Females, The Olympics and Why

They Deserve To Be Talked

About
by Brady Johnston

Submission date: 31-Mar-2018 03:24PM (UT C-0500)

Submission ID: 939126001
File name: 218SP-ENGL-1302-
UHP01_67630702_1067399758_Females_T he_Olympics_and_Why_T hey_Deserve_T o_Be_T alked_Abou.docx
Word count: 1380
Character count: 6889
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Females, The Olympics and Why They Deserve To Be Talked
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ORIGINALITY REPORT

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SIMILARIT Y INDEX
13%
INT ERNET SOURCES
11%
PUBLICAT IONS
18%
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www.sportsbiz.bz
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www.questia.com
Int ernet Source 2%
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etda.libraries.psu.edu
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Submitted to CSU, San Jose State University
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Submitted to Briarcrest High School
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theath.ca
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Females, The Olympics and Why They Deserve To Be Talked
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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

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/100

QM No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", etc

QM Cap. Error
Capitalization

Comment 1
it is

QM Cap. Error
Capitalization

QM No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", etc

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Run-on
Run-on sentence:
T he sentence contains two or more independent clauses. Separate the clauses with a period or
semicolon.

Comment 2

period belongs af ter the citation

 period belongs af ter the citation

QM No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", etc

QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

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QM Ital.
Italicize

Comment 3
f ootball

QM Possessive
Possessive

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM C/S
Comma splice:
A sentence must have both a subject and a main verb in order to be complete, but it cannot
have more than one subject or main verb. A comma splice is a variety of run-on sentence that
occurs when two complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb, are joined mistakenly
by a comma. T here are generally three methods of correcting this problem: 1) Replace the
comma with a stronger mark of punctuation such as a period or semicolon, 2) use a
coordinating conjunction ("and," "but," "or," "nor") to join the two constructions, or 3) make one
of the two sentences a dependent construction by linking it to the other with a subordinating
conjunction ("if ," "when," "so that," "although," "because") or relative pronoun ("that," "which,"
"who," "whom," "whose").

QM C/S
Comma splice:
A sentence must have both a subject and a main verb in order to be complete, but it cannot
have more than one subject or main verb. A comma splice is a variety of run-on sentence that
occurs when two complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb, are joined mistakenly
by a comma. T here are generally three methods of correcting this problem: 1) Replace the
comma with a stronger mark of punctuation such as a period or semicolon, 2) use a
coordinating conjunction ("and," "but," "or," "nor") to join the two constructions, or 3) make one
 of the two sentences a dependent construction by linking it to the other with a subordinating
conjunction ("if ," "when," "so that," "although," "because") or relative pronoun ("that," "which,"
"who," "whom," "whose").

QM Rhetorical Questions
Don't use Rhetorical Questions in academic essays

Comment 4
woman

QM Cap. Error
Capitalization

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Unnecessary
Unnecessary

QM C/S
Comma splice:
A sentence must have both a subject and a main verb in order to be complete, but it cannot
have more than one subject or main verb. A comma splice is a variety of run-on sentence that
occurs when two complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb, are joined mistakenly
by a comma. T here are generally three methods of correcting this problem: 1) Replace the
comma with a stronger mark of punctuation such as a period or semicolon, 2) use a
coordinating conjunction ("and," "but," "or," "nor") to join the two constructions, or 3) make one
of the two sentences a dependent construction by linking it to the other with a subordinating
conjunction ("if ," "when," "so that," "although," "because") or relative pronoun ("that," "which,"
"who," "whom," "whose").

Comment 5
period belongs af ter the citation

QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

QM Trash Word
 So, Really, Very, etc. are unnecessary. T hey are trash words.

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QM C/S
Comma splice:
A sentence must have both a subject and a main verb in order to be complete, but it cannot
have more than one subject or main verb. A comma splice is a variety of run-on sentence that
occurs when two complete sentences, each with its own subject and verb, are joined mistakenly
by a comma. T here are generally three methods of correcting this problem: 1) Replace the
comma with a stronger mark of punctuation such as a period or semicolon, 2) use a
coordinating conjunction ("and," "but," "or," "nor") to join the two constructions, or 3) make one
of the two sentences a dependent construction by linking it to the other with a subordinating
conjunction ("if ," "when," "so that," "although," "because") or relative pronoun ("that," "which,"
"who," "whom," "whose").

Comment 6
period belongs af ter citation

QM No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", etc

QM Trash Word
So, Really, Very, etc. are unnecessary. T hey are trash words.

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Trash Word
So, Really, Very, etc. are unnecessary. T hey are trash words.

QM Run-on
Run-on sentence:
T he sentence contains two or more independent clauses. Separate the clauses with a period or
semicolon.

QM Rhetorical Questions
Don't use Rhetorical Questions in academic essays

QM Rhetorical Questions
Don't use Rhetorical Questions in academic essays
 QM Rhetorical Questions
Don't use Rhetorical Questions in academic essays

Comment 7
need what ...this relates it to the sentence bef ore which is not what you mean

QM Run-on
Run-on sentence:
T he sentence contains two or more independent clauses. Separate the clauses with a period or
semicolon.

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QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

Comment 8
they worked tooth and nail to achieve trials and tribulations?

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

Comment 9
ok...but how are you getting them to do this?

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Comment 10
 should be in alphabetical order

Comment 11
don't need the word date

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