1.

I do not know where will I find a good job

I do not know where could I find a good job Commented [U1]: Change in tense does not fix the
problem. The grammar problem was not fixed.

I think that in this case we should use “could” because it expresses possibility, while “will”
expresses definiteness.

2. Many students are not planning to return to their native’s countries

Many students do not plan to return to their homeland / country of origin

The use of the present continuous sounds awkward in this situation. I think that the simple
present with a future meaning is more suitable. I also think that in this situation the
collocation “native’s countries” may sound strange so I would change it by “homeland” or
“country of origin” Commented [U2]: No serious problem with the use of
present continue; why ‘native’s “ sounds strange to
you?
3. Students are offered different Master’s programs that you can choose

Students are offered different Master’s programs that they can choose Commented [U3]: OK, + a preposition is usually used
after the verb ‘choose’

The reader is addressed in this sentence and the use of “You” does not sound formal while
discussing something. So I would replace it by the correspondent pronoun. If the writer is
using the British spelling, he or she had to write “programmes” rather than “programs”. Commented [U4]: What makes you think so?

4. Even though when people have a Master’s degree, they may not find a good job

Even if someone has a Master’s degree, he or she may not find a good job

In this sentence I consider to sound more natural the use of “Even if” rather than “even
though” because of the meaning that we want the reader to infer. I have also omitted “when”
because it is a collocation brought from Spanish and in English it does not sounds natural
when we put it after “Even though”. I have replaced “people” by “someone” because the
agreement with the following subject is easier made. Commented [U5]: Can you tell the difference:
-even though
-even if
5. I was advised of doing this Master’s degree to improve -even when
?

I was advised to take this Master’s degree to improve my English / my knowledge

There are two wrong collocations. The first one “Advised of” should be replaced by “advise
to + verb” or “advise on something”. I think that the second collocation, “do a Master’s Commented [U6]: OK
degree”, should be replaced by “take a Master’s degree·. In addition to this I think that after Commented [U7]: did you check this collocation?
the verb “improve”, something should be added because it is a transitive verb. Commented [U8]: OK