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Caruso ENGL 1103 15 February 2012 Salem Witch Trials The Salem Witch Trials began the county Essex of Massachusetts in the Salem Village during January of 1692. Although these trials initially began in Salem Village, the panic became widespread quickly and soon the trials encompassed others towns including Andover, Maine. Throughout these trials one hundred fifty six people were accused and arrested for practicing witchcraft. Out of the accused, nineteen of them were executed and many of them died in the prison of illnesses. Rev. Samuel Parris, his daughter and niece played the largest roles in the beginning of the trials and continued to be the main players throughout the entirety of the trials. The trials began in January of 1692 when Samuel Parris daughter and niece began having fits which could not be explained as epileptic by William Griggs. After examining Abigail Williams and Elizabeth Parris, Griggs diagnosed the two as being under an Evil Hand (Godbeer 179). According to
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The break between the paragraphs is too large. Check the MLA Format and Works Cited doc on the Moodle page to fix it. Who was William Griggs?

another minister, Deodat Lawson, some of Abigails fits included her acting as if she could fly and deliriously talking about how she would not take The Book being offered to her, and that the Bible was surely the Divels Book (Lawson 154). News of the girls fits made it across the Salem Village quickly and the people looked to Parris as the reverend for answers. Because the girls afflictions werent cured after a month of praying and fasting, Parris instructed the two girls to name their tormenters. Warrants for arrest were immediately issued for Tituba, the Parris slave; Sarah Good, a homeless woman; and Sarah Osborne, a women who moved to Salem thirty years before. Soon the girls were accusing people from all over the county of witchcraft (Godbeer 179, 180).
I was a little confused when I read this sentence and I had to go back a reread it to understand the information. I think what made it so confusing was the amount of information in one sentence and how it was worded.

Once the first three Salem women had been accused by the afflicted girls, the witchcraft epidemic was officially underway.
When revising and adding on to your paper, make sure to stick to the intro paragraph. From that paragraph, it sounds like you are going to discuss the accused witchcraft people and their lives as a prisoner. If you are going to elaborate more on the topic, be sure to put a brief description in the intro paragraph. This draft is well written and therefore I couldnt find much to comment on, so keep that up as you continue your paper!