Escolar Documentos
Profissional Documentos
Cultura Documentos
by Haonan Zheng
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ORIGINALITY REPORT
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SIMILARITY INDEX
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INTERNET SOURCES
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PUBLICATIONS
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STUDENT PAPERS
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always.perpetual.com.au
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Submitted to Universiti Teknologi MARA
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ro.uow.edu.au
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firescholars.seu.edu
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ddd.uab.cat
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eprints.lse.ac.uk
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cms-business.sydney.edu.au
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Kyoung Tae Kim, Somer G. Anderson, Martin
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C. Seay. "Financial Knowledge and Short-Term
and Long-Term Financial Behaviors of
Millennials in the United States", Journal of
Family and Economic Issues, 2018
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onlinelibrary.wiley.com
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Anne-Maree Sawyer, Sara James. "Are baby
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boomer women redefining retirement?",
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Sociology Compass, 2018
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journal.tplondon.com
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Worthington, Andrew C. "Financial literacy and
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Journal of Financial Services Marketing, 2013.
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academic.oup.com
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John Gibson, Chao Li. "The “Belt and Road
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Initiative” and comparative regional productivity
in China", Asia & the Pacific Policy Studies,
2018
Publication
Instructor
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demonstrated, however needed more specif ic
information on the role of government to show a
thorough understanding of what is currently being
done.
/100
Cases are simple but reasonably well executed.
Could use f urther evidence of the benef it of the
strategies, or explored other complex issues to
demonstrate an expert understanding.
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QM Grammar
Incorrect grammar
QM Sp.
Spelling error
QM Vague
Unclear:
When making a point in one of your body paragraphs, one of the most common mistakes is to
not of f er enough details. A paragraph without much detail will seem vague and sketchy. A paper
is always strengthened when your claims are as specif ic as possible, The more detailed
evidence you of f er, the more ref erence points your reader will have. Remember that you are
communicating your argument to a reader who has only your description to go by. Someone
who reads your essay will not automatically know what you mean to express, so you have to
supply details, to show the reader what you mean, not just tell him or her.
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QM Grammar
Incorrect grammar
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Comment 1
This was renounced last year.
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Comment 2
This is a f airly dated ref erence.
Comment 3
There are several specif ic initiatives that the government has introduced to help with the gap,
such as spouse contribution rebate, contribution splitting, and catch-up concessional
contributions.
Comment 4
This sentence is contradictory. Need a clearer explanation.
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Comment 5
Needed to increase the f ocus on what the role of government and other stakeholders is and
what they are doing about this.
QM Sp.
Spelling error
Comment 6
I f ind this explanation conf using. There is no $2,820 in the example? And she previously was
not contributing anything additional?
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Comment 7
Ah, ok. Now I get where that f igure came f rom. The meaning of what was written above does
not match what has occurred in the table.
Comment 8
It is a good idea to also show the projected balance at retirement based on this strategy and
without. When advising you should do this as it communicates the long term benef it to the
client.
QM Awk.
Awkward:
The expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.
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Comment 9
Up to 10%. Need to be clear with what you are saying as you do not have them withdrawing
10% in the table below.
Comment 10
I get a dif f erent tax f igure. Have you used the new tax rates? Have you included the pension
rebate?
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Comment 11
This should be relevant to your case studies, as in challenges to the recommended strategies
or implementation. Such as overcoming inertia, or the government changing the rules.
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Comment 12
Again, this should be relevant to your case studies. What other strategies could be
recommended?
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CRITERION 1
CRITERION 2
CRITERION 3
Case studies (15%) Learning Outcomes 1.2, 1.3, 1.4 Apply advanced
theoretical and technical knowledge as it applies to superannuation,
retirement planning, taxation, and social security.
CRITERION 4
CRITERION 5