Use the following Structure

1. Introduction
2. Facts
3. Opinion
4. Evaluation
5. Conclusion

Lets write an essay on this topic:

In order for any work of art- for ex , a film, a novel, a poem or a song –to have merit, it
must be understandable to most people.

1. Introduction (if you agree)

- Three lines
- The first two lines need to bend premise or the statement
- These two line should be broader enough
- Third line should announce your position

Sample Introduction: (agree)

I feel art is as important endeavor as science or trading. It is a phenomenal for social
well-being and cultural sense in today’s technology centric world. So I completely agree
with the author and I shall present views on how arts shall preserve merit if it is
presented in understable way in a society.

Fact
- Brainstorm
- List out minimum 5 distinct ideas
- Based on ideas construct at least 2 facts per idea. This will make nearly 10- 12
sentences
What is a fact?

- Anything closer to reality or talks about things on it natural course

- Historical, psychological, scientific fact ets

In order for any work of art- for ex , a film, a novel, a poem or a song –to have merit, it
must be understandable to most people.

Now Rephrase the question to generate points…….

“Why do you say art should be in an understandable way to have a merit”?
1. Art has human values
2. Art is an expressive medium – needs to be reciprocated
3. Art gets fame
4. Art contribute academics or education
5. Arts nurtures society
Sample facts (Factual Reasoning)

The word ‘art’ means pertaining to senses and it is important for people to have healthy
quotient at their senses. The core factors of humans values such as empathy, moral
and ethics are nothing but the components of artistic expressions of human mind.
Through art an artist explains his society and its well-being. Arts informs tradition,
culture, virtues, lifestyle, and education of its contemporariesfor their posterity. Arts in
the form of painting, music, theatrical work, making of artifacts, writing work, always look
out for a consumer who is interested in receiving them. So arts like trading and tech-skill
learning has a consumer base. By keeping arts simple or in a more understandable way
it can be easily reciprocated and practiced. By wide practice or follow of an art, a society
shall be growing forward on its value. It also helps the artists to get fame. The most
famous actors and musicians in the world are the ones who reached people with their
talents by keeping arts understandable. Academia ensures artistics works are to be
clear which conveys a social message or human emotion. Arts in its simple form will find
spontaneous ways to reach the mass, like every other commodity, arts is essential
goods to be reached to the human beings for social well-being

Opinion

Now say your wishes

Followed by some story…..

In art schools, there should be basic lessons or curriculum to enforce students to

produce clear and understandable works. This is because as the modern art is always
complained for hazy, vague or only aligned with an intellecuatal esoterism. This restricts
flow of art work only to similar minded people. So I feel art schools should use a
curriculum which not only inspects few creative rigors but also inspects logics on a
student’s work. To corroborate my view, I shall contemplate the most recent incident
that actually aroused international humanitarian grounds and made global headlines.
The recent picture of a three old Syrian refugee Alan Kurdi who was washed away dead
at the seashore of Turkey after denying entry into eurpoean countries. The boy was
apparently died on waters after the boat wreckage and his body later washed ashore.
The photograph was shared by millions of people on internet and published in world
magazines. The simple photograph which has no intricate angling or weather watch
delivered a humanely message to people. As an effect, the policies of European union
is now being hotly debated whether it requires such rigorous immigration laws.

Evaluation

- You need to agree that there are good things on the other side. You need to say two
best points from other side.
- Despite knowing the goodness on the side, you need to justify why do you attach to
your side.
- Evaluation is a part of your conclusion

It may be argued that to retain creativity and freedom of expression art works can be as
complex, intricate and cryptic. I do also believe that arts unlike other subjects cannot be
ruled to a dogmatic approach as the other siders shall complain. However, artists and
arts are in a crucial position to redeem integrity in our society and make the people
more sensible and responsible. If the act of creativity lengthens the time of receiving
arts from the artists, the society needs to wait for all time before it gets better. I feel art
is nothing but mass communication.
Conclusion
So I firmly posit that art must be in its most natural format for wide variety of people. If
arts could reach minds of people, it can be considered education, hygiene, morality,
virtues, economics have already reached them.
English Sir: As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability
of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your
reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you
should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain
how these considerations shape your position.
The statement linking technology negatively with free thinking plays on recent human
experience over the past century. Surely there has been no time in history where the
lived lives of people have changed more dramatically. A quick reflection on a typical day
reveals how technology has revolutionized the world. Most people commute to work in
an automobile that runs on an internal combustion engine. During the workday, chances
are high that the employee will interact with a computer that processes information on
silicon bridges that are .09 microns wide. Upon leaving home, family members will be
reached through wireless networks that utilize satellites orbiting the earth. Each of these
common occurrences could have been inconceivable at the turn of the 19th century.
The statement attempts to bridge these dramatic changes to a reduction in the ability for
humans to think for themselves. The assumption is that an increased reliance on
technology negates the need for people to think creatively to solve previous quandaries.
Looking back at the introduction, one could argue that without a car, computer, or
mobile phone, the hypothetical worker would need to find alternate methods of
transport, information processing and communication. Technology short circuits this
thinking by making the problems obsolete.
However, this reliance on technology does not necessarily preclude the creativity that
marks the human species. The prior examples reveal that technology allows for
convenience. The car, computer and phone all release additional time for people to live
more efficiently. This efficiency does not preclude the need for humans to think for
themselves. In fact, technology frees humanity to not only tackle new problems, but may
itself create new issues that did not exist without technology. For example, the
proliferation of automobiles has introduced a need for fuel conservation on a global
scale. With increasing energy demands from emerging markets, global warming
becomes a concern inconceivable to the horse-and-buggy generation. Likewise
dependence on oil has created nation-states that are not dependent on taxation,
allowing ruling parties to oppress minority groups such as women. Solutions to these
complex problems require the unfettered imaginations of maverick scientists and
politicians.
In contrast to the statement, we can even see how technology frees the human
imagination. Consider how the digital revolution and the advent of the internet has
allowed for an unprecedented exchange of ideas. WebMD, a popular internet portal for
medical information, permits patients to self research symptoms for a more informed
doctor visit. This exercise opens pathways of thinking that were previously closed off to
the medical layman. With increased interdisciplinary interactions, inspiration can arrive
from the most surprising corners. Jeffrey Sachs, one of the architects of the UN
Millenium Development Goals, based his ideas on emergency care triage techniques.
The unlikely marriage of economics and medicine has healed tense, hyperinflation
environments from South America to Eastern Europe.
This last example provides the most hope in how technology actually provides hope to
the future of humanity. By increasing our reliance on technology, impossible goals can
now be achieved. Consider how the late 20th century witnessed the complete
elimination of smallpox. This disease had ravaged the human race since prehistorical
days, and yet with the technology of vaccines, free thinking humans dared to imagine a
world free of smallpox. Using technology, battle plans were drawn out, and smallpox
was systematically targeted and eradicated.
Technology will always mark the human experience, from the discovery of fire to the
implementation of nanotechnology. Given the history of the human race, there will be no
limit to the number of problems, both new and old, for us to tackle. There is no need to
retreat to a Luddite attitude to new things, but rather embrace a hopeful posture to the
possibilities that technology provides for new avenues of human imagination.

English Sir: Rater Commentary for Essay Response — Score 6

The author of this essay stakes out a clear and insightful position on the issue and
follows the specific instructions by presenting reasons to support that position. The
essay cogently argues that technology does not decrease our ability to think for
ourselves, but merely provides "additional time for people to live more efficiently." In
fact, the problems that have developed alongside the growth of technology (pollution,
political unrest in oil-producing nations) actually call for more creative thinking, not less.
In further examples, the essay shows how technology allows for the linking of ideas that
may never have been connected in the past (like medicine and economic models),
pushing people to think in new ways. Examples are persuasive and fully developed;
reasoning is logically sound and well supported.
Ideas in the essay are connected logically, with effective transitions used both between
paragraphs ("However" or "In contrast to the statement") and within paragraphs.
Sentence structure is varied and complex and the essay clearly demonstrates facility
with the "conventions of standard written English (i.e., grammar, usage and
mechanics)," with only minor errors appearing. Thus, this essay meets all the
requirements for receiving a top score, a 6.
Essay Response — Score 1
Humans have invented machines but they have forgot it and have started everything
technically so clearly their thinking process is deterioating.
Rater Commentary for Essay Response — Score 1
The essay is clearly on topic, as evidenced by the writer's usage of the more significant
terms from the prompt: "technically" (technologically), "humans," "thinking" (think) and
"deteriorating" (deteriorate). Such usage is the only clear evidence of understanding.
Meaning aside, the brevity of the essay (one sentence) clearly indicates the writer's
inability to develop a response that follows the specific instructions given ("Discuss the
extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement above and explain your
reasoning for the position you take").
The language, too, is clearly level 1, as the sentence fails to achieve coherence. The
coherent phrases in this one-sentence response are those tied to the prompt: "Humans
have invented machines" and "their thinking process is deteriorating." Otherwise, the
point being made is unintelligible.
[3/2, 11:08 AM] English Sir: SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to
Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville prove
that Corporateville is a superior place to live then Middlesburg, the home of
SuperCorp’s current headquarters. Moreover, Middleburg is a predominately urban area
and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers
prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than
Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore,
Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
[3/2, 11:27 AM] English Sir: With that out of the way, let’s start with the Intro. The Intro
should be short and sweet. In fact, the intro for the Argument should really not contain
any novel ideas. You simply want to say that the argument is unwarranted for a number
of reasons. If you find yourself hung up on the intro, write it at the end. The key to the
essay is the body, in which you identify the unwarranted assumptions. You do not want
to waste precious minutes fiddling about with the Intro.

Introduction
The argument makes a number of unwarranted assumptions regarding the corporation’s
proposed move from Middleburg to Corporateville . Taken as a whole, these unstated
assumptions render the argument highly suspect. Indeed, if these unstated assumptions
do not hold true, then the argument totally falls apart.
Next we have the body paragraphs, in which you will point out the unstated
assumptions that render the argument invalid. You can lump all into one massive
paragraph or you can—as I do here—spread them into three paragraphs, one for each
unstated assumption.

Paragraph #1:
The argument assumes that the increase in homeowners is directly correlated with
improved living, or, as the argument states, “a superior place to live.” Housing could
simply be cheaper, causing an influx of people. That is the increase of population does
not mean that everybody wants to live in Corporateville because it is such a great place.
Indeed low-priced housing and overcrowding clearly would make Corporatville a less
superior place to live.
Notice how I ended the argument by referring back to what the instructions asked us to
do: “Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the
implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.”

Body Paragraph #2
Another unstated assumption the argument makes is that what is superior for residents
is the same as what is superior for corporations. Thus, even if everybody wants to move
to Corporateville because it is a superior place to live, that doesn’t mean it is a superior
place for a company to move its headquarters. For instance, perhaps Corporateville has
an excellent public school system and/or natural parks. Neither of these would make
Corporateville a superior place for a corporation. Unless the argument can show that
there is clear reason that Corporateville is superior to Middletown for a corporation, then
the corporation could be making the wrong decision in moving to Corporateville.
Body Paragraph #3
For this body paragraph, I would focus on the survey. This is probably the strongest
unstated assumption remaining (the survey is a valid measure). However, you can
choose to focus on taxes or urban vs. non-urban. Do not, however, try to jam all the
assumptions. Your focus is to show that the essay makes many unproven assumptions
and is thus invalid. Pointing out several assumptions is enough. Unless you have time,
do not be exhaustive.

Conclusion
Like the intro, the conclusion should be short and sweet. Do not add new information;
simply give a brief summary of what you’ve already said. Something along the lines of:
The argument makes a number of unstated assumptions that seriously undermine its
validity. Unless these assumptions are addressed the argument falls apart, and the
corporation could very well make a major mistake shifting operations from Middleburg to
Corporateville.
[3/2, 11:34 AM] English Sir: The following appeared in a memorandum issued by the
strategic planning department at Omni Inc.
"Mesa Foods, a manufacturer of snack foods that currently markets its products within a
relatively small region of the country, has a strong growth potential. Mesa enjoyed a 20
percent increase in profits last year, and its best-selling product, Diabolique Salsa, has
had increased sales over each of the past three years. Since Omni Inc. is interested in
reaching 14-to-25 year olds, the age group that consumes the most snack food, we
should buy Mesa Foods, and concentrate in particular on marketing Diabolique Salsa
throughout the country."
[3/2, 11:43 AM] English Sir: The given argument arrives at the conclusion that buying
Mesa Foods is a good strategic plan for Omni Inc. as Omni Inc. is interested in reaching
the age group that consumes snack food the most and Mesa Foods has a strong growth
potential in this field. The conclusion seems apt in the light of the fact that Mesa Foods
does have the scope for growth in countrywide distribution as well. However, on
analyzing the given argument from all perspectives, one can identify various loopholes
and flaws that make this argument weak. These flaws are a result of vague
assumptions and facts that have been presented as evidence in support of the claim
made by the argument.
The backbone of the given argument is that Mesa Foods is a manufacturer of snack
foods and it has a strong growth potential and this is the main reason why Omni Inc. is
interested in buying it so that they can market Mesa Foods' Diabolique Salsa throughout
the country. A crucial aspect of this strategic plan is that Mesa Foods currently markets
its products within a relatively smaller region of the country. This fact would seem
insignificant to a reader who reads the argument for the first time, but on closer analysis
this fact emerges as the weakest link in the argument. The existence of this fact is
making the assumption that buying Mesa Foods and concentrating on marketing
Diabolique Salsa throughout the country would be a correct decision for Omni Inc.,
seem illogical. The reasons for this have been brought out in the succeeding
paragraphs.
Firstly, Mesa Foods has a strong growth potential and the fact that it enjoyed an
increase in profits last year may be due to the reason that it operates in a relatively
smaller region of the country. As the region is small, Mesa Foods probably enjoys
monopoly in its field due to lack of competition in the form of other companies marketing
the same kind of products in that region.
Secondly, one cannot fathom whether Diabolique Salsa will be accepted by people
across the country or not. There may be snack food giants who have been marketing
their snack foods in the remaining parts of the country and the age group that is being
targeted by Omni Inc. would already be used to having a different brand of snack food.
Diabolique Salsa will have to break that market in order to establish a foothold in the
countrywide sales.

Thirdly, the increase in overall profit for Mesa Foods and also the sales of Diabolique
Salsa will take a new dimension once the product is launched throughout the country.
The competition offered by other companies marketing the same type of snack foods
across the country may reduce the profit margins incurred by the sales of Diabolique
Salsa as compared to when it was being marketed in a smaller region. Also, there is a
probability of reduction of profit margins because there will be an increase in the
distribution cost as the product now has to be sent to all corners of the country as
compared to the earlier scenario when it was being distributed within a smaller region.

In view of the above, it can be said that the conclusion presented in the argument
sounds unconvincing due to lack of substantial evidence as the plan of buying Mesa
Foods may not be as profitable as it apparently seems to be. The mention of additional
evidence in the form of existing status of different brands of snack foods being marketed
across the country would have aided in establishing the conclusion of the argument with
certainty. In its present form, the conclusion presented by the argument fails to appear
acceptable due to lack of credible evidence.
[3/2, 12:12 PM] English Sir: Argument: 1
The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the
Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.
"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of
restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the
exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled
in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our
own set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting."
[3/2, 12:18 PM] English Sir: Essay
The given argument brings out the fact that the average property values have tripled in
Brookville over the last seven years. There may be numerous reasons for this steady
escalation in property values. The rise in the average property values may not
necessarily be an outcome of the efforts put in for landscaping community�s yards and
deliberating upon the colors of the exteriors of homes. The importance of paying
attention to details like landscaping of lawns and house painting may add to the scenic
beauty of the community as seen by an outsider, but that alone does not suffice as a
reason for the rise in property values.
The argument is weakened by the existence of several factors that may have directly or
indirectly affected the average property values of the Brookville community in the last
seven years. The location of the community is a compelling reason for a substantial
increase in the property rates. Proximity to shopping centers, airport, railway stations
and bus stands is a deciding factor for such an increase. Rise in property rates of a
particular area may also be attributed to infrastructural development over a period of
time. Such development may include establishment of civic amenities like hospitals,
schools and roads. Infrastructural developments attract leading companies to open
factories and outlets in the vicinity of the community leading to an increase in job
opportunities. All these factors in addition to the security situation prevalent in the area
may be responsible for escalation of property prices.

The situation with respect to the homeowners in Brookville community may have been
different seven years ago and adopting the same set of restrictions in the present time
does not imply a similar effect on the property values in Deerhaven Acres. The
argument could have been substantiated with additional evidence in support of the
claim that the rise in property values was a direct implication of the set of restrictions
adopted by the home owners in the Brookville community. However, one cannot ignore
the other factors, highlighted in the previous paragraph, which may directly or indirectly
play a significant role in the appreciation of property values of the Brookville community.
The given argument could have been further strengthened if the writer had mentioned
landscaping of lawns and house painting as one of the probable reasons for the growth
in property values instead of citing it as the only reason or if he had made a fleeting
reference to the other factors affecting escalation of property values. In its present form,
the argument is unconvincing due to lack of substantial logic in support of its claim.
[3/2, 12:23 PM] English Sir: "Of the two leading real estate firms in our town, Adams
Realty and Fitch Realty, Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In
contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue
last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged
$168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well:
ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last
year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month.
Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams."
[3/2, 12:36 PM] English Sir: Essay
The given argument highlights the superiority of Adams Realty over Fitch Realty and the
claim is supported with the help of three major points. The first one is the difference in
the number of real estate agents employed by each of the real estate firms. The second
evidence is the difference in the revenues and home sales of both the real estate firms.
The third evidence is the writer's own experience in selling his home. The succeeding
paragraphs analyze each of these three points to evaluate them for their suitability as
relevant proofs in terms of the claim being made by the writer that Adams Realty is
clearly superior to Fitch Realty and thus one should approach Adams Realty if one
wants to sell his home quickly at a good price.
The major flaw in the argument is that the author has not clearly specified the aspect of
superiority that Adams Realty has with respect to Fitch Realty. The argument could
have been presented in a better manner if the writer had specified as to whether the
superiority being attributed to Adams Realty is by virtue of its profit making records or its
statistics with respect to the number of real estate agents and the revenue incurred
annually. In either of the cases, none of them would have sufficed as adequate reasons
for stating that Adams Realty would be able to sell a house quickly and at a good price.
In view of the above, the first two points brought out by the writer in support of his claim
fall short of doing the needful. If we are considering the superiority in terms of
professional competence, then the number of real estate agents that a company has is
irrelevant. The expertise of a firm in carrying out the task undertaken by it cannot be
judged by the size of its employees in numbers as the quality of services rendered is not
dependant on the number of its employees. If the superiority is being considered in
terms of the annual turnover, then Adams Realty does stand out as a superior firm as
compared to Fitch Realty. However, this does not suffice as sufficient evidence to draw
the conclusion that Adams Realty will be able to sell a house quickly and at a good
price.

The third evidence provided by the writer is the weakest link in the argument. Firstly, the
example quoted by the writer refers to an incident that took place 10 years ago and by
no means can it be related to the situation in the present time. Secondly, the location
and the condition of the second house that was sold by the author would have played a
significant role in selling it within a month at a good price. The argument is substantially
weakened by the fact that the locations and conditions of the two houses that are being
used to highlight the third evidence have not been stated. The claim would have been
adequately supported had both the houses been in the same location and in the same
condition. A buyer may be willing to pay a higher price for a house provided it is situated
at a location that suits him or if the house happens to be in a very good state. It is not
necessary that this may be the same case with most of the other houses as well.
Therefore, the generic claim that one should go to Adams Realty for selling houses
quickly at a good price is not convincing as the argument has failed to present solid
evidence in its support.
[3/2, 12:40 PM] English Sir: The following was written as a part of an application for a
small business loan by a group of developers in the city of Monroe.
"A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently,
the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have
the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000
people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians
live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which
airs every weeknight. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan
spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. It is clear that the C Note cannot
help but make money."
[3/2, 12:53 PM] English Sir: The given argument is initiated with the claim that setting up
a jazz music club in Monroe would be an immensely profitable enterprise. This
argument utilizes some assumptions and presents facts to arrive at the conclusion that
the proposed jazz music club, C Note, will make money. This conclusion rests on
various statements that have been presented in the form of evidence for supporting the
claim that has been made. An overview of the argument would lead the reader to be
convinced of the authenticity of the claim made. However, on closer scrutiny one can
see various weak links in the argument that stand out as conspicuous logical flaws.
Each of these flaws has been discussed in the succeeding paragraphs.
The assumption that jazz is extremely popular in Monroe has been made on the basis
of four facts presented by the author. The first fact brings out that over 100,000 people
attended the jazz festival last summer. The number of people attending such a festival
does not necessarily indicate the inclination of Monroe�'s population for jazz music. A
majority of people attending the festival may have gone there out of sheer curiosity and
many people may have come to attend it from the neighboring towns. The second fact
presented in support of the said claim is that there are several well known jazz
musicians who reside in Monroe. This fact is not related to the claim made in any way
whatsoever. The musicians residing in Monroe are not an indication of the entire
community's interest in jazz music. It may be a coincidence that they happen to be
residing in Monroe.
The third fact is the radio program Jazz Nightly which has been highlighted as the
highest rated program in Monroe. The section of people who were a part of the survey
for rating the said program and the time at which this survey had been carried out has
not been brought out. There is no mention of the statistics related to whether all
residents of Monroe, irrespective of their age and profession, were included in the
process for rating or not. Therefore, this fact cannot be identified as a reason for proving
the popularity of jazz music among the entire population of Monroe. The last fact
presented by the writer is the weakest of all the four facts. The information that a typical
jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment, according to a national
survey, is not an indication of the popularity of jazz music in Monroe as the
concentration of jazz fans in Monroe has not been mentioned in this survey.

Therefore, in light of the above, it can be seen that the argument fails to provide strong
evidence in support of the claim that jazz music is extremely popular in Monroe. Hence,
the claim that setting up a jazz music club in Monroe would be an extremely profitable
enterprise is questionable. Another glaring loophole in the argument is that if jazz was
indeed so popular in Monroe then the nearest jazz music club wouldn't have been 65
miles away; rather numerous jazz music clubs would have sprung up in Monroe. The
success of a jazz music club in Monroe is largely dependent on the popularity of jazz
music in Monroe which now seems questionable in light of the unreliable facts
presented in its support. Therefore, the assumption that C Note cannot help but make
money sounds implausible due to the lack of solid evidence in its support and the basis
that has been provided for this claim is ambiguous resulting in an argument that has
numerous logical flaws.