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People perhaps have different views about allowing children to make their own
Commented [AB2]: ‘result in a few number of members in
number of members in society are selfish, whereas others think that is Commented [AB4]: Rather than repeating you could say – ‘I
been taught to think about what they, and their parents usually will get it for have been taught to think about what they want’; or ‘some
http://dictionary.cambridge.org/grammar/british-grammar/abou
may receive various of information about how to survive in such a competitive
t-nouns/nouns-countable-and-uncountable
(AB11) –
difficulties in different way. ‘will perhaps consider’ – the adverb goes between the modal
‘If parents give them proper advice, they will perhaps act
...
children to make their own choices. It is a advantage for them because they Commented [AB18]: ‘the opponents’ – no ‘the’ – you have a
plural noun.
‘respond’.
will not be with them forever, and they can understand the importance of referring to ‘they’ - children and adolescents.
In conclusion, it could be detrimental effects in this matter. However, parents detrimental effects’.
Comments:
Overall Score 6.5 – a good answer which just needs a bit more clarity in
some of the ideas. The missing ‘it’ is a problem and you need to remember
+ing after prepositions
(http://www.ef.co.uk/english-resources/english-grammar/gerund/)