Rashad Roberts Dr.

Gail Richard Composition I Final draft of Analysis 11/1/2013

When an individual submits a letter about an event or to request something, that document should be formal, without grammatical errors, informative to the fullest extent; it should carry an appropriate tone, especially if youre submitting a letter of request. All of this will help the writers ethos, pathos and logos. The writer or author of this letter failed to do all of the listed things within their writing and it either hurt their logos, pathos and ethos, or it caused them to lack one or the other. This was supposed to be a letter inviting alumni to a yearly event that celebrates hard work. Instead, it was a letter of bad presentation that could possibly ruin their planned event. To begin with, the authors credibility or ethos is damaged in this letter because the writers usage and mechanics are subpar. For example, in this sentence, the author states The party will be held on Friday, June 21, 2013 from 6: 30 p.m. until. at Dr. Jim Jones home for what will be a great celebration. The author fails to give an ending time for this event, and the writer also misuses an unneeded ellipsis. These grammatical errors hurt the authors ethos.

The author did not inform his reader where or how they should R.S.V.P. These things were vital parts and pieces of information to the writers letter. Because the author failed to do

this, their ethos was once again damaged. The entire names of the individuals submitting the letter of request should be typed at the end of the letter and the signatures should be at the end of their names so the intended audience will know who to address or contact about any questions or concerns. Because this was not executed, people may be deterred from the event because they simply dont know enough about it. This greatly hurts the writers credibility. The authors tone within his or her letter is informal which is inappropriate when writing about a formal event. In this sentence, This evening has been a time of celebration for five years of hard work, and a chance for the outgoing graduates to take a few jabs at the faculty and juniors the author attempts to have a good pathos, however they use an inappropriate tone which hurts ethos and pathos. This tone basically tells the audience that they will be made fun of, in a friendly manner, but they will be made fun of. This could potentially discourage people from attending the event. It could also discourage them from making donations. The tone that was perceived throughout this entire letter is one of failure. It sounds as though these individuals are asking for someone to compensate for the poor planning. The perceived tone damages the writers ethos even more. The author should consider his audience and utilize a good ethos, pathos and something this paper lacked logos. Throughout the entire letter there was no sense of logical appeal. This letter asks the audience give us money and compensate for our failures while we poke fun at you. There is no logical appeal in that. This letter should be rewritten and it should contain all of its needed components such as the correct letter head format, all of the needed information which will help the authors ethos, pathos and logos.