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A Sin Apart

By
Stephen A. LaRose
Lucky 20 Pictures, LLC. 2014
FADE IN
EXT. LOUISIANA MARSH - NIGHT
ANTONIO, a middle age man dressed for trudging through mud,
makes his was through the thick marsh. He is accompanied by
his younger brother, LOUIS.
The brothers alternate swatting at the hordes of insects
around them.
LOUIS
Antonio, this swamp smells worse
than your shin guards after soccer
practice.
ANTONIO
Use your bandanna.
Antonio motions to cover his face with the bandanna.
LOUIS
Good point, brother.
Louis covers his face.
Their journey continues deeper into the still, quiet marsh.
Sounds of wildlife, frogs, insects, are spaced out like
stars on a black sky.
Antonio stops. Sounds are less frequent.
LOUIS
What is it?
Antonio motions for him to keep quiet.
The silence builds. Antonio looks around. He takes a deep
breath.
ANTONIO
Here. Hand me the skimmer.
Louis hands his brother a long pole with mesh on the end.
Antonio sticks it in the ground and begins slowly sweeping
through the water.
LOUIS
Whyd dad have to bring that statue
with him anyway?
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED: 2.
ANTONIO
He claimed it brought great luck.
LOUIS
No ones lucky out here.
Antonio slowly circles the area with the skimmer. He feels a
mass, and slowly lifts the skimmer. Eyes widen.
In the mesh of the skimmer is nothing but a smooth rock
painted in mud.
Antonio rages and hurls the rock. It crashes with the water
and makes a SPLOOSH! He rips off his bandanna. Louis does
the same.
Ripples rush out towards the brothers.
LOUIS
We should come back in the day
time.
Antonio stares into the rippling water and begins to walk
back. Louis follows him.
INT. ANTONIOS PICK-UP - NIGHT
Antonio in the driver seat, starts the car. The radio softly
plays a news story.
Louis, cleaning off, throws his gear in the truck bed, and
hops in the passenger seat. They make their way onto a long
road.
LOUIS
Im thinking of leaving Lupita.
ANTONIO
No! You guys would make a great
family!
LOUIS
I have been seeing another woman,
Antonio.
Antonio is shocked.
ANTONIO
Adultery is sin, Louis. Father
would be so ashamed of you.
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED: 3.
LOUIS
I know. But we havent-
ANTONIO
You must stop making excuses! You
may live your life in any way, but
a sin is a sin. You cannot Hail
Mary your whole life.
LOUIS
I know. I will have to make up my
mind.
ANTONIO
Set your mind right. You should
come to mass with your mother and I
next week. And after we can come
back to the marsh and search.
Louis throws his head back, hes tired of taking orders from
his older brother. But this time he knows Antonio is right.
LOUIS
Okay, I will.
ANTONIO
Thank you, Louis.
INT. CHURCH - DAY
The choir is singing a hymn, "What Can Wash Away My Sin".
Antonio, Louis, and their Mother, SALOME, sing with the rest
of the congregation.
Some people begin to leave, and the song ends.
PRIEST
And may the Father, Son, and Holy
Spirit bless you and keep you in
his Holy name. Go in peace, to love
and serve the Lord!
CONGREGATION
Thanks be to God!
A piano plays the congregation out. Antonio and Louis walk
out with their Mother.
4.
EXT. CHURCH - DAY, CONTINUOUS
The sun shines particularly bright.
SALOME
Thank you for coming, Louis. It has
been so good to see my son. Make
sure Lupita comes next time, she is
such a treat.
Salome holds Louis tightly by his shoulders.
LOUIS
Yes, yes, mother I know. I will.
They smile, kiss, and hug.
ANTONIO
Goodbye, Mama.
INT. ANTONIOS PICK-UP - DAY
The radio is off.
ANTONIO
Are you still with Lupita?
Louis, anxious, is hesitant to answer.
ANTONIO
Answer! Have you made up for your
lies?
LOUIS
I have not told her.
ANTONIO
And what of the other woman? Did
you see her again?
LOUIS
Yes, and I intend to again, and
again.
The truck pulls to the road side. The brothers get out.
5.
EXT. MARSH BED - DAY
Antonio walks to the truck bed and starts grabbing gear.
LOUIS
But, really, Antonio. Wait until
you see this woman. Shes from
Europe! A small town in Poland,
Maniewo. I dont know if all the
women there are this beautiful,
but...wow!
Louis receives the harshest glare from Antonio.
LOUIS
I think you will like her.
ANTONIO
You should remain faithful, and
loyal to your fiance.
Antonio wraps the bandanna around his neck. Louis does the
same. They head into the marsh.
They walk a long way, they can no longer see the road.
In the day time, the marsh is more silent than at night.
ANTONIO
When Papa passed, I promised to him
I would keep you in line.
LOUIS
In line? What is this, Tony?
ANTONIO
You have always had the tendency to
deviate, to lack discipline. Papa
wanted to look after you. And I
have failed and let you fall to
sin.
Antonio snatches the skimmer from Louis and slams the pole
into the side of Antonios head. He falls into the water.
Antonio holds him under.
ANTONIO
Hell is empty. And the devils are
here!
Louis sinks to the bottom of the shallow marsh. As he does,
his head thumps into a dull bronze statuette of Mother Mary.

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