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Eric Erreguin
English-101
Instructor: M. Batty
30 May 2019
Revising Improvements

For my portfolio, I had set the principles for myself. Primarily to submit my finest work

this semester. I spent more time on this assignment, than the previous ones I had revised before

submitting. Also, to learn from my previous mistakes and acquire a new developing skill. I am

not ready to declare myself a great writer, but I am confident to say I am more skilled prior to

semester beginning. For when I advance to the next level, my preparation is awaiting with skills I

acknowledged this current semester. From the skills I have developed, I am hoping to use it

throughout my education, and my following career.

The testimonials in this final draft, I had decided to write about undocumented students,

who enroll into DACA. Primarily from the first assignment, I summed up my introduction on

how undocumented students, have obstacles to overcome. The limited opportunities as citizens,

and their struggles to our society. However, following the thesis, I did not submit the rest of the

assignment to bring the reader in. The readers did not clarify what my statement is. I do believe

there could have been more to mention, which is why I am satisfied with my revision.

One of my biggest struggles, was citing my sources. My sources were listed in the back,

but I did not submit the correct way. Quoting an author was not properly inserted. The data base,

was accurate, and using estimations from current stats. Crediting my source was an improvement

in my latest draft, was more detailed than my first submission.

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In my latest draft, I began with a similar introduction, but with a new thesis that can help

the reader relate. An introduction that speaks about how the average student may take their

opportunities for granted, compared to others who have less liberty. I did not mention this I my

first assigned draft.

I am more relieved of my concluding paragraph. My previous essay, I did not have a

concluding paragraph. As if the essay was to be continued. For my conclusion, I did a summary

of the main thesis, and the body paragraph. And stated my final thoughts on what DACA

students should be granted. In conclusion, I had a tutor review my final draft to correct my

mistakes as in punctuations, misspelling and question information they did not understand or

what information I needed to include.