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Holden Downing
Miss. Cook
Composition- 01
30 October 2017
The topic of lowering the legal drinking age has been for debate for many years. This Commented [1]: Hook needed
issue over the past decade has become more prevalent for debate. In the United States the legal
age to consume alcohol is 21 years old. 18 is the age when an individual legally becomes an
adult and assumes the rights and responsibilities of an adult. Therefore, the legal drinking age
should be 18 or lower. Even though all high school students are not old enough to consume
alcohol many find a way to. When you're told you cant do something it makes you want to do it
even more. Making alcohol more accessible makes it less of a big deal. Less restriction and less
of a thrill. It teaches them to drink responsibly and socially. The main issues going to be argued
is drunk driving, binge drinking/alcohol poisoning, and alcohol associated violent behavior.
Arguing that the legal drinking age should be lowered to 18, and the reasons why will be stated
throughout being supported with research and statistics. Commented [2]: awk
Even though the drinking age has been raised for many many years there has not been a
reciprocal drop in the abuse of alcohol among young people. If you were to look at the manner
its being used itd show in fact its being abused more now than ever. This will lead to more
long term alcohol problems coming down the road. In countries in Europe where the drinking
age is 18 there seems to be less immature behaviors around the use of alcohol. Things like
hidden parties without adult supervision can lead to things like alcohol poisoning and even death.
It stands to reason that if there were more mature decision makers involved in the consumption
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of alcohol there would be fewer deaths resulting from drunk driving and other immature
decisions. Recent research published by the World Health Organization found that in many
European countries where the drinking age is 18 or younger (and often not enforced), 15 and 16
year-old teens have more drinking occasions per month, but fewer occasions of dangerous
intoxication than their American counterparts. In many southern European countries roughly one
in ten of all drinking occasions results in intoxication, while in the United States almost half of
all drinking occasions result in intoxication. In these countries the introduction of alcohol
typically comes from parents. In the United States, where the drinking age is 21, parents are not
legally afforded that opportunity, and as a result initiation to alcohol consumption is not
responsibly controlled(CR 1). In European countries the parents are able to teach their young Commented [3]: In MLA, you do not put a comma
between items in the in-text citation.
adolescents how to drink responsibly, as in America many adolescents seem to go without adult
supervision while consuming alcohol which leads to risky and unsafe behavior. If the parents had
the opportunity to teach their children how to drink responsibly and socially the many problems
we have today would decrease if the drinking age was lowered. Lowering the drinking age
wouldnt just benefit those under 21. It would benefit the government and state because there
Drunk driving is driving under the influence. When your blood alcohol content is 0.08%
or higher, youre considered legally impaired. Although, you can still be charged with a DUI if
your BAC is above 0.00%. According to Matt Nagin, It seems quite plausible that were alcohol
to be legalized for those under the age of 18, the 15.1% of 18 to 20 year olds who drink before
getting behind the wheel would rise significantly (Nagin, 1). Anyone who is consuming alcohol
is at risk to get behind a wheel no matter the age, right? In 2013, 28.7 million people admitted
to driving under the influence of alcohol thats more than the population of Texas (Madd, 1).
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The legal drinking age has no perceptible influence on fatalities. The age of adulthood is 18 in
the United States and adults should have the right to make their own decisions about alcohol Commented [4]: C
consumption (procon.org 1). In 2009, the 21- to 24-year-old age group had the highest
percentage of drivers in fatal crashes with blood-alcohol concentration (BAC) levels of .08 or
higher 35 percent (Procon) This shows that lowering the drinking age is not going to cause
anymore accidents relating to drunk driving, because even those of the age to legally drink still
make the decision to get behind the wheel not only putting themselves in danger but others. 18
year olds have the rights to vote, get married, and serve in the military, and those even younger
than 18 can drive and become parents. So what is the problem with legalizing and lowering the
time. A risk of alcohol poisoning can become an issue while binge drinking. Statistics show
that about 44% of teenagers attending 4-year colleges are involved in binge drinking and about
30,000 college students require medical treatment each year to deal with alcohol poisoning
(health advisor). Although they arent scared to seek treatment for the issue even though theyre
under age. If they had to legal right to purchase and consume alcohol they wouldnt feel the need
to drink so much in such a short amount of time because if it were legal they could purchase
whenever they wanted. In college environment, alcohol is readily available, and for those
students that are underage, they are more likely to overdo it when they get their hands on alcohol
because they cant legitimately obtain it themselves. Anyone can drink irresponsibility and
everyone has consequences for their actions eventually. These problems, no matter how serious,
will continue to be prevalent regardless of the drinking age. Students will follow the trends of
society in terms of behaviors such as alcohol consumption and violence related to drinking.
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Alcohol producers play off this psychological factor and skew their marketing toward younger
people wont even be able to legally purchase their product because once someone becomes a
user, they are a user for a lifetime. Beer companies are looking to hook a client for life and turn
them into long term consumers. If the drinking age was 18 they wouldnt binge drink causing
them to become a user for these beer companies. The law is setting adolescents up to fail because
they arent shown the right manner of how to drink responsibly and go without adult supervision
while drinking.
Alcohol associated violent behavior excessive alcohol consumption may intensify their
aggressive behavior. When you consider that adolescence is a time of great impulsivity and
propensity to violence and/or destructive behavior, the dangers of legalizing alcohol among
minors become that much more palpable(Nagin, 1). Lowering MLDA 21 would reduce the
number of underage people who are hurt from alcohol-related injuries or accidents due to fear of
legal consequences if they sought medical attention(procon). If one is drinking under the age
and gets in a fight they have no consequences because theyre considered underage but having
the legal drinking age lowered one would face the consequences for their actions. Minimum
legal drinking age of 21 is not statistically associated with lower rates of suicide, homicide, or
vandalism. In a 2002 meta-study of the legal drinking age and health and social problems, 72%
of the studies found no statistically significant relationship despite claims that lowering the
MLDA to 18 would increase suicide and criminal activities by adolescents (Pro, 11).
Lowering the drinking age would allow more people to use alcohol legally, safely and
remove the attractive status that it has today. By removing the veil of desirability from the use of
alcohol the number of people who actually use it will be reduced and with it the number of long
term health problems will be removed as well. No one should be able to fight in war, vote, and
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own their own property without having the ability to drink or purchase alcohol legally.
Americans should be fighting for the 18 minimum drinking age and understanding the
constitutional rights. After the research done and the statistics found do you believe the legal
Works Cited
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Drinking Age ProCon.org. Should the Drinking Age Be Lowered from 21 to a Younger Commented [5]: Hanging indent needed
Age?, drinkingage.procon.org/.
Why Shouldn't the Drinking Age Be Lowered? New Health Advisor, 29 Apr. 2016,
Dean-Mooney, Laura. A Lower Age Would Be Unsafe. U.S. News & World Report,
www.usnews.com/opinion/articles/2008/09/08/a-lower-age-would-be-unsafe.
MNagin. Top 3 Reasons Why the Drinking Age Should Not Be Lowered to 18. Mic, Mic
not-be-lowered-to-18#.SXJgSulrY
www.chooseresponsibility.org/debating_the_issues/.
Yonas, Hezekiel. Should the Legal Drinking Age Be Lowered to 18? The A-Blast, www.thea-
blast.org/top-stories/2016/03/16/should-the-legal-drinking-age-be-lowered-to-18/.
Thrillist. Is It Time To Lower The Drinking Age To 18? The Huffington Post,
lower-the-d_b_9633254.html.
www.chooseresponsibility.org/drinking_and_culture_c/.
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Comments:
Total: 88/10 - 30% late = 62/100
Overall you've constructed a very good argument. The essay should begin with an engaging hook
and a clear arguable thesis statement that ends the introduction. Also, more transitions should be
used to link the major paragraphs throughout. The citations should be properly formatted. You
did a good job presenting a solid argument that is supported well with evidence.