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Thank you for giving us so many amazing lectures. I have learned a lot on writing through out
this semester. Before attending the class, my primary goal of writing is to achieve high scores. I
was always thinking about what the teacher likes and never thought about my actual audiences.
Now, whenever I started to write, the first thing I would consider is who are my audiences. Also,
throughout analysis on different essays, papers, and articles, I gradually learned how audiences
and disciplines can shape related genres, and how significant influence audiences can generate
I also learned how to treat writing properly, most importantly about brainstorming. Before this
quarter, I seldom use creative thinking before writing as most of my writings appeared during
exams where there was not enough time for me to brainstorm. Therefore, when I first wrote my
WP, I was scared, not only because I feared revisions but also because I still treated it like those
one-time exam essays. After several times of project-building and revising classes, now I no
longer fear writing down a shitty first draft. I treated it more like a freewriting to record all my
thoughts. I think this is a huge improvement in my attitude towards writing and can help me
For this final portfolio, I chose my writing project 1 and 2. Even though all three of my writing
projects get the same score, this does not mean that they are of similar qualities. After I finishing
writing my WP3 and looked back to my old WPs, I thought that compared with WP3, they both
have great space of improvements. Revise these two WPs can help me look into problems related
noticed that the structure is awful. Ironically, in high schools, I always thought I can generate a
clear logic flow during writing. Therefore, the first thing I did is to summarize each paragraph
and look for a new sequence to arrange each idea. When revising my WP2, I also found similar
problems. Even though my idea arrangement was much better, in some parts the logic between
paragraphs were still weird and even made me, the original writer, confused when re-reading it.
So, after my revision, you can see that both WPs have a completely different sequence of
paragraphs. The ideas are showcased in a more logic way and each paragraph will have an
obvious thesis.
The second major revision I did in both paragraphs is on styles. Before going to colleges, I
preferred using long, complex sentences as suggested by my SAT teachers. I once thought that
the use of long sentences can help to make my essay looks more mature. For WP1, almost all the
sentences I wrote are extremely long. For WP2, situation is getting better, but I can still find
some long, redundant sentences. Consequently, in the final portfolio, I paraphrased these long
sentences are either broken up or paraphrased. Compared with the original submission draft, the
two writing projects will have more sentence varieties and easier to read.
The third major difference is on the addition of evidences. For both portfolios, there are two
types of evidences: evidences from reading materials and evidences from essays to be analyzed.
When writing previous writing projects, I did not realize how important the reading materials
were in terms of supporting my statement. Therefore, the addition of these materials was more
like to fulfill a requirement rather than to make it as an evidence. This wrong attitude towards
reading materials lead to an awful evidence adding manner. My addition of evidence did not set
any stages, and the contents following the evidences usually have no correlations with the
evidence (Stedman, 2011, p.247). This is really annoying for readers because it is hard for
readers to understand why I put evidence here. So, in the final portfolio, I rearrange almost
every piece of evidence from reading materials. I tried my best to fit each evidence into a proper
language scenario. The evidence from reading materials in final portfolio should be more
As a physics major student, I may not have intense writing assignments in the future, but I still
need to face lab reports within next few quarters, and eventually I will write my own essays. This
class is my first-time experiencing college writing. It shows me what college writing looks like
and its requirements. With the knowledge of genre and discipline, and the detailed analysis of
essays in my discipline, I start to have a clear image of who my audiences are and what they
want. Also, equipped with all the technique learnt during classes and revision workshops, such as
the inclusion of evidences and different rhetoric elements, I am now fully confident that I can
write beautiful essays. My first college writing out of Writing 2 will be next quarter in Art
History 6B if I successfully get out from my waitlist. I am now looking forward to using all the
In the end, I want to say thank you to you for leading us to college writing and help us improve
our writing skills. What you’ve taught us in class will not only be helpful in my future college
writing but even helpful after my graduation because writing will absolutely be an essential skill
Sincerely
Hanjie Wang