TASK 2:

The use of violence in music lyrics, video games and films seen by children is
causing concern in many societies. What problems may be caused by this type
of violent imagery, and what steps could be taken to lessen the impact on young
people?
Over the past years, some concerns have been raised in lots of societies regarding the negative
effects on youngsters that could be brought about by the media exposing them to the material with
an explicit violation. This could cause children to problems like being biased toward such materials
or mental illness.

The gravest problem could be the children's general inclination to the violation /which could lead/
leading/ to them to contributing to some juvenile delinquency or antisocial behavior under the
influence of negative peer pressure. Another underlying problem appears to be a gradual change
in people's taste which may result in degradation of artistic materials whether in music or visual
entertainment industry. With audience seeking for more explosion and gore, producers who prefer
to maximize their profit tend to invest in less artistic genres of arts for example post-apocalyptic
or thriller movies rather than romantic ones. Finally, violation seems to be an underlying factor
that could result in some mental diseases in children like ever-existing stress or sleeping disorder.
This could simply make them underperforming in their educational activities. Commented [A1]: [ + infinitive without to ] The wind is making
my eyes water.
make sb do sth
Turning to possible solutions, the most effective remedy would be a revolutionary change in the When make has the meaning 'to force', it is followed by a verb in the
infinitive without 'to'.
media's approach regarding the violation. This could be happen by promoting less-violate Do not say 'make someone to do something', say make someone do
materials through advertisement. Figureheads can also play a more important role by speaking out something .
They made us to pay extra for the drinks.
about the value of pure art. A further measure to address the situation could be outlawing the They made us pay extra for the drinks.
Warning: in passive sentences, use the infinitive with 'to'.
violation depiction in the media. By utilizing such censorship, parents can be less concerned about Don't say 'be made do something', say be made to do something .
the material which is accessible to their children. Ultimately, to tackle this problem, the
government could bring in law some initiatives which categorize video games and movies for each
age-group by providing some parental guides on their packaging.

Overall, there are some solutions to deal with the problem like banning or limiting materials which
could even be more effective by taking some measures to promote other genres of productions.

Task 2 Task Coherence and Lexical Grammatical Range

Response Cohesion Resources and Accuracy

Band 8.0 8.0 7.0 7.0

Estimated Band Score: 7.5

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