ENGLISH 11: CLASS 16

July 27, 2016

KEEPING TENSES CONSISTENT

Verbs
Dont

= time markers

change the tense unless meaning

requires it.

PRACTICE
1.

Rolly goes home and kicked his cat.

2.

Children are quite perceptive and will

know when you are lying to them.

3.

We had just finished painting the floor

when the dog runs through.

4.

He watches television until he finally

went to sleep.

5.

When the pop star walked into the room,

the girls go crazy.

PRACTICE: CHECK YOUR ANSWERS

1.

Rolly went home and kicked his cat.

2.

Children are quite perceptive and know

when you are lying to them.

3.

We had just finished painting the floor

when the dog ran through.

4.

He watched television until he finally

went to sleep.

5.

When the pop star walked into the room,

the girls went crazy.

ACTIVE VS PASSIVE VOICE

Active:
I

Doer is subject.

ate the donut.

Passive:
The

Receiver is subject.

donut was eaten.

ACTIVE VS PASSIVE VOICE: THE RULES

Always

use active, unless you have a specific

reason not to.
Reasons to use passive:
Unknown person or agent did the action.
My wallet was stolen last night.
You want to place emphasis on the object.
Early this morning, the bank was robbed
by four men in clown masks.
You are writing a technical, legal, or scientific
document.
Having been found guilty, the accused
was sentenced to two years.

PRACTICE
1.

A meeting was called by the department

head.

2.

The coffee will be made by the server in a

few minutes.

3.

For many years, steroids have been used by

professional athletes to improve
performance.

4.

The test was written before classes even

started.

5.

The outcome of the game was decided when

the batter hit a triple play.

PRACTICE: CHECK YOUR ANSWERS

1.

The department head called a meeting.

2.

The server will make the coffee in a few

minutes.

3.

Professional athletes have used steroids

for many years to improve performance.

4.

The teacher wrote the test before the

classes even started.

5.

The batter hit a triple play that decided

the outcome of the game.

REVISING YOUR DRAFT

Revision

means re-seeing

Purpose
Clear

understanding

Favourable
DOES

reception

NOT MEAN RE-COPYING

REVISION: RULE OF THREES

Revision

1: Are readers information needs

met?
Revision 2: Is my structure effective?
Revision 3: Is my paper correct?
Step 1: Improve whole paper by revising
content and organization.
Step 2: Refine paragraph and sentence
structure correct grammatical errors.
Step 3: Edit and proofread to catch errors
in word choice, spelling, and
punctuation.

STEP 1: REVISE CONTENT AND ORGANIZATION

Rearrange
Add

info?

info?

Delete

info?

STEP 1: CONTENT AND ORGANIZATION CHECKLIST

Accuracy

Completeness

Significant, single, specific,

supportable?

Main Points

Significant, distinct, relevant,

arranged in logical order?

Introduction

Roadmap, thesis statement,

attention-getting?

Conclusion

Enough main ideas and

development to explain
subject and convince reader?

Subject

Is everything you said

accurate? Up to date?
Consistent?

Summarize/reinforces main
points?
Leaves reader with something
to think about?

Tone

Consistent, reasonable,
courteous, confident?

STEP 2: REVISE PARAGRAPHS AND SENTENCES

Sentences

varied in length and

complexity?

Points
Read

fully explained?

aloud

STEP 2: PARAGRAPH AND SENTENCE CHECKLIST

Paragraphs

Does introduction contain a

clear, comprehensive,
grammatically parallel thesis
statement?

Does each paragraph have

topic sentence?
Supporting sentences
relevant/appropriately
developed.

Unified? Coherent?

Transitions?

Conclusion effective?

Sentences

Correct and clear?

Varied in length?

Grammar

All verbs used correctly?

All pronouns used correctly?

Language

Level of language appropriate/

consistent
Tone- reasonable, courteous,
and consistent?
Accurate?

STEP 3: EDIT AND PROOFREAD

Correcting

errors in word choice, spelling,

and punctuation.

Correcting

errors in typing and writing.

STEP 3: EDITING CHECKLIST

Words

Usage

Punctuation

Used words to mean? No

slang, clichs, jargon?

Spelling

Are all words spelled

correctly
Capital letters
Apostrophes
Hyphens in right
place?

Within Sentences

Commas!!!!!!!!

Colons, semicolons

Quotations

Beginnings and
Endings

All sentences start

with capital letter.
All questions end with
question mark.
All quotation marks
correctly placed?

POETRY: SATIRE
Humour

society.

Who
Is

used to effect positive change in

or what is being ridiculed?

the attack or criticism justified?

POETRY: ANNOTATING A POEM

Identify

elements and
make notations

Rhyme scheme

Figurative language

Images

Symbols

Sound devices

Alliteration

Consonance

Assonance

Rhythm

Onomatopoeia

Circle

parts of the
poem that stand out,
are confusing, seems
important
Write questions in
the margin/highlight
unusual words
Determine the
poems theme. Draw
arrows to the lines
that prove this

Homework
Have nal dra/ ready for peer review on
Thursday.