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For Wharton Business School Essay -- MBA Discuss the factors that influenced your career decisions to date.

Please describe your professional development to date and goals for the future. How will the MBA experience influence your ability to achieve your goals? When I was an architect in China, I loved observing cities from the top of high-rise buildings. The view conveyed a sense of urgency, transformation, and history. Nearly every city, once quiet and colorless, had become a bustling construction jungle with newly lit neon signs and honking traffic. Scenes like these inspired my housing idea in college, an idea that had driven me throughout my architecture career and later, brought me to the US. The idea is simple. Mass-produced housing should be designed specifically for different groups of people, responding to their unique functional needs, tastes, family types, lifestyles, and financial situations. The need for such housing in China is immediate. China's economic reforms are quickly fragmenting the traditional, uniform lifestyle of the Chinese population, giving rise to a new class of urban professionals, those who drive cars and never cook, those who must make room for the millions of rural residents pouring into cities. Cookie-cutter housing has become obsolete and wasteful because it gives people unnecessary features, e.g., a fully equipped kitchen for a non-cooking person, while it lacks custom, needed components, resulting in neither an attractive product nor a valuable investment. More critically, China's limited land resources and capital can never afford such waste. Only creative, meticulous design, based on careful study of the needs of different users and coupled with appropriate technologies and tight construction controls, can bring quality, affordability, and resource savings to the world's largest urbanization. In my five-year architecture career, I focused on, advocated and tried to implement this idea. Even though I won a national award in housing design as a result of my efforts, I encountered numerous difficulties. This seemingly simple idea proved to be far more radical than most government housing officials, who until very recently controlled almost all China's urban housing, could accept. Unable to influence housing policy from the outside, I decided to effect changes from within - through policymaking. With that goal in mind, I came to the United States to study urban planning and policy. In the graduate school at University of ABC, I immersed myself in a wide range of urban issues, from advanced mathematical models of transportation planning to the inner-city empowerment zone initiatives. Upon graduation, I worked with the planning department of the ABC Authority. These study and work experiences brought me not only a framework of public planning and policy, but also new insights into my original housing idea. I discovered that I could use private development to implement my housing idea in lieu of government policies. Traditional real estate companies, however, are unlikely to be the best vehicles to reach this goal because they focus more on land appreciation than on product innovation. My concept refers not to land deals, but rather creating unique housing products, with distinct design, high quality, and attractive pricing and supported by cutting-edge marketing, personalized customer services, and continuous technological innovation. This concept could even be extended to the globally mobile professionals working for

multinationals like GE or McKinsey who might find owning affordable homes in different countries a good alternative to staying in hotels and a good personal investment. In order to prepare myself for creating and running such real estate business, I sought out and acquired a position with an entrepreneurially oriented company, ABC Research, in which I am exposed to many aspects of running a business. In the midst of that preparation, I became a manager with an "accent" no one in the company will soon forget. To many, this housing idea may sound too simple to be taken seriously. But great businesses often start with a simple idea, like Starbucks with Italian coffee and Michael Dell with the build-to-order system. As illustrated by my experience, I have the expertise, passion, determination, tenacity, and perseverance to turn this idea into reality. In China, I was the youngest project architect in one of its largest design institutes. Constantly juggling multiple projects and directing different teams of engineers, clients, government officials, and contractors to meet tight budget restrictions and deadlines fostered my strong project management skills and gave me an in-depth knowledge of architecture and construction. In the States, I acquired both theoretical and practical understanding of urban planning and development. At my current job as Manager of Research and Development, I am gaining solid experiences in market research, operations, product development, and project management. But those are not enough. In order to realize my dream, I require more than experience; I need to gain a more systematic business knowledge base in real estate development. More importantly, I need to procure a foundation in general management, finance, and marketing, as each represents an essential skill necessary for the success of this new type of real estate company I have envisioned. I am certain that the Wharton MBA program will facilitate this type of learning. I am also keenly aware that the eventual success of my vision depends on the amount of financial resources and the caliber of partnerships that I can attract for this project. This monumental task demands credentials, persuasive skills, sound business plans, and connections to business networks. The Wharton MBA program can provide access to all these essential necessities. In late 1997 I was on top of a high-rise building in Shanghai overlooking the Pudong District. As the world's most widely known Chinese development zone, it had witnessed dozens of high-rises simultaneously under construction only to see that development had come to a standstill. Pudong, along with other Southeast Asian regions represent the typical fluctuations experienced by many Chinese cities over the course of the past ten years. As I observed Pudong, I considered my nonspeculative housing idea and the positive role it could play in a city and country undergoing rapid development. There, history was unfolding unprecedented changes in China. I was merely a witness, but even then, I knew I had the vision and ability to do more!

Through the article, I get little information about what the applicant did in the past.

And the relation between his achievements and his future goal is elusive. So, it is not a persuasive essay.

Piece of Shit The essay is only a generic writing that the adcom hates to read. Hopefully, this article has not been proofread by bebeyond.com. The writer just boasts of his previous achievements, though to me those kind of achievements are next to zero. You know, every applicant has those kind of accomplishments in their respective area. Obviously, the writer does not do much research about himself and the school. With such an essay, I am afraid the writer is doomed to fail. I know why you were rejected This essays was not tailored to Wharton's MBA program. To this person, it seems that any MBA program can be helpful (though not necessary). And further, to the committee, the reasons for taking MBA education is neither sufficient nor persuasive. If I were the committee member, I would not be convinced by this essay.

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