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SEX EDUCATION IN VIETNAMESE CURRICULUM? AGREE OR DISAGREE? Commented [W1]: ???

In the present days, sex education is a popular key word that almost all all schools Commented [W2]: Word choice.

all around the word are implementing in their curriculum. The application of sex
education in schools will provide teenagers with the correct information to enable
them to make the right choices in life. On the other hand, there are some
countries in East Asia and, Southeast Asia still hesitating about putting it on the Commented [W3]: Word choice

national curriculum because of some strict principles in terms of culture. Vietnam

– a typical conservative nation - has the rate of sex education in schools is very
low, which consequently leads to approximately 300,000 abortions are performed Commented [W4]: Sentence structure.

annually at the age of 15-19, which with number ranging 80-90% are students
(Wikipedia). In my view point, sex education is basically education about
sexuality, contraceptive methods, how to prevent sexually transmitted diseases,
the importance of protection and last but not least, attitudes and principles about
sex. Hence, sex education should be incorporated into Vietnamese teaching
program.

The main reason children have sex early is because they are curious. Most Commented [W5]: Word choice.

teenagers at the ages of 14 and 18 have significant changes in physiology and Commented [W6]: Ambiguous.

appearance, thus stimulating their curiosity about body issues. Moreover, during
this time the desire to explore the opposite sex becomes more intense. Due to the Commented [W7]: Nonsense.

lack of knowledge about sex, students regularly make mistakes in having sex with
their boyfriends or girlfriends. If schools show them the consequences behind their
actions and the risk they are taking, they could less want to have sex. The best
method is that establish sex education classes when children enter the secondary Commented [W8]: Change into Passive voice.
school. They will taught about issues relating to human sexuality, including Commented [W9]: will be taught

emotional relations and responsibilities, human sexual anatomy, sexual activity,

sexual reproduction, age of consent, reproductive health, reproductive rights,
safe sex, birth control and sexual abstinence (Wikipedia). It will certainly raise their Commented [W10]: For sure???

awareness.

Secondly, a huge proportion of Vietnamese parents don't explain their children

about sex problems. Most of them have been influenced by conservative culture
since they were young. They think that conversing with their children about
sensitive problems is extremely weird. Besides, one of the Vietnamese customs is
that it is said to allow people to marry early when they are still teenagers.
Therefore, some parents even were pregnant when they were too young leading Commented [W11]: Ambiguous!

to the lack of knowledge about family planning. That is a reason why they cannot
teach their children about protecting themselves. This is the time when school
becomes the second family supporting students to decide the right path for the Commented [W12]: became

future.

Finally, there are many information about sex sources that uncontrollablye Commented [W13]: Problems with determiners.
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appearing in social medias that children can easily approach. By just one clicks
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on a certain link to a website or, adverts containing sexual messages and pictures
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are posted to the side of the pages as if they were normal. Teenagers could get Commented [W17]: Sentence fragment.

lost easily to such websites and unknowingly received incorrect information about Commented [W18]: Ambiguous.

sex. The school plays an essential role in emphasizing students that sex can be Commented [W19]: Word choice.

dangerous unless they truly know about it. Hence, it is important that sex
education is implemented in schools so that teenagers can receive the Commented [W20]: Subjunctive mood.

information they need from the right sources.

In conclusion, children and teenagers need good and correct information from the right Commented [W21]: Poor word choice.

sources about sex, sexual relationships and various other related issues in order to make
a right decision for their present and future. Not only schools but also the parents have
responsibilities for educate the future generation about protecting themselves. Commented [W22]: Collocation.
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