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Did you feel there was enough info portrayed about the main actor? Did you connect or could you identify with the main character? No, we know things about him but we don't really know anything about his personality of what he likes, ect. All I know about that character is that her boyfriend has left her. There are not enough details to connect with or identify the character kinda but i could connect with the character I wasn't able to connect to the character in the first act yet! Maybe describe more of the characters Well, maybe some of us will identify with the feeling of love..? However I don't think all high school students have gone through true love..... But I guess they would sympathize.

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Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? What was the catalst event? It is very sad and a little depressing, I'm not sure if that is the mood you were going for or not though. The girlfriend is leaving I think everything goes to fast; it would be better if there are more details yes but maybe explain more I think there should be more character development in the beginning! I like how her introduction is kind of a story and the rising action is good.

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yes, explains throughly main character's emotionlessness and stress from school There was a sufficient amount of There isn't enough information about the main actor. Act I information. Since this is a music video, it needs to be slightly longer. does lead to Act II. I feel like before the flashback, a scene can Yes, the character's characteristic was applied in the be just a bit longer so that the setting and beginning very well. characters are clear. Yes, I really liked the beginning of the film because it made me want to watch more of the film to find out why the main character Yes there was enough information portrayed about the was in a room with a man taking notes main character. I felt like I sort of knew him. about him. It's not confusing. Yes. But there should be more information about the Yes there was because it clearly shows it actor. in the beginning and the flashback. Yes, good idea to open the film with the Yes main conflict. yes, because she made a huge impact on Yes, no how macella is leaving the country. I think there should be more information about the character in act1 because the audience has to connect There were definitely enough information with the character from the start to stay interested. to lead to the rising action. Yes. I couldn't quite connect with the main character I like how the first scene starts off with a though. problem of the girl leaving. yes

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Did you feel there was enough info portrayed about the main actor? Did you connect or could you identify with the main character? yes it was well explained, i could connect with the story really well There waas enough information about the main character. There was enough information about the main character as i could imagine the awkwardness between the family. Yes. We can see what kind of girl she is. I could feel the sorrow and jealousy of the main character. I feel sympathy for her. She is rejected by his dad because of the dog. The characters were described well.

Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? yes, it sounds really interesting It's a cute story.... yes. It had enough information. Yes it's described very well. Yes there was enough background. good storyline flows well.

20 second decision. How much interest would you have in watching this film past 20 seconds putting What was the catalst event? aside any bias. Could be good...will keep watching a dad doesn't give her enough love litte more and then decide Very interesting; have to keep She feels the emptiness watching! Very interesting; have to keep the character's not loved watching! She wants attention from her dad Could be good...will keep watching a but he won't give it to her. litte more and then decide realize that dog is getting more attention from her dad. feelings the emptiness Very interesting; have to keep watching! Could be good...will keep watching a litte more and then decide

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I like her introduction The family seems very awkward, the dad The girl seems to be shy and feels unloved and doesn't seem to know how to interact with unwanted. She takes comfort in the dog but doesn't seem the daughter very well, the mother appears to get along well with the father. She does seem to be on to care and the daughter seems to be very okay terms with the mother. shy and lonesome. The beginning is very odd, and I want to Good job. Make sure to show clear emotions. find out more about what happens later on. Yes, she is lonelky Yes: disappointment and do Yes, the awkward relationship among the family Yes

Dad chooses the dog over the daughter The main character realizes that the dog is getting more attention Dad choosing the dog instead of his daughter feels empty (dog walk) Dog gets more attention father walks with dog instead of movie with daughter/main character His dad is going for a walk with the dog instead of watching a movie with his daughter

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Awkwardness with the family sets the tone. Yes, I like how she set the situation at the start, I think she portrayed just enough information about the saying that there is awkwardness between main character to keep the audience connected, because the family, and she establishes the main some people will have that experience as well/ character pretty well, in my opinion.

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yes, but it was confusing in a way how you used a dog, so i couldn't connect with the main character yes the characters were described well. I could tell that the characters well all awkward Yes. the shopkeeper working till night time.

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Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? What was the catalst event? I found it kind of weird that she was jealous of her dog... I understand the situation of how she wanted her dad's attention though. dog is getting more attention she feels the emptiness and she feels like the dog is getting more I liked how she had a good start loved nope

20 second decision. How much interest would you have in watching this film past 20 seconds putting aside any bias.

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Overall I really liked it. I think you did a good job with describing the setting, etc but try make the beginning yeap i can really relate more interesting. It seems to give a very good idea about where she is doing the documentary. Maybe she could talk about why the people The was quite a bit of information shown about the are selling illegally imported goods since it person because she was interviewing the person and seems to be a very important part of the therefore you see a lot more of their personality. story. Try to grab more attention in the beginning so that people are dragged into the story. Documentaries can sometimes be boring so try to make the beginning really Yes. She slowly peels the onion of the main actor. interesting. I like how the narration sets the tone. It Shop keeper organizing at night makes the viewer feel might be better to show the night market sympathetic closing action along with the narration Shopkeeper and the interviewer- very detailed (casual Good introduction of the marketplace. It questions) seems good. Good introduction to the setting, developing the general view of the Who is the main character? the shopkeepers? it is very documentary. "Night market" is a very interesting. I feel the hardships of the shopkeeper, how interesting topic. I think it is very sensitive he has to work illegally but also deal with the customers. topic dealt with illegal markets. Yes, everyone is hard working and this portrays a good Yes, it talks about the negative things example of hard working about the night market first. There is enough background, but I don't believe the audience of high school Not sure if I could feel connected to the main topic of the students will get easily interested in the film. subject. Good beginning, but I was a little confused Not much where exactly the film was going.

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Getting the clothes illegally. Illegal products sold

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Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? What was the catalst event? I like the use of contrast between the big official shopping mall and the illegal little market. The narration also helps the viewers understand the information about I think the interview helps the viewers get attached to the the night market. However, I think you interviewed person. However, i think it's important not to could describe more about dongdemoon get too personal with the interviews so the viewer is not itself, its popularity and how the night too attached to the person who is interviewed as it might market works to draw the viewers intention the fact that the market was distract them from the main focus of the documnetary. into the documentary. illegal. There is lots of information about the shop keeper and how he lives, I feel sympathy towards him. However, i think when you are interviewing, you should give some Lots of information about the shop keeper, privacy to the person you are interviewing, at least keep which is good because it helps us connect The catalst was that he got the their name private, unless they are fine with it. with the character. goods illegally The background information is sufficient, There was enough information about the main actor, but I but a documentary of a shop-keeper(?) couldn't notice anything that could connect with the doesn't appeal too much. Act I does not audience. build up to the catalyst well enough. Illegal Process of Getting Clothes yes. however i dont see how this all leads i dont feel very connected to the main character though to the conflict. illegal clothes More description of the characters will help the film and I like her storyline. Yes Illegal products Did you feel there was enough info portrayed about the main actor? Did you connect or could you identify with the main character? yes there was enough info Yes, I thought that there was enough info to have people interested in the video, but I wasn't really able to connect with the main character. To make viewers even more sympathize with the worker at the night market, you should show a scene of them working busily in the cold yes the setting was explained thoroughly I was able to find more about the shopkeeper during the interview which I thought was good. explaining the illegal products

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YES. I think you could show Alexa kicking the floor or drawing something on the floor to Yes. I really liked the idea of two characters having the convey that she was waiting for a long same birthday as it conveys their special friendship. time. bullied The various actions give out a sense of I can sort of relate to this. reality. Alexa was bullied I like how you start with Alexis sitting alone in the swing. I like how the best friends I feel very connected. I also had friendship rings. but lost have same birthday. I can really see how it now... they are very close together. Alexa was bullied

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Very interesting; have to keep watching! Very interesting; have to keep watching!

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Yes, she described the characters well, and she could describe more. Good job with the idea about friendship. A lot of people will relate to it. Would it be ok to repete the same scenes Try make it more interesting by the sounds as the last? It MIGHT bore some people. of the swing squeaking as Alexis waits. I like how the birthday presents starts out Yes, the questions asked! the story. I like how the friends has a good mood and yes people can really connect well because it's really shows their relationship with each something that can happen in our lives. other. The main characters are pretty easy to identify-it would Very detailed background information. be very easy to tell that they are best friends. Good job Will you show a compare/contrast match with the narration (i.e. a group of friends Will you be featuring just one vendor at the night market? laughing on their way to the night market, If not, I think it would be better to do so. I mean, it's and then switch the attention of the awesome to get a lot of opinions, but it would be even audience to another group of people awesome-r to receive a lot of opinions about the same unpacking the items they need to sell)? If subject. not, then I would recommend doing something along those lines; it would But if you use just one shopkeeper, then yes, like what create more of an impact and a reaction Mr. Heil said, give more background information about from the audience, to paint the difference the shopkeeper himself instead of just his job. between the two worlds. She explains the character's personality very well. I really liked how I could connect with the friendship part of the story. Maybe you could give one character trait that each of the friend is known for! I understand the relationship between the main characters. The main actor was described pretty well, and many people have friendships that close and it makes you feel like you're very involved in the film. However, i didn't feel much about the beginning yes Yes it was very well set up. There was a lot of action, but I wasn't able to clearly identify the characters and what kind of personality they possessed.

Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? What was the catalst event? Maybe make the fact that it's both of their birthdays clear Alexa was bullied Yes, it showed friendship rings which are extremely powerful bullied Yes, the introduction was well described, and maybe she could describe more about how their birthday's on the same day, and emphasis the date. Her general setting and the introduction is very good! Bullying

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Could be good...will keep watching a litte more and then decide Not sure...50/50...maybe will keep watching, maybe not Very interesting; have to keep watching! Very interesting; have to keep watching!

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Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? What was the catalst event? The beginning establishes the situation The relationship is very obvious and well-developed. very well, and leads nicely to Act II. The Girl gets into a fight Her best friend didnt tell her It shows what kind of a person she is and how she feels. Yes it also very good camera angles. about an application. Did you feel there was enough info portrayed about the main actor? Did you connect or could you identify with the main character? Yes, worried friends I couldn't really connect with the characters Yes, good rising action. The main character is leaving Good beginning. Try to make things a little more clear. Try to grab my attention Antagonist walks away I thnk you jumped to the actions a little too fast. Notice that right at the beginning of the story you said that she was crying, before any information was yet conveyed the her or her friend, plus we don't yet know if she was established as the main character. friends fight Im confused When the antagonist

20 second decision. How much interest would you have in watching this film past 20 seconds putting aside any bias. Very interesting; have to keep watching! Not sure...50/50...maybe will keep watching, maybe not Very interesting; have to keep watching! Could be good...will keep watching a litte more and then decide

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Did you feel there was enough info portrayed about the main actor? Did you connect or could you identify with the main character? Yes, Alexa is poor and brings a lot of pity.

Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? Yes

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Alexa is bullied The main actor was crying, but then it quickly changed to an action before any background information was developed. There should be a few extra 30 seconds before the music (if it even started in Act I) to explain the situation. Friends fight I like the the clear situation that the character is in. However, the beginning is too mainstream that might not attract people.

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It is very vague to understand the main actor at the beginning. Act I may have been rushed a bit too quickly. To fix the problem, slow down at the beginning.

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I don't think the friend would be mad just because the friend has hidden something. Everyone has privacy, and most friends respect the privacy. If I were the friend, I would feel bad for not being with her when she had need me. Not enough development of the characters. Add more dramatic characteristics. yes, she did a good job describing the relationship between the two character not enough... i feel a bit connected though, cause i have had friends leave too I was able to identify that the two friends were really close to each other, but I think it would be better if it showed more anger and conflict between the two due to the moving of schools of the girl

friend walks in It is kind of difficult to comprehend the mood of the character. Make it more obvious. I like the good start of the film not quite, it was just enough for me to tell that they were really close friends

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I like the conflict between the two friends which makes the audience interested in the beginning. antagonist walks away How will you show that they have been friends for a long time? As you will not have any dialogue, it will be more difficult I don't really see why the antagonist would get /mad/ at to express things via motion only, yes? I the protagonist, because generally friends would get sad think it would be better if you had some once they find out that their friend is going to leave... sort of crutch/object representing their right? Reveal more information about why the antagonist friendship, so you could start out with the mad about her leaving (like will she be all alone main character turning the object over and otherwise? What will happen if her best friend leaves over in her hand sadly to help give off the The antagonist gets mad at the her?) so that the audience can feel for her more. "sad" feeling even more. protagonist Yes, I often feel as if I get mad at my friends for no reason. And many kids, especially from YISS, know what it feels like to move around and switch schools. Yes, interesting how the girl seems normal at first, but viewers find out that she is mad Main character gets mad at by the zoom antagonist

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Did you feel there was enough info portrayed about the main actor? Did you connect or could you identify with the main character? She should show more about the main actress and what she's like. When Mary cant go to the prom. I don't think the male audience can relate to the drama of the film. Also, not enough characteristics of the character. I couldn't really identify with the main character because I didn't really know the main character. Try to develop the character. I can really relate. Since most people who will watch are going to Asian, it would be easy for us to sympathize with the sister who is really sensitive about the grades. Also, since most people care about what they wear at the prom, it would be easy to sympathize with the protagonist. Yes, students sympathize a lot about studies and the stress from getting bad grades. I think you should show Mary looking around so hard to find the perfect dress before it get's ruined, so that the viewers will go "awww no!!" when it gets ripped.

Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? What was the catalst event? She sets up each scene very well and it got me to want to watch it. the dress rips I really like it The Main character gets mad

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Very interesting; have to keep watching! Very interesting; have to keep watching!

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Did you feel there was enough info portrayed about the main actor? Did you connect or could you identify with the main character? Yes the main character is like a clumsy and desperate person for a guy yes there was enough information for the viewers to understand the story.

Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? Yes, good action! I could really feel the tension in the beginning, which is a good mood to set for the viewers. Yes, maybe she could show how much she wants to go to the prom by crying or being really depressed because it's really important to her. How is the math test and the prom related? Is it because you need a good grade to get into the prom? The development is slightly vague, and should be explained better by talking about the relations between grades and prom. Show more of the character's feeling (her depression) throughout the story.

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The catalyst is not very strong. I really liked how you used twitter, something that most people know about, to develop the story! Who is Laura? maybe describe her a bit more. People can relate to the character because of her grade problems. People understand what it feels like to be in trouble because of their grades and you really feel pity for Mary. You might feel more pity for her though if you show how much Mary cares for George or really wants to go to the prom. You could maybe have a scene of her with her friends purchasing the prom dress and her talking about how excited she is.

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I like how there is action straightaway, it is a real audience attention-grabber. maybe you could explain a little about why it matters so much to Laura that she got a bad grade in Math. With tweeting you might have to bring the camera really close to the computer and risk good stabilization. It's good to show that your main character I wasn't hearing everything, so I could have missed has a lot of followers! This will prove to be something, but I think it would be better if you gave the a major part of your film, right? I think that sister more of a motive to steal the dress. Are they twins, it would be better if this information was so they both have to go to the prom? Is the sister revealed earlier, though, so that it would jealous? This way, the audience will be able to see the give more of a reason as to why the main sister in a worse light, and sympathize more with the character resorts to Twitter to complain main actress. about her problems. you should tell a little bit more about the yes, the characters were well described feeling of the character well done establishing the start of the movie. But maybe explain how the prom and the math test are related. you said that she failed her math test, and that means I feel pretty connected with the character. that she can't go to the prom? explain why. You could use more descriptions to show There weren't that many details I could relate to more details Yes, the main character was a bully but now things will change Yes, really good rising action

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Not sure...50/50...maybe will keep watching, maybe not Very interesting; have to keep watching! Very interesting; have to keep watching!

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Did you feel there was enough info portrayed about the main actor? Did you connect or could you identify with the main character? I like it :D perhaps work more about the inner characteristics of the Henry I don't feel connected with the bully. I think people would feel more sympathy with those who get bullied. Obviously, no one would celebrate bully's birthday. Explain more about the character Different personalities of the main character looks can confuse peoiple yes, i could picture everything happening well and smoothly, with angles and cuts. maybe when he goes to school, do a fast arc shot around the main character to show the confusion and mixed feelings. You could show the vulnerable side of the bully and make the audience feel more sympathy towards him.

Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? I like it :D Try to make sure that you explain more about the setting

What was the catalst event? no one is talking to him. no response on his birthday

20 second decision. How much interest would you have in watching this film past 20 seconds putting aside any bias. Very interesting; have to keep watching! Not sure...50/50...maybe will keep watching, maybe not Could be good...will keep watching a litte more and then decide Not sure...50/50...maybe will keep watching, maybe not Could be good...will keep watching a litte more and then decide

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The bully's character is strongly developed. no one celebrates bully's birthday he doesnt get a response from I like how the story was really well written. his friend. You might want to think about changing your character who can maybe fit better. When the antagonist walks away it's really interesting because I don't think I've seen a bully as a main character because they're usually the antagonists. You could emphasize that the main character is a bully by showing him an action of being mean to a person. It makes you wonder why people haven't stood up to him before. Very interesting about how people start to ignore him, maybe you could show his confusion as he goes up to someone and they walk away or something. The development of the bully is really nice. However, the narration should have a variety of tone and mood, rather than a monotone voice. When he walks into school on his birthday, you can show that the main character goes around trying to see who says "Happy birthday" to the main character. Maybe show a scene where everyone's too busy doing something else, so they don't talk to the main character at all. You can add a progressive cut (like a montage) of how he gets "rejected" a lot of times.

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You can't relate to or feel bad for the character because he is a bully, but it is very exciting to hear about. It is interesting because you don't see many videos from the bad guys perspective.

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There is an enough amount of information about the bully, but should make him more threatening.

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Yes. I liked the theme of bullying, something that is common in many schools. I wasn't really able to have a big I like how you described the physical connection with the character though. I think you should appearance of the character. I want to show more of the disappointment in the main character. know more about his personality though! You should use vertical pan and low angle to show superiority of two bullies. Why do they bully the little kid? maybe show the little kid running, holding pile of papers, and passing the two bullies and bumping into them and dropping the piles of paper. that would show the cause of the bullies bullying the kid. Make the bullies pick up some of the papers and throw it on the little Zack is the main character.Bully. kid's face to show more tension. I like how the introduction is shown before Yes, he described the character well. the music starts I like how he described the story in detail. They also did a good job explaining about yes, the character were well described the main character

Big, buff, Henry the bully! A little typical character; you should show a different side of him. No one celebrates Henry Near the end of the ACT 1, by using Down shot or by having the character isolate himself more, or using expressions of people looking at the main character weirdly you could convey that the main character has no friends. loner.

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Bullying No one knows it's his birthday

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Big, buff, Henry the bully! A little typical character; you should show a different side No one celebrates Henry's of him. birthday good choice of character

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I like how the characters have the confidence to try the audition again. yes, they are very not giving up people willing to do their best.

Could be good...will keep watching a litte more and then decide Very interesting; have to keep Yes Thy got kicked out of the audition watching! Not sure...50/50...maybe will keep nope. I felt like he didnt really explain the details... Im not sureeeee i dont know watching, maybe not Try to take time to set up your setting in a Could be good...will keep watching a Yes, personalities and reaction to the person portrayed it clear manner gets kicked out litte more and then decide Good job, wouldn't the repetition of the bad Very interesting; have to keep i can connect contestants get a bit boring after a while? failing watching! I like how the story line beings before the Very interesting; have to keep Yes, maybe more description music starts Gets kicked out watching!

good choice of character Show the first girl going off the key and the next guy too to make the audience clear why they are being rejected by the guy. Show the judge being frustrated by making him harshly scribbling on the audition note paper, and maybe throw his pen on the floor to dramatize the judge's frustration. character gets kicked out

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No. You can put more descriptions about the characters i didnt really know who was the main character but i could connect well The judge seems to be grumpy and stressed. He doesn't seem to be very picky, he just seems to not like anyone. Maybe show why he is being so selective and why he doesn't like their music. Show whose side you are Maybe show more how the judge is feeling Will they get kicked out or get a supposed to be on, the auctioneers or the judges. before the audition. Is he stressed? second chance? might have been better if he showed more of what they were doing and why they were not exactly... doing it gets kicked out I don't know what song you're doing, but how will you express the dialogue within the film? .-. And it's good how you bring the audience's attention to Carl, as he increases in importance in the story. At the same time though, I think it would be better if you provided more focus on just one or two characters, to help the audience feel for ... whoever your main character is more. Perhaps you can trail after just the girl contestant, or perhaps you can focus on how nervous they were in the beginning before they went out to the stage (providing that your rejected contestants are the ones who are your main characters, that is).

Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? What was the catalst event? I don't see why the judge has to be so they try to get back in the angry audition yes it shows how the judge is mean and everything is not fair girl gets kicked out

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Perhaps it would be better if you could show the judge's bored reaction in the very beginning? Like an extreme close-up shot of him rolling his eyes or something, because surely, he can't get fed up after only three people. You could help the reader understand why the judge was angry by having the singers go off key, or crack or by showing the No. I don't get the clear idea of who the main actor is. By judge's notes written on the paper. you having like a specific shot or a differnt type of clothing for could also show like the judge getting the main character would give a clear understanding to bored by drawing random circles or things the viewer who the main character is. on the paper. I like how you set the setting of the audition Yes, I could connect with the strong desire of the main from the beginning. It makes me interested character (being accepted in audition). from the beginning. yes You have to explain more about the main character. For all we know, they are just a bunch of guys auditioning. not much about their personalities.

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the people want second chance they try to get back int he audition

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Maybe have the characters beg to not get kicked out to show how badly they want to be involved in the audition. You can have a "body guard" dragging them out while they're screaming "NOOOOOOOO PLEASE" Yea!

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You can put more actions to reveal characteristics Sophia is ignoring the guy Maybe describe how Daniel has something with Sofia by him doing something for her, or express how he feels I like how in the beginning, there are more about her. Show how Sofia feels the same way too, by creative shots, because it makes the video her facial expressions. look more professional Sofia ignoring Daniel We were able to feel sympathy Ignoring the guys Sofias ignoring the main The personalities could be more thoroughly explained but The story was very well thought of. It's very character when they used to be it was good. creative. friends By focusing on the girl's expression and by using indifferent expressions, you could convey how the girl holds no interest in the boy. You could also specify either I don't get why he did a push up... friendship or relationship by using props. sophia's ignoring the guy. i couldn't really understand the beginning yes, it's really interesting how the guy is trying to do all but then later, i realized so that could be, in these things for the girl. a way an attention grabber. girl slams the locker I like the story but you should describe more of the characters emotions and how yes they were thinking sophies ignoring the guy People can easily sympathize with Daniel, because most people are sensitive about friendship and school life Why is Sophia so cold to Daniel? Sophia ignoring the guy Yes, but try to have a clear catalyst

Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? Instead of having consecutive scenes (cuts) of people just coming in and going out, maybe you can add a special type of cut where the judge says no to all of them at the very end. Have little clips of the three characters performing at different times at the beginning, and have one clip of the judge saying NO. at the very end. i like the intro, but maybe try to portray how he feels about the girl. Why is the girl so mad? Will this be shown later on in a different act? I like how she slams the locker in his face because she is mad though, It really shows a lot of emotion. I don't see how doing push-ups can help release stress. Maybe he can do something crazy like chewing on a piece of paper to show the extent of his overwhelming stress.

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try to express that he likes her and show more personality of the man actor

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try to express that he likes her and show more personality of the man actor

Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? What was the catalst event? I like how the first shots derives audience's curiosity by not explaining why Daniel is walking towards Sophia. But you should explain more in the beginning because I don't get why Daniel walks towards Sophia, and why he is depressed all of a sudden. The photo that Sophia burns should be clear that Daniel and Sophia were "friends" because it is easy for the audience to get confused and think that they were lovers. Maybe change Sophia to a guy or change Daniel to a girl. And also show why Daniel is depressed, make it more obvious. burning photos i like the creative shots and how she slams the door in his face although he shows interest to her. try to show why she slamed the locker in his face. explain their relationship more, because later on, when she burns the photo, i couldnt see the cause of her burning the photo sofia ignores him i like the creative shots and how she slams the door in his face although he shows interest to her. try to show why she slamed the locker in his face. explain their relationship more, because later on, when she burns the photo, i couldnt see the cause of her burning the photo sofia ignores him How will you get an aerial angle of the girl and the guy walking in the hallway? It's a good idea, but that would be pretty hard.

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As for the glance "to show that he has something going on with her"-- I think it would be best if you revealed their relationship from the very beginning, with this glance. Is he romantically attracted to her, or are they just friends (and she's mad It sounds really cute, haha. I think the character sounds at him for no reason)? A hurt expression or fine, although you might want to show signs of him trying a raise of an eyebrow can make all the to make a move on the girl in the beginning, though. difference. Sophia's ignoring the other guy. I like how you clearly showed the setting of Show more of the awkwardness of the relationship a school. I think you should show more of between the two and the reactions of the girl when he how shy he is & how disappointed he is tries to approach her. with his actions and facial expressions. Sophia is ignoring the guy

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I don't quite understand why the character was depressed. I think the character suits the roll very well. The character seems to have may sides and doesn't seem to be very typical. I like ho wyou have a character with confidence in themselves and how they have a rather shady past but managed to pull though and succeed. Maybe show how she went from being depressed to being confident in herself. Since I don't know the lyrics, I don't know whether the dance fits the music or not. I think it is important to keep in mind that the dance must flow well with story.

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not really....i don't get why she is suddenly so prideful. Show more of what kind of a person she is. But good thing on the confidence though.

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main character depressed

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i could tell that she was really confident and you had a good choice of actor

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Was there enough story background on the setting, situation, and characters in Act I to efficiently lead into the rising action and conflict in Act II? Maybe in the middle of the dance moves, you guys can all suddenly stop and act out Try to focus on the main dancer a little more rather than dance, and start dancing again. I think you should provide more of a Bring up the reason /why/ she was depressed; this will background as to why they should "do it help the audience sympathize with her more. Was she like a dude." Your main character sounds rejected or something? Or was she shunned by society? pretty feminine and confident in the Or... what? A good plot/story always has a conflict, so beginning, so why would they want to make your conflict more pronounced with the flashback, if follow Jessie J's advice on "doing it like a you want. dude"? I like the creative settings like the parking lot. Good thought of using the headlight of I think you did a good job showing the compare and the car for lighting. But will you do this in contrast of the character when she was confident and the day or the night? Make sure you can before when she was depressed. Make more character see the effect of the headlight if you film traits that will let us connect with the character. during the day! No, I do not get it, probably because it's a There is.. but thats later and choreography yes, she explained well how the character was Her music video had a very creative setting depressed such a using the head light of the car Did you feel there was enough info portrayed about the main actor? Did you connect or could you identify with the main character? yeshyehsyehs I like how she kicks the camera. interesting thought Yes. interesting introduction with the car headlights. It. Sounds. Brilliant.

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I think it's nice the way it is. Yes, I like the reaction after he sees what has happened great. I love the idea of him being connected to the internet. It really shows today's teenagers being overly into computers and internet. There was enough information about the main actor. It is not easy to feel connected with the main character, but I can definitely have fun while watching this film. no. you could show the mischievous side of the character more by the way he dresses such as having his pants low or having his cap backward.

peanut butter jelly beans !! Develop the character's characteristic more before going to fb. youtube post up omg you should also make him going into a women fashion internet store and make him wear women's clothes. fight with his girlfriend

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Yes, he seems to be cruel and will do anything he wants whenever he wants. yes i really like it because it's humorous as well. The characters are well shown because of their actions. Ex. Chewing gum, fighting with his girlfriend Yes, he is a mischievous and funny guy. Not so nice. the character seems really funny I still think there should have been more about the main character, like their personality, etc. He should explain the guy's personality more.

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Was there enough story background on the 20 second decision. How much setting, situation, and characters in Act I to interest would you have in watching efficiently lead into the rising action and this film past 20 seconds putting conflict in Act II? What was the catalst event? aside any bias. I like how the other person is sudden;y affected by his facebook status. Maybe show the picture on the camera as he takes it, zoom in, and come out as the youtube video. Also, he seems to make the connect between what he is typing and what the man is saying really fast. maybe have a couple moments where he is Very interesting; have to keep confused. The video is on youtube watching! yes i like how the hacker finds out later in youtube guy finding out the youtube video --Select-Could be good...will keep watching a I like how he has humor in his film magic of facebook litte more and then decide I don't think there was a lot of background The facebook account is Very interesting; have to keep information connected with a guys brain watching! the PEANUT BUTTER JELLY TIME part Could be good...will keep watching a was good PEANUT BUTTER litte more and then decide I like te idea that the movie has humor in it. also the unusual but important topic about the media. magical facebook --Select-The story was pretty well explained and Could be good...will keep watching a leads to the conflict. not sure litte more and then decide Where are you walking when you find the computer? Will the computer be randomly Very interesting; have to keep just lying there? facebook account hacked watching! i like how the main character is chewing gum like a normal teenager, and his train of thought when he sees the computer. it was interesting how it turned out to be with the youtube video. make the status funnier Very interesting; have to keep and the more random it is, the better major of the facebook account watching! i like how the main character is chewing gum like a normal teenager, and his train of thought when he sees the computer. it was interesting how it turned out to be with the youtube video. make the status funnier Very interesting; have to keep and the more random it is, the better major of the facebook account watching! I liked how he had some funny parts of the Could be good...will keep watching a story facebook getting hacked litte more and then decide