etc. Yom Kippur Presidents Day Christmas Kwanzaa The pronoun I: I told her that I wanted to turn left, not right. When do you think I should take the swimming course? At what time should I arrive? The first word in the salutation and complimentary close of a letter: My dearest Carole, To Whom It May Concern: Sincerely yours, Very truly yours,
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The first word of a sentence, including questions and exclamations: We are going to a flea market this weekend. Were you on time to work today? Dinner is served! The first word of a direct quotation, except when the quotation is split: He asked me, Do you really like squirrels? Yes, said my friend, Bob, they're so cute. It was Patrick Henry who said, Give me liberty or give me death. The first word and all the key words in the title of a literary or other artistic work: A Streetcar Named Desire (play) Starry Night (painting) Light in August (novel) The White Album (record/CD) The Tragedy of Hamlet, Prince of Denmark (drama) The Song of Roland (epic poem) Everyday Use (short story) The Colonel (short poem) The Legend of Sleepy Hollow (tale) The main words in names of ships, aircraft, and space vehicles: USS Ronald Reagan (ship) The Spirit of St. Louis (airplane) The space shuttle Atlantis The names of galaxies, constellations, planets, stars, and other astronomical bodies: The Milky Way (galaxy) Neptune (planet) The Big Dipper (constellation) Alpha Centauri (star) The names of geologic eras, periods, epochs, and names of prehistoric divisions: The Paleozoic Era The Cambrian Period The Bronze Age The genus (but not the species or subspecies) when using scientific binomial nomenclature. Quercus alba (white oak) Haliaeetus leucocephalus leucocephalus (southern bald eagle) Homo sapiens (humanity literally, wise man)
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(Do not use the comma if the adjectives together express a single idea or the noun is a compound made up of an adjective and a noun: ) The kitchen had bright green curtains. Four bald eagles passed overhead when we went birding. I had a peanut butter sandwich for lunch. To set off words, phrases, or clauses in apposition to a noun: George Eliot, the great nineteenth-century novelist, was born in 1819. George Eliot, whose actual name was Mary Ann Evans, wrote several major novels. Eliots husband, a disciple of modern philosophy, died before she did. (Do not use commas when the appositive word or phrase is essential to the meaning of the sentence.) The novelist George Eliot was born in 1819. The president William Jackson was installed by the chamber of commerce. My friend Bobbie Jellico was in the Olympics. To set off nonessential phrases and clauses: My English instructor, who has a good sense of humor, often starts class by telling a joke. The Apollo 11 space mission, the first to land someone on the moon, occurred in 1969. Apollo 11, the movie starting Tom Hanks, premiered in 1996. Do not use commas when the phrase or clause is essential to the meaning of the sentence: The professor who teaches my evening class has no sense of humor. The man who ran the red light is parked over there. The levee that broke in New Orleans let in millions of gallons of water. To separate the independent clauses joined by a coordinating conjunction (and, but, or, nor, for, so, yet) in a compound sentence: He lives in New Jersey, but she lives in California. Some people like baseball, yet others like softball. He was born in Tucson, and she was born there too. To set off interrupters such as of course, however, I think, and by the way from the rest of the sentence: She knew, of course, that he was telling the truth. Oh, by the way, I'll be away next week. Our parents, in contrast, will be here all summer. To set off an introductory word, phrase, or clause at the beginning of a sentence: No, I would rather go alone to the library. After three years of hunting him down, I finally found my long-lost dog. Being tall, he often has thought about playing football. To set off a word in direct address: Thanks, folks, for all your help while I was in jail. How was your vacation, Ray? Madam, would you please lower that shotgun?
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To set off tag questions: Please wash the dishes, would you? Bring that computer over here, okay? You will work the night shift, right? To introduce a short quotation: Marie Antoinette supposedly said, Let them eat cake! I asked him, Want to go swimming? She asked me, Where did you get that milk? To close the salutation in a personal letter and the complimentary close in a business or personal letter: Dear Mary, Dearest Dad, Sincerely, Fred Very truly yours, Juliette DuBois To set off titles and degrees: Sarah Little, Ph.D. Alfred Johnson, Jr. (but not Alfred Johnson III) Jerrold Ford, M.D. To separate sentence elements that might be read incorrectly without the comma: At the fun house, in the mirror they could see distorted images of themselves. As an American, pie is one of my favorite kinds of dessert. For most, reading the novel Lonesome Dove would be a challenging three-day assignment. To set off the month and day from the year in full dates: The seminar will take place on September 6, 2006. I was born on March 11, 1965. Did you say that you were married on April 22, 1980? (Do not use a comma when only the month and year appear:) The seminar will take place in September 2006. The American Civil War began in April 1861. The American essayist Calvin Trillin was born in December 1935. To set off the city and state in an address: Godfrey Arthur 1450 Banning Street Boston, MA 02345 Wilma Randolph 428 Elm Street Dallas, TX 75005 Charles Rodriguez 14565 Bakersfield Boulevard Fresno, CA 91500
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To separate two independent clauses, the second of which begins with an adverbial conjunction such as however, consequently, moreover, or therefore: We waited an hour; however, we couldn't stay any longer. I went to college in Illinois; nevertheless, I then moved back to Idaho after graduation. We want to visit Los Angeles; furthermore, we want to see the redwood forests near San Francisco. To separate elements in a series that already contains commas: I sent messages to the professors, associate professors, and assistant professors; the secretary of the department; and some retired faculty members. I have lived in Bakersfield, CA; Chicago, IL; and Miami, FL. He attended Harvey Mudd College, in Claremont, California; UCLA, which is in Los Angeles; and then the University of Illinois, Urbana.
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The commander of the outnumbered American revolutionaries (George Washington, of course) had to know when to fight and when to run.
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Part 11 Exercises
Using the Dictionary Use each of the following words in a sentence that provides enough context to indicate that you know the meaning of the word. Poor example: Mitosis is a new word that I just learned. Good Example: Mitosis is a cell division process involving four stages. Word 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. Abrogate Bowdlerize Enervate Facetious Feckless Gerrymander Hubris Infrastructure Loquacious Sentence that Provides Context
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Read each paragraph below, and then decide which pattern of development it usesfor example, analogy, definition, process, etc. Be prepared to explain why you chose the pattern that you did. The idea of democracy originated, of course, in ancient Greece, more than two millennia ago. Piecemeal efforts at democratization were attempted elsewhere as well, including in India. But it is really in ancient Greece that the idea of democracy took shape and was seriously put into practice (albeit on a limited scale), before it collapsed and was replaced by more authoritarian and asymmetric forms of government. There were no other kinds anywhere else. Amartya Sen, Democracy as a Universal Value Farb was the worst insult in the hardcore vocabulary. It refers to [Civil War] reenactors who approached the past with a lack of verisimilitude. The words etymology was obscure; Young guessed that farb was short for far-be-it-from-authentic, or possible a respelling of barf. Violations serious enough to earn the slur included wearing a wristwatch, smoking cigarettes, smearing oneself with sunblock or insect repellentor, worst of all, fake blood. Farb was also a fungible word; it could become an adjective (farby), a verb (as in, dont farb out on me (an adverb (farbily) and a heretical school of thought (Farbism or Farbiness). Tony Horwitz, Confederates in the Attic Immediately after the meetings at Valladolid, the potential co-leaders of the [Magellan] expedition presented a list of demands to the crown; they were couched in respectful language, but they were demands nonetheless. They included an exclusive franchise on the Spice Islands for a full ten years, 5 percent of the rent and proceeds of all such lands that we would discover, and the privilege of trading for their own accounts, so long as they paid taxes to the king. They asked to keep any islands they discovered for themselves, if they discovered more than six, as well as permission to pass the newly discovered lands on to our heirs and successors. Laurence Bergreen, Over the Edge of the World I see four kinds of pressure working on college students today: economic pressure, parental pressure, peer pressure, and self-induced pressure. It is easy to look around for villainsto blame the colleges for charging too much money, the professors for assigning too much work, the parents for pushing their children too far, the students for driving themselves too hard. But there are no villains; only victims. William Zinsser, College Pressures Our daughter, Jill, has two grandmothers who are as different as chalk and cheese. One grandmother taught her to count cards and make her face as blank as a huge, white Kleenex when she bluffed at blackjack. They practiced in the bathroom mirror. The other grandmother taught her where to place the salad forks. When Jill was three, this grandmother taught her not to touch anything until invited to do so. The other grandmother taught her to slide down four carpeted stairs on a cookie sheet. Deborah Dalfonso, Grammy Rewards My mother talks about back home as a safe place, a silk cocoon frozen in time where we are sheltered by family and friends. Back home, my sister and I do not argue about food with my parents. Home is where they know all the rules. We trust them to guide us safely through the maze of city streets for which they have no map, and we trust them to feed and take care of us, the way parents should. Geeta Kothari, If You Are What You Eat, Then What Am I?
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Contrary to the biological theories of war, it is not easy to get men to fight. In recent centuries, men have often gone to great lengths to avoid warfleeing their homelands, shooting off their index fingers, feigning insanity. So unreliable was the rank and file of the famed eighteenth-century Prussian army that military rules forbade camping near wooded areas: The troops would simply melt away into the trees. Even when men are duly assembled for battle, killing is not something that seems to come naturally to them. As Lieutenant Colonel Dave Grossman argued in his book On Killing: The Psychological Cost of Learning to Kill in War and Society, one of the great challenges of military training is to get soldiers to shoot directly at individual enemies. Barbara Ehrenreich, The Roots of War Newspaper financial sections carry almost daily pronouncements from the computer industry and other businesses about their high-tech hopes for America's schoolchildren. Many of these are joined to philanthropic commitments to helping schools make curriculum changes. This sometimes gets businesspeople involved in schools, where they've begun to understand and work with the many daunting problems that are unrelated to technology. But if business gains too much influence over the curriculum, the schools can become a kind of corporate training centerlargely at taxpayer expense. Todd Oppenheimer, The Computer Delusion To paint double-hung windows, first remove them from their frames. Drill holes and insert two nails into the legs of a wooden stepladder. Then mount the window easel style for easy painting. Otherwise, lay the window flat on a bench or sawhorses. Then, using a tapered sash brush, start painting the wood next to the glass. Use the narrow edge of brush and overlap paint onto the glass to create a weathertight seal. Next, clean any excess paint off the glass with a putty knife wrapped in a clean cloth. (Rewrap the knife often so that you always wipe with a clean piece of fabric.) Overlap the paint onto the glass about 1/16 of an inch to create a good seal. Finally, paint the flat portions of the sashes, then the case moldings, the sill, and the apron. Adapted from www.homedepot.com Cricket is an outdoor game played with bats, a ball, and two wickets by two teams of eleven players each. Baseball also is played outdoors, but generally in a stadium rather than a large field, as cricket tends to be. Like cricket players, baseball players also use a bat and ball. However, a baseball bat is round rather than flat, and baseball players bat at home plate instead of in front of a wicket. Finally, baseball teams have nine players each instead of eleven. D. Langley
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Punctuating Correctly
In the second column, correctly punctuate the following sentences. In the third column, record the number of the punctuation rule that you followed from Part 10 of the textbook. If the sentence is correctly punctuated, write the letter C in the last column. Sentence 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. I love to watch videos on the weekend my wife loves to go bike riding instead. If I have to tell you again to stop you wont get ice cream for dessert! The challenger ran a great campaign, but the incumbent won both the popular and the electoral votes. Hamlet the prince of Denmark kills the kings foolish advisor. I read the essays by Tom Wolfe but I did not enjoy his writing style. Even though my wife recently had surgery we still plan to take dance lessons. I love to watch old movies on late-night television. Although I went to a small, private college I received a great education. Did you wash your hands? Did you take the dog for a walk? Did you lose your sister again? Rule No.
10. I consulted my handout on punctuation rules and then I punctuated all of the sentences correctly! 11. Do you think that Prof Smith will give everyone As on the final exam? 12. Syracuse which is in upstate New York is one of the cloudiest cities in the United States. 13. I like Dreyers chocolate ice cream but I like Klugen-Hass vanilla ice cream even more. 14. If you want to be a good writer you really must read a lot too. 15. Alice Walker one of Americas famous novelists also writes essays. 16. My printer broke down so I will have to hand in my paper late. 17. I dont care if Prof Smith thinks you are intelligent its dumb to put the dog in the microwave after giving it a bath! 18. I like to watch The West Wing which is on television on Wednesday nights. 19. I went to the information booth that stands at the corner of Woodlawn and Fifth Street. 20. Hamilton Community College located in Woodlawn is one of our leading community colleges.
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Bazaar/bizarre Bazaar means a market, shop, fair, or similar sale. Bizarre means odd, peculiar, or unconventional. The bazaar raised over $25,000 for the hurricane victims. The hurricane acted in a bizarre manner and caught the city emergency crews off guard. Beside/besides Beside means next to. Besides means in addition to. The actor pretended to weep beside the bed of the actress who portrayed the dying mother. Besides watching As the World Burns, I also watched Guiding Nightlight. Between/among Between is used when something is shared by only two people or things. Among is used for three or more persons or things. I stood between the bride and the groom in one of the wedding photographs. I stood among the five people who participated in the wedding ceremony. Breath/breathe Breath is a noun that means respiration, vitality, inhaled and exhaled air, etc. Breathe is a verb that means to inhale and exhale, to be alive, to express an idea or feeling, etc. I took a quick breath after receiving the slight shock from the lamp. I breathed a sigh of relief when I realized that the shock came from just static electricity. Capital/capitol Capital means a political center, money invested in a company, etc. Capitol means the building where a legislature meets. Little Rock is the capital of Arkansas. The state capitol in Little Rock resembles the U.S. Capitol in Washington, D.C. Child/kid Child is middle diction. Kid is a young goat or slang for child. Prefer child and children over kid and kids. Preferred: The political candidate made his announcement with his children standing behind him. Not preferred: The candidate made his announcement with his kids standing behind him. Council/counsel Council means a group of legislators, clergy, or similar body. Counsel is a noun that means advice or guidance or a verb that means to give advice or guidance. The council met in the capitol to discuss how to finance the recent crisis. The instructor counseled the student to hand in his remaining papers on time. Compare to/compare with Use compare to when indicating similarity between things compared. Use compare with to indicate difference. The novelist compared her main character to a wounded animal. The novelist compared her sympathetic characters with her unsympathetic ones. Complement/complement Complement means something that completes. Compliment means a flattering praising statement. Bread and butter complement each other nicely, even at a backyard barbeque. The cook at the barbeque received our compliments with humility. Continual/continuous Continual means something that recurs, but can stop. Continuous means something that never stops. Astronomers continually study the heavens for signs of runaway asteroids. The moon rotates continuously around the earth.
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Criterion/criteria Criterion means a standard or principle. Criteria is the plural of criterion. My criterion for sports teams is simple: are they in first place at the end of the season? The criteria for a great ballplayer is that he must hit, hit with power, run, field, and throw. Different than/different from Use different than when using a complete clause to contrast two items. Use different from to indicate that you are comparing two persons or things. My book is a newer edition, so it is different from yours. Since the new computer building has gone up, our campus looks different than it did last year. Discreet/discrete Discreet means prudent, tactful, cautious, etc. Discrete means separate, distinct, detached, etc. I gave a discreet nod to the actor so he would know it was time to go on stage. Henry IV, Part 1 and Henry IV, Part II are two discrete plays by Shakespeare. Etc./e.g./i.e. Etc. is short for et cetera and means and so forth or so on. E.g. is short for exempli gratia and means for example. I.e. is short for id est and means that is. My sister likes chicken, fish, vegetables, etc. My sister eats meals that do not include red meate.g., chicken, fish, vegetables, etc. My sister does not eat veal, beef, or bisoni.e., no red meat. Forward/forwards Prefer forward over forwards. Preferred: We went forward with our plans to build the new computer center. Not preferred. We went forwards with plans to build the new computer center. Get Get is slang and can have an almost endless number of meanings. Avoid using the word by preferring a middle level of diction. Preferred: Do not obtain your wedding license just minutes before you are to marry! Not Preferred: Dont get your wedding license just minutes before you are to marry! Good/well Good is an adjective that means moral, proper, fine, superior, etc. Well is an adverb that means healthy, fit, sound, etc. I knew that my father was a good person because of his forgiving spirit. My father was not well in his last few weeks of life. Hanged/hung Hanged refers to people and means executed by hanging. Hung refers to objects and means suspended, draped, etc. John Wilkes Booth co-conspirators were hanged after being convicted in the assassination of President Lincoln. Pictures of the late president were hung in parlor windows for many weeks after his death. If/whether If is a subordinating conjunction used to set up a condition or to indicate general speculation. Use the word whether when presenting two alternatives. Condition: If it is cold on Saturday, then I wont go to the outdoor concert. General speculation: I wonder if it will be very cold on Saturday. Two Alternatives: I am not sure whether I will go to the game on Saturday. (Note: do not add the phrase or not after the word whether; that phrase is unnecessary.)
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Its/its Its is the third person possessive pronoun for it. Its is the contract for it is. The dog had the bone in its mouth for nearly half an hour. Its a funny sight to see a dog hold on to a bone for nearly half an hour. Lay/lie Lay is the transitive verb (taking an object) that means to place or position on a surface. Lie is the intransitive verb (taking no object) that means to recline or rest. Lay the book on my desk before leaving class, please. The books will lie there until someone picks them up. Caution: Lay also can function as the past tense of to lie. Example: The books lay there yesterday, but no one picked them up. Less/fewer Use less to indicate items that cannot be counted. Use fewer to indicate items that you can count. The glass has less water in it today than it did yesterday. There are fewer glasses on the table today than yesterday. Lightening/lightning Lightening means becoming less cumbersome or less dark. Lightning means a powerful electric strike in the atmosphere. The robbers were lightening their load as they rushed from the bank in the lightening morning. Lightning struck the robbers van as they headed out of town during the freak storm at daybreak. Like/as Like is a preposition that means similar to. As is a subordinate conjunction used in subordinate clauses involving comparison. The Pennsylvania Monument at Gettysburg is like no other on the battlefield. The Confederates yelled as they made their charge across the open field. Little/few Use little to refer to quantities that you cannot count. Use few to refer to quantities that you can count. There was little time at the end of class to introduce a new topic. Only a few minutes remained in class when the teacher introduced a new subject. Medium/media As a noun, medium means an intervening substance, agency, news outlet, etc. Media is the plural of medium. The preferred medium for transmitting electricity in houses is copper wiring. The news media criticized the administration for its recent handling of the storm. Much/many Much generally refers to quantities that you cannot count. Many refers to quantities that you can count. It did not take much to see that the football player was near the end of his career. The football player had so many catches in one day that I could not count them all! Percent/percentage Percent means per hundred. Percentage is the noun form of percent and means parts expressed in hundredths. You can represent the decimal amount of 0.10 as ten percent. What percentage of the time do you spend working out mathematics problems?
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Predominant/predominate Predominant is an adjective that means most common or prevalent. Predominate is the verb form that means to be most common or prevalent. The predominant ethnic group in our town is Italian-Americans. Italian-Americans predominate the ethnic groups in our town. Principle/principal Principle is a noun that means standard, attitude, belief, etc. Principal is the noun for the senior member of a school or is an adjective that means chief, primary, key, etc. I try to follow the principle that one should treat others as one wants to be treated. Being more than fair to others is the principal value by which my friend tries to live. Prior/previous/before Prior and previous mean the same thing and are interchangeable: preceding in time or order; former or earlier. Before is an adverb that means earlier in time or a preposition that means in front or ahead. Just prior to his hanging, Nathan Hale reportedly said, I only regret that I have but one life to lose for my country. The Battle of Hastings (1066) occurred previous to the signing of the Magna Carta (1215). The Battle of Hastings occurred before the signing of the Magna Carta. Prophecy/prophesy Prophecy is a noun that means a prediction of future events or a similar inspired message. Prophesy is a verb that means to predict future events or similar inspired messages. The sports columnist made the prophecy that the pitching staff would fail his favorite team. The columnist prophesied that the pitchers would fail his favorite team. Quote/quotation Quote is a verb that means to repeat the exact words of another person. Quotation is a noun that means an exact reproduction of another persons words. The student wanted to quote Willa Cather in his paper. The quotation goes as follows: The dead might as well try to speak to the living as the old to the young. Real/really Real is an adjective meaning actual, true, etc. Really is an adverb that means, truly, actually, or indeed. I bought real milk for the new-born kitten. The new kitten was really youngonly four days old! So The word so can be an adverb, adjective, conjunction, pronoun, or interjection. Adverb: It was so hot today that I wore a tank top when I mowed the lawn. Adjective: Everything on my sisters desk must be exactly so. Conjunction: It quickly grew cold over night, so I closed the bedroom window. Pronoun: He started as a good friend and remained so. Interjection: So! You did decide to come to my surprise birthday party. Stationary/stationery Stationary means still, inactive, fixed, etc. Stationery means writing paper, envelopes, etc. The monument is now stationary, even though the heavy rains tried to wash it away. I used fine stationery to write a brief history of the monument that almost washed away.
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Than/then Use than to compare one thing with another. Use then to indicate a time sequence. It was later than I thought it was, so I rose quickly, washed, and dressed. I then went drove to work, but please dont ask how fast I was going! Their/there/theyre Their is the possessive form of they. There indicates not here. Theyre is the contraction for They are. Do NOT confuse these three words with each other. They built the house over there, near the college. Their house is made of brick. Theyre expecting to live in that house for less than a decade. Toward/towards Toward is middle diction. Towards is slang. Preferred: I hit the softball toward left field. Not Preferred: I hit the baseball towards the outfield. Try to/Try and Try to means to attempt to, taste, sample, etc. Do NOT use try and as a substitute for try to. Use try and only if you follow it with an unrelated action. I try to shop every third day, but sometimes I cannot. It is better to try and then fail than not to try at all. Use to/used to Use to is the incorrect form of used to. Preferred: I used to go to therapy, but then I found out that my therapist was insane! Not Preferred: I use to go to therapy. Which/that Use which when adding non-restrictive, additional information. Use that to indicate restrictive or essential information. I often rent a car for long trips, which is easier than buying a second car. I often go on trips that require overnight stops. Who/whom Who is the nominative form of the pronoun; use it as the subject or predicate nominative of a sentence. Whom is the objective form; use it as the direct object, indirect object, or object of a preposition. Who is going to go to the library with me to study? You went to the library with whom? Whos/whose Whos is the contraction of who is. Whose is the possessive form of who. Whos going to go to the library tonight? Whose books are those in the library?
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