Emily Gathman Dae January 19, 2016 nal 2. Embodying the Core Value of Caring In the category of focus, | gave myself a 2. | thought | did a pretty good job at staying focused throughout my essay. The central theme of the personal statement was the core value of caring. For the organization category, | scored me personal statement as a 2. | gave this score because the essay was organized in paragraphs in chronological order. However, | think | could have done a better job transitioning between each paragraph. For the development category, | gave myself a 2. | provided specific examples of how | exemplify caring as a core value. The examples were stories of how | cared for others like a boy | went to school with, homeless shelter residents, and my friend. | think the examples where adequate evidence to how | exemplify the core value. For the audience awareness and voice category, | scored my paper a 1.1 don’t think my voice throughout the paper is clear and strong, 11am concerned that my examples are not strong enough as evidence for this personal statement. | am concerned that my transitions throughout the statement are weak, and | am worried that | don’t have the correct voice and tone for my audience. From a young age, | noticed that | was constantly worried about how other people were doing. | always wanted to make sure that everyone around me was okay. If they weren't | tied whatever | could to make them feel better. | realized that | whole heartedly cared about the well being of others. It was at this moment that | knew how important it was to be caring to others and | have tried my hardest to exemplify the School of Nursing’s core value of caring. In middle school, there was a boy named Dylan. Everyone in the class bullied Dylan, or worse, ignored him entirely. | could feel in my heart that he was hurting and knew that | need to be caring to him. During church one day, it came time when we were supposed to shake hands with everyone around us. | noticed that no one would shake Dylan’s hand. | made sure to shake his hand and give him a smile because | knew it would make him feel just alittle bit better. As a nurse, you must be caring to all patients, even the patients that other people may not like. Understanding the value of caring for others is necessary in being a good nurse so that you can provide the correct care to your patient. x > | uve A thus pawn vaph | Voy Ample w] a4 A NISUAL wr Yeah y MLNIn high school, | volunteered at a homeless shelter called Rebuild. At the shelter, | helped make and serves lunches to the homeless people that visited the shelter. | could see that each person at the shelter was down on their luck and needed to be cared for. | noticed that many of them just needed someone to talk to or a simple caring word. So | began to compliment each person as | gave them their lunch. It was amazing that such a simple compliment, such as “I love your hat” or “Your hai is beautiful,” could brightened up their entire face. | saw the true impact that a simple caring act can have on a person, eve ifitis somethingas smallasakindword (ys Milped pull togelher ine qlee, of is Paro ay he In college, you truly learn what its like to be on your own, away ffom your parents for the first time. It seems like fun until the first time you get sick and you don’t have your sweet. mom to take care of you. My friend, Skyler, came to this harsh reality freshman year. It was during this time that Skyler came down with the flu. She needed someone to care for her. As her roommate and friend, | felt happy to care for her when she wasn’t feeling well. Although it was inconvenient, | willingly walked across campus to buy her a smoothie and soup because it was the only thing she could keep down. | cleaned up her dirty tissues and made sure she was comfortable in bed. Later when she was healthy again, she expressed her surprise in how well | \® as took care of her. | realized that until then | hadn't thought about taking care of her. lust >y Rs pas jumped in and cared for her because | knew she needed it. All| wanted was for her tofeel yas 0 comfortable and cared for. | knew it meant a lot to her and in turn, it meant a lot to me. ave eo Caring for others is second nature to me. It isn’t something | think about. It is something (/\\. 25 wat that | do because it makes me happy to make others happy. Over the years | have learned so d much about how to be caring. | now understand that whether you're being nice to the bi ? good tanahon tom P oP |kid, a perfect stranger, or your best friend, every caring act matters. No matter how big or small the act is, caring for others will always be my first priority and | wouldn’t have it any other way. Wound your wirlusian vtatly strong, a nv wow wm CY ath gun I found Wis ps vuy st mg weything anc gacito follow! wat very vVqjow t Jv