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transportation of school children.Others argue that parents are responsible for that?
government to arrange for transportation of school children .Although Commented [AB1]: ‘the transportation of school children’ –
the + noun + of + noun,,
,authorities can play their role to provide transportation facilities to children, in Commented [AB2]: There is never a comma after ‘although’
only in the middle of the sentence –
http://sentence.yourdictionary.com/although
my opinion , I believe that children should go to schools with their parents. Commented [AB3]: ‘play their role in providing’ –
e.g. Her father had never played a big part in her life.
She played a key role in campaigning for equal opportunities in the
workplace.
Commented [AB4]: ‘be taken to schools by their parents’ – ‘go
to school’ means that the parent will attend the school.
There are numerous reasons why people might think that the government
should manage to transport children to schools .Firstly, it would help working Commented [AB5]: ‘Manage’ has a different meaning here –
‘ to succeed in doing or dealing with something, especially
something difficult’
youngsters. Therefore , assisting parents to take children to schools would help e.g. He assisted in the editing of the movie.
taken to schools with trained staff in specially designed vehicles. Hence, Commented [AB9]: You need ‘in addition’ here as you are
adding to the idea of ‘disabled children’. ‘Hence’ means ‘therefore’.
However, despite all the arguments above, I agree that parents should take
more safe for them .In fact, many children have become the victims of child Commented [AB10]: ‘safer’ – not ‘more safe’ – this is the
correct comparative form here.
abuse in the absence of parents .According to recent research in the UK, the
incidence of physical and verbal abuse has increased in children in the last few
years. These incidences in childhood may lead to various negative long term
consequences in the later life .Therefore, it is the responsibility of mothers and Commented [AB11]: ‘the later life’ – no ‘the’ here as ‘life’ is
generally uncountable (for its general meaning).
fathers to take their youngones to schools. Commented [AB12]: ‘young ones’- two words.
In conclusion , while authorities might help parents to arrange for pick and
drop of school children, I would argue that children are more secure with their Commented [AB13]: ‘arrange for the picking and dropping off
of school children’ – you need a noun after ‘arrange’ – to arrange
something. That’s why you need + ing on the verbs to make them
gerunds.
parents.
Comments:
Comment - 7.0 + A good answer which needs a little more work on sophistication of and
grammar in terms of verbs/ nouns + prepositions.